Savannah Love
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Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
So it's back to work for you. Hope you have a good year.
I thoroughly enjoyed this post and found nothing to criticize. I like that, at the end of the chapter, we find out that Paige has been through an apparently miserable affair.
Yankees just can't talk Southern. They butcher it.
Dave
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Barbara,
So it's back to work for you. Hope you have a good year.
I thoroughly enjoyed this post and found nothing to criticize. I like that, at the end of the chapter, we find out that Paige has been through an apparently miserable affair.
Yankees just can't talk Southern. They butcher it.
Dave
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I am glad I have so many Southern fans to keep me honest.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Nice one, Barbara. I enjoyed the tour along with your characters! Cash is so nice. She might have trouble resisting his Southern charm. Seems like he's pretty interested to me.
Enjoyed the read.
Av
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Nice one, Barbara. I enjoyed the tour along with your characters! Cash is so nice. She might have trouble resisting his Southern charm. Seems like he's pretty interested to me.
Enjoyed the read.
Av
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Cash is one of those men too good to be true.
Comment from Deejharrington
A Southern gentleman, a hot body,loves his mom and a kind heart. I'd say he's exactly what Paige and any other girl needs in her life. If he only had an older brother:) She's determined to find her ghost. I can't wait to see if she'll be that happy when she finds one! Another well written and funny to read chapter.
deb
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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A Southern gentleman, a hot body,loves his mom and a kind heart. I'd say he's exactly what Paige and any other girl needs in her life. If he only had an older brother:) She's determined to find her ghost. I can't wait to see if she'll be that happy when she finds one! Another well written and funny to read chapter.
deb
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the review.
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my pleasure
deb
Comment from N.K. Wagner
This is coming along really well, Barbara. You've defined your main characters, have us thinking about pirates and ghosts and how Paige is going to fit in with the ladies, and wondering if Dwayne is going to be a jerk. Looking for ward to more. :) nancy
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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This is coming along really well, Barbara. You've defined your main characters, have us thinking about pirates and ghosts and how Paige is going to fit in with the ladies, and wondering if Dwayne is going to be a jerk. Looking for ward to more. :) nancy
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara.
"What are (you) trying to say?"
Inconsistency with Pirate's/Pirates', in several sentences, e.g.:
Now, he's going to show me the Pirates' House."
I'm just showing Paige the Pirate's House.
I'm sure you don't want it to sound like Cash drove through the window? (just teasing, but I think you'll want to change this):
Paige watched Cash drive away through the window.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Good chapter, Barbara.
"What are (you) trying to say?"
Inconsistency with Pirate's/Pirates', in several sentences, e.g.:
Now, he's going to show me the Pirates' House."
I'm just showing Paige the Pirate's House.
I'm sure you don't want it to sound like Cash drove through the window? (just teasing, but I think you'll want to change this):
Paige watched Cash drive away through the window.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I must have been correcting the you while you were reading. I have corrected the Pirates' House. I once had a table ring instead of the telephone. Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
Comment from RazberryBullet
I really liked the tour Cash took her on :)
Lots of strange places!
suggestions:..."What are (you)trying to say?" "Neither of them can afford lunch and shopping."..."Yes, I might find out something about my ghost. Do (you) think it could be a pirate?"
Well done!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I really liked the tour Cash took her on :)
Lots of strange places!
suggestions:..."What are (you)trying to say?" "Neither of them can afford lunch and shopping."..."Yes, I might find out something about my ghost. Do (you) think it could be a pirate?"
Well done!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I guess I had problems with the word you this week. In my head the word was there. Thank you for he catch.
Comment from Jen Gentry
You are moving the story along nicely i like he riverwalk scene with the romantic imagery you have created it feels like being there. Your characters are starting to develop a little more and thereby making me want to know more about them. Good Chapter
Jenny
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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You are moving the story along nicely i like he riverwalk scene with the romantic imagery you have created it feels like being there. Your characters are starting to develop a little more and thereby making me want to know more about them. Good Chapter
Jenny
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I felt some animosity between cash and Dwayne. I am surmising both will be love interests for Paige. Great chapter and I'm eager for more.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I felt some animosity between cash and Dwayne. I am surmising both will be love interests for Paige. Great chapter and I'm eager for more.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ....
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book and had made notes of places where change is recommended but when I read your Notes at the end, I discovered that you have completely covered yourself saying that all such things are intentional! So be it!
I am enjoying this story and look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Hullo Barbara ....
I enjoyed reading this chapter of your book and had made notes of places where change is recommended but when I read your Notes at the end, I discovered that you have completely covered yourself saying that all such things are intentional! So be it!
I am enjoying this story and look forward to the next chapter.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Only the errors in dialogue are covered. I want to know about any other mistakes I've made. Dialogue flows differently than correct English. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is such a lovely chapter, and again, the pacing is so relaxed! It seems there is something brewing between Cash and Paige that is being kept very casual, yet is apparently unavoidable. They are hitting it off so beautifully, and it's refreshing to see them developing a friendship. Dr. Baker appears to be somewhat jealous - I wonder if there is some conflict to come...wonderful chapter again. I love the ghost influences and I hope there is more of that in future chapters. I'm sorry that we will have to be patient when you return to your classes!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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This is such a lovely chapter, and again, the pacing is so relaxed! It seems there is something brewing between Cash and Paige that is being kept very casual, yet is apparently unavoidable. They are hitting it off so beautifully, and it's refreshing to see them developing a friendship. Dr. Baker appears to be somewhat jealous - I wonder if there is some conflict to come...wonderful chapter again. I love the ghost influences and I hope there is more of that in future chapters. I'm sorry that we will have to be patient when you return to your classes!
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your support and friendship.
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It is my great pleasure!
