Savannah Love
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84 total reviews
Comment from justatuna
Really enjoyed reading this story. Flowed very well. I don't advice on structure as I'm not expert. Perhaps you could be a little more despcriptive, but that's a personal thing. I always try to eliminate as much 'fluff' as possible. Perhaps that explains your flow. Good with the bad, right? Great job.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Really enjoyed reading this story. Flowed very well. I don't advice on structure as I'm not expert. Perhaps you could be a little more despcriptive, but that's a personal thing. I always try to eliminate as much 'fluff' as possible. Perhaps that explains your flow. Good with the bad, right? Great job.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kashmayank
nicework done,the length of the story was perfect ,i will look forward to readf the next parts,the tempo of story was nice so liked it
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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nicework done,the length of the story was perfect ,i will look forward to readf the next parts,the tempo of story was nice so liked it
Comment Written 22-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from candi lester
I loved this story line I can see why you got good reviews on your writings look forward to reading more of your book thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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I loved this story line I can see why you got good reviews on your writings look forward to reading more of your book thanks for sharing
Comment Written 22-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
I loved the easy going dialogue between Paige and Cash in this post. I'm interested to see where these two characters are headed, and if there is a future for them. Your writing continues to engage, and I continue to enjoy this story.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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I loved the easy going dialogue between Paige and Cash in this post. I'm interested to see where these two characters are headed, and if there is a future for them. Your writing continues to engage, and I continue to enjoy this story.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from donaldww
I enjoyed this installment as usual and noticed the name change. I saw your notes and think it was a good idea keeping the names sounding distinct.
No spags noticed my moi!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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I enjoyed this installment as usual and noticed the name change. I saw your notes and think it was a good idea keeping the names sounding distinct.
No spags noticed my moi!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 21-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TKField
Can't wait to see what happens next in this historical romance melodrama. I know it will have a happy ending, but in these stories getting there is half the fun. Interesting characters in a fascinating setting with believable dialogue make this a jolly good read. I'll definitely stay tuned. This even has pirates and ghosts!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Can't wait to see what happens next in this historical romance melodrama. I know it will have a happy ending, but in these stories getting there is half the fun. Interesting characters in a fascinating setting with believable dialogue make this a jolly good read. I'll definitely stay tuned. This even has pirates and ghosts!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jaguar80
This we excellent writing. Not what I normally read but excellent writing. As well the characters and their description as well as the dialogue is very real which I like.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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This we excellent writing. Not what I normally read but excellent writing. As well the characters and their description as well as the dialogue is very real which I like.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from me_tudor
I haven't had a chance to read the earlier chapters but this is looking to be another good story. I had someone suggest something to me and I'm going to pass it on to you. You have a lot of dialogue here and you might want add some more description of where they are. For example you could add more information about what the Pirate House looks like. Are there trees over hanging the street they are walking on? Or Flowers in yards along the way? Just some suggestions. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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I haven't had a chance to read the earlier chapters but this is looking to be another good story. I had someone suggest something to me and I'm going to pass it on to you. You have a lot of dialogue here and you might want add some more description of where they are. For example you could add more information about what the Pirate House looks like. Are there trees over hanging the street they are walking on? Or Flowers in yards along the way? Just some suggestions. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Hummm, I question why anybody would tell you not to use a lot of dialogue, because dialogue is what you are supposed to use. Narrative is telling and dialogue is showing. I have been told if it doesn't move the story along, it doesn't belong. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Selestia
I haven't read all, but I've read some of your other chapters and I continue to enjoy the characters and the plot. You write with interesting details to move the plot and the dialogue also moves the plot. Continued conflict and sustained suspense. Anxious to know about the "ghosts". Are they read or are they the result of some nefarious carryings on by some criminal types? Very good writing.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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I haven't read all, but I've read some of your other chapters and I continue to enjoy the characters and the plot. You write with interesting details to move the plot and the dialogue also moves the plot. Continued conflict and sustained suspense. Anxious to know about the "ghosts". Are they read or are they the result of some nefarious carryings on by some criminal types? Very good writing.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rama devi
A decent chapter with fine flow, smooth dialog, good action tags and no spag nits noted on first read. Having driven through Savannah just a few months ago, I could picture the scenes via the small amount of narrative about them and the dialog. However, I am not sure a person who had never been there really gets a sense of the distinct flavor of the town reading this chapter. There are a few fine descriptive lines, but I think it needs more--especially since the dialog is lightweight and not very dramatic...this Chapter feels to me to need spicing up.
One senses the connection between the character growing, and the closing line give insight into Paige's hopes and fears. I think the chapter would be improved by more internal dialog and more descriptive narrative, but am giving five stars because I am really not sure about this genre, and you've told me before it is usually primarily dialog.
Easy to read and absorb as is...and it makes me curious about the ghost tours, which I never ended up doing, yet.
Love,r d
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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A decent chapter with fine flow, smooth dialog, good action tags and no spag nits noted on first read. Having driven through Savannah just a few months ago, I could picture the scenes via the small amount of narrative about them and the dialog. However, I am not sure a person who had never been there really gets a sense of the distinct flavor of the town reading this chapter. There are a few fine descriptive lines, but I think it needs more--especially since the dialog is lightweight and not very dramatic...this Chapter feels to me to need spicing up.
One senses the connection between the character growing, and the closing line give insight into Paige's hopes and fears. I think the chapter would be improved by more internal dialog and more descriptive narrative, but am giving five stars because I am really not sure about this genre, and you've told me before it is usually primarily dialog.
Easy to read and absorb as is...and it makes me curious about the ghost tours, which I never ended up doing, yet.
Love,r d
Comment Written 21-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
