Savannah Love
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Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara ...
Thank you for sharing this interesting chapter of your book with us. I like the way your story is developing and you provide plenty of vivid imagery.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Is that the Atlanta Ocean? You surely mean - the Atlantic Ocean ...
* You have - into her jean's pocket .. which should be -
into her jeans pocket .... (because this does not refer to a pocket belonging to jean!)
* You have - and historical interests ... I suggest - and places of historial interest ...
I haven't seen a ghost but have definitely seen a photograph of a headless ghost. Up to now, I have not had permission to write about it nor to include the photograph.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Hullo Barbara ...
Thank you for sharing this interesting chapter of your book with us. I like the way your story is developing and you provide plenty of vivid imagery.
There are just a few small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Is that the Atlanta Ocean? You surely mean - the Atlantic Ocean ...
* You have - into her jean's pocket .. which should be -
into her jeans pocket .... (because this does not refer to a pocket belonging to jean!)
* You have - and historical interests ... I suggest - and places of historial interest ...
I haven't seen a ghost but have definitely seen a photograph of a headless ghost. Up to now, I have not had permission to write about it nor to include the photograph.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for catching those. I don't have a clue what I thinking. I guess I wasn't.
Comment from MadameSparkle
There's something very exciting about pirates, at least historical pirates who can't hurt us anymore. I'm looking forward to hearing more about the history of the Savannah region. Your writing here is very dialogue based but you handle it well and it makes the story come alive.
Sparkles
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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There's something very exciting about pirates, at least historical pirates who can't hurt us anymore. I'm looking forward to hearing more about the history of the Savannah region. Your writing here is very dialogue based but you handle it well and it makes the story come alive.
Sparkles
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where cash and paige walk down to the river and go out for dinner. i enjoyed reading the history you shared about blackbeard
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where cash and paige walk down to the river and go out for dinner. i enjoyed reading the history you shared about blackbeard
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I love the Savannah history. Your chapter was short but excellent. I am enjoying this story espically since I love the south.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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I love the Savannah history. Your chapter was short but excellent. I am enjoying this story espically since I love the south.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from felicia_tung
Very enjoyable reading. I liked your use of southern vernacular. I get now that Cash is smart enough to mock southern-speak. They have an interesting relationship. I got more of a feel for the characters in this chapter. I think you used more body language (shrugged her shoulders, smiled, etc) in this chapter. It's probably just me, but if I can't picture the characters licking their lips or raising an eyebrow or looking away or shrugging, I don't feel like I really understand the dialogue and the relationships of the characters to each other.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Very enjoyable reading. I liked your use of southern vernacular. I get now that Cash is smart enough to mock southern-speak. They have an interesting relationship. I got more of a feel for the characters in this chapter. I think you used more body language (shrugged her shoulders, smiled, etc) in this chapter. It's probably just me, but if I can't picture the characters licking their lips or raising an eyebrow or looking away or shrugging, I don't feel like I really understand the dialogue and the relationships of the characters to each other.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from barkingdog
This is a fine chapter. I enjoyed the interplay between Cash and Paige with him showing off his southern charm with a bit of teasing.
The interest in Blackbeard and history of the area related to possibly haunting of her new house makes me wonder what's to come. Also, her question about how well does Cash know the waitress interested me. Good foreshadowing.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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This is a fine chapter. I enjoyed the interplay between Cash and Paige with him showing off his southern charm with a bit of teasing.
The interest in Blackbeard and history of the area related to possibly haunting of her new house makes me wonder what's to come. Also, her question about how well does Cash know the waitress interested me. Good foreshadowing.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and sharing your insight.
Comment from TammyGail
barbara this was yet another example of why I adore your writing so - I thought I was following you but that will change - as I don't want to miss any ink of this novel - happy your muse took you for a ride - always makes the best of writing - thanks for the notes and for sharing - I will be looking forward to more..
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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barbara this was yet another example of why I adore your writing so - I thought I was following you but that will change - as I don't want to miss any ink of this novel - happy your muse took you for a ride - always makes the best of writing - thanks for the notes and for sharing - I will be looking forward to more..
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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I thought you were a fan, also. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from kashmayank
north vs south,civil war is an amazing history to read and you tried to to full justice to it all the best or future and I will look forward
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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north vs south,civil war is an amazing history to read and you tried to to full justice to it all the best or future and I will look forward
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara, the story is excellent. It is now becoming easier to see who the characters really are. It is a very enjoyable read.
"Is the Atlanta Ocean?" Is the word that left out?
"I like the southern d©cor. Oh look." Looks like the conversion software got you. It got me earlier today.
I look forward to the next post. Curtis
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Barbara, the story is excellent. It is now becoming easier to see who the characters really are. It is a very enjoyable read.
"Is the Atlanta Ocean?" Is the word that left out?
"I like the southern d©cor. Oh look." Looks like the conversion software got you. It got me earlier today.
I look forward to the next post. Curtis
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the catches. I knew it would when my computer automatically put in the ', I forgot to correct it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
Neat ending, maybe Paige has some competition. Nice joke about the poor rebel whose Northern and Southern Belles chasing them. This is very well written.
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I have trouble with my hands. I corrected the error.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Neat ending, maybe Paige has some competition. Nice joke about the poor rebel whose Northern and Southern Belles chasing them. This is very well written.
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I have trouble with my hands. I corrected the error.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and you continued support. I hope you get to feeling better.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Only time will tell. Charlie
