Savannah Love
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Comment from Writingfundimension
Great dialogue moving the action forward, barbara. I like how Cash seems to be trying to get Paige to think the supernatural happenings are due to her imagination -- creates a nice contrast. And, if I'n not mistaken, we have the beginning of a love triangle. Yummy!
Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Great dialogue moving the action forward, barbara. I like how Cash seems to be trying to get Paige to think the supernatural happenings are due to her imagination -- creates a nice contrast. And, if I'n not mistaken, we have the beginning of a love triangle. Yummy!
Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome, barbara.
Comment from missy98writer
Barbara,
Your latest chapter is excellently penned.
I like your main characters.
The dialogue is great, top notch.
I'd recommend this chapter to other reviewers.
Love,
Melissa.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Barbara,
Your latest chapter is excellently penned.
I like your main characters.
The dialogue is great, top notch.
I'd recommend this chapter to other reviewers.
Love,
Melissa.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Taffspride
Like the previous chapters, this one is as well written, and the style still flows.
I particularly enjoy the way you throw little bits of history in. Tantalizing me enough to make me want to visit this old port city.
I am looking forward to the next chapter. Great story, great writing.
Iechyd da (Cheers)
Taffspride
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Like the previous chapters, this one is as well written, and the style still flows.
I particularly enjoy the way you throw little bits of history in. Tantalizing me enough to make me want to visit this old port city.
I am looking forward to the next chapter. Great story, great writing.
Iechyd da (Cheers)
Taffspride
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from rheabug
This is an interesting chapter. I can see that you have put a lot of thought into this endeavor. I am so delighted that a Texas woman is making a mark on the writing world.
Blessings, Linda
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This is an interesting chapter. I can see that you have put a lot of thought into this endeavor. I am so delighted that a Texas woman is making a mark on the writing world.
Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Sorry, I'm way behind...
another well presented chapter, Barbara..
so easy to follow.
It seems Paige is happy to let Cash
be her guide.
please don't try your southern drawl - Southern - Cap S
Margaret
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Sorry, I'm way behind...
another well presented chapter, Barbara..
so easy to follow.
It seems Paige is happy to let Cash
be her guide.
please don't try your southern drawl - Southern - Cap S
Margaret
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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I thought I had already fixed that. DARN!!! Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from AprilShower
How well I remember starting the new school year and getting my room ready for the children.
It looks like these two beginning to date. It's nice he's reminding her about these two new friends not having a lot of money so she won't encourage them to spend more than they should. I didn't notice any errors in your writing, Barbara, but you do have a typing error in your author notes. I was just thinking, this sure is a good way to see if readers read your 'Author Notes'.
In another chaper(chapter) I had Dwyane Simpson.
April
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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How well I remember starting the new school year and getting my room ready for the children.
It looks like these two beginning to date. It's nice he's reminding her about these two new friends not having a lot of money so she won't encourage them to spend more than they should. I didn't notice any errors in your writing, Barbara, but you do have a typing error in your author notes. I was just thinking, this sure is a good way to see if readers read your 'Author Notes'.
In another chaper(chapter) I had Dwyane Simpson.
April
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
please don't try your Southern drawl - capitalize Southern
Good natural-sounding dialogue that is paced well and also serves to provide information about the characters, as in the passage where Cash tells her how the others can't afford lunch and shopping. You also do a good job in indicating the two are "clicking." Brooke
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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please don't try your Southern drawl - capitalize Southern
Good natural-sounding dialogue that is paced well and also serves to provide information about the characters, as in the passage where Cash tells her how the others can't afford lunch and shopping. You also do a good job in indicating the two are "clicking." Brooke
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. I thought I had made that correction. I appreciate the catche.
Comment from LAFraser
This is a wonderfully written chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed taking a stroll with your characters, Cash and Paige. I hope you enjoy your school year. Have a great week, my friend. :)
~Lisa
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This is a wonderfully written chapter, Barbara. I enjoyed taking a stroll with your characters, Cash and Paige. I hope you enjoy your school year. Have a great week, my friend. :)
~Lisa
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. :)
~Lisa
Comment from Chris Tee
This is another excellent part chapter here. She is already thinking about the southern charm. Well done with this splendid and enjoyable write here Barbara.
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This is another excellent part chapter here. She is already thinking about the southern charm. Well done with this splendid and enjoyable write here Barbara.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from unimatrix001
An excellent chapter, continuing to unfold the developing relationship between Paige and Cash.
One comment:
In reference to the last line of this chapter: "another man" Who is the other man in Paige's life?
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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An excellent chapter, continuing to unfold the developing relationship between Paige and Cash.
One comment:
In reference to the last line of this chapter: "another man" Who is the other man in Paige's life?
Comment Written 20-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. The other man is unknown at this time, but to be discovered later.
