Savannah Love
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Comment from aconley
The words in this flow so beautifully. I love this type of reading and I enjoyed every moment of it. Thank you for sharing your great book. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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The words in this flow so beautifully. I love this type of reading and I enjoyed every moment of it. Thank you for sharing your great book. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Romance Fiction! It kept me reading right to the end. A great description of the beginning of a romance.
The story flowed and connected well. The artwork was
eccentric and it enhanced the read. Thank you for a well
written Romance Fiction..........harmony13
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Excellent Romance Fiction! It kept me reading right to the end. A great description of the beginning of a romance.
The story flowed and connected well. The artwork was
eccentric and it enhanced the read. Thank you for a well
written Romance Fiction..........harmony13
Comment Written 29-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from christianpowers
Hello Barbara,
This was an interesting read. The fast pace was great and the intrigue introduced by the light being on and their reactions to it was also spot on.
There were only two issues I had, small ones, but issues nonetheless.
First, this exchange between Paige and Cash...
>>>"I can promise I won't get any paint on you." She grinned.
"You know what I meant." He opened the passenger door.
Paige blinked her big blue eyes and flashed a huge smile. "Moi?"
"I give up." Cash shook his head as he walked around the truck and sat behind the steering wheel.<<<
"Moi" did not seem an appropriate response to his statement. If he'd expressed something more accusatory like, "You know what I meant. Stop being silly." then I wouldn't have even noticed. (see, not a big deal, but I figured I'd mention it since it jumped out at me.)
Next was at the end;
>>>"Come on, Billy Joe, there must be a loose wire." The men followed the ladies inside.
The men were ready to leave for the day, when Paige handed Billy Joe an envelope. "Please give this to your wife.<<< The whole scene goes by with Nala and Paige talking to Cash, and then you introduce Billy Joe by having Cash talk to him. After that I really didn't know how many 'men' there were. A whole work crew could have been with them. I assume it was just Cash and Billy Joe, but a short sentence at the very beginning of the scene to show who is present would be advisable.
That's all I have. Great writing, great pace and an interesting read.
Good job with this.
Christian
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Hello Barbara,
This was an interesting read. The fast pace was great and the intrigue introduced by the light being on and their reactions to it was also spot on.
There were only two issues I had, small ones, but issues nonetheless.
First, this exchange between Paige and Cash...
>>>"I can promise I won't get any paint on you." She grinned.
"You know what I meant." He opened the passenger door.
Paige blinked her big blue eyes and flashed a huge smile. "Moi?"
"I give up." Cash shook his head as he walked around the truck and sat behind the steering wheel.<<<
"Moi" did not seem an appropriate response to his statement. If he'd expressed something more accusatory like, "You know what I meant. Stop being silly." then I wouldn't have even noticed. (see, not a big deal, but I figured I'd mention it since it jumped out at me.)
Next was at the end;
>>>"Come on, Billy Joe, there must be a loose wire." The men followed the ladies inside.
The men were ready to leave for the day, when Paige handed Billy Joe an envelope. "Please give this to your wife.<<< The whole scene goes by with Nala and Paige talking to Cash, and then you introduce Billy Joe by having Cash talk to him. After that I really didn't know how many 'men' there were. A whole work crew could have been with them. I assume it was just Cash and Billy Joe, but a short sentence at the very beginning of the scene to show who is present would be advisable.
That's all I have. Great writing, great pace and an interesting read.
Good job with this.
Christian
Comment Written 29-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Sorry for the late response. I had to wait until I had time to make the correction. Thank you for the eagle eye. I appreciate the help.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Another great chapter. My house is supposd to be haunted as people have seen flashing lights through the window. Summer went too fast!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Another great chapter. My house is supposd to be haunted as people have seen flashing lights through the window. Summer went too fast!!! Debbie
Comment Written 29-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from THE FREAK
Ooh what's in the envelope?
Are you going to continue??? For must know what is inside the concealed paper, Paige is up to no good, I can tell, I have a feeling!
Well that was a very good, very very good story, and I really do want to read the rest my darling. For it flowed with ease upon my tongue and true talent hardly mastered by most writers. Congratulations!!!
All the best
THE FREAK
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Ooh what's in the envelope?
Are you going to continue??? For must know what is inside the concealed paper, Paige is up to no good, I can tell, I have a feeling!
Well that was a very good, very very good story, and I really do want to read the rest my darling. For it flowed with ease upon my tongue and true talent hardly mastered by most writers. Congratulations!!!
All the best
THE FREAK
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nhinchliff
This is the first chapter of yours I've read. It definitely piqued my interest and I'm going back to read some of the earlier ones. The writing is very good, especially the dialogue. I like how you've ended this piece. It makes me want to read the next chapter and find out about the ghost.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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This is the first chapter of yours I've read. It definitely piqued my interest and I'm going back to read some of the earlier ones. The writing is very good, especially the dialogue. I like how you've ended this piece. It makes me want to read the next chapter and find out about the ghost.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Allezw2
Lady BW,
With bumps in the night and mysterious lights that glow when they should not, one might wonder, indeed.
So a nice bantering relationship leads to a mystery.
A spooky south, shades of a troubled past, and we have a story to follow.
Nicely done, not rushed and still deliberate,
Fantasist.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Lady BW,
With bumps in the night and mysterious lights that glow when they should not, one might wonder, indeed.
So a nice bantering relationship leads to a mystery.
A spooky south, shades of a troubled past, and we have a story to follow.
Nicely done, not rushed and still deliberate,
Fantasist.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from dmt1967
Very well written piece I haven't read the book but if this chapter was anything to go by I think I just might have to thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Very well written piece I haven't read the book but if this chapter was anything to go by I think I just might have to thank you for sharing
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
This is a very exiting story! This is developing so nicely. Ghosts in the house is something very interesting to read about. I am enjoying this very much.
GREAT JOB Barbara!!
:)
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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This is a very exiting story! This is developing so nicely. Ghosts in the house is something very interesting to read about. I am enjoying this very much.
GREAT JOB Barbara!!
:)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review
Comment from Meta~Mark
I really enjoyed this dialogue between Cash and Paige and the dialogue flowed with ease and adventure, the lights yikes, what if it is Blackbeard, the ghost..??
excellent story!!!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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I really enjoyed this dialogue between Cash and Paige and the dialogue flowed with ease and adventure, the lights yikes, what if it is Blackbeard, the ghost..??
excellent story!!!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review
