Savannah Love
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63 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Barb,
Nice chapter with Paige and Patricia getting to know each other. Easy flow of conversation between all four too.
I like the way the Sherman and the Civil War were subtly brought into the conversation as the end hook.
Cheers & Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Hi Barb,
Nice chapter with Paige and Patricia getting to know each other. Easy flow of conversation between all four too.
I like the way the Sherman and the Civil War were subtly brought into the conversation as the end hook.
Cheers & Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 21-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2014
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Thank you for your kind review. We were stationed in different parts of the south and many parts are still fighting the Civil War. How sad.
Comment from Sankey
This is really lovely history and all. I do think if the opportunity ever presents itself I would still like to try and come to America. Health not real good and I know my wife could not cope being disabled and all. So is there still something using the tram tracks there? Must be horse drawn if so? Loving the story. You really have hit on something here. No Spags.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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This is really lovely history and all. I do think if the opportunity ever presents itself I would still like to try and come to America. Health not real good and I know my wife could not cope being disabled and all. So is there still something using the tram tracks there? Must be horse drawn if so? Loving the story. You really have hit on something here. No Spags.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
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So is there still something using the tram tracks there? Must be horse drawn if so? (The photo for the chapter)
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The tours still use them, but not really the tracks, they just follow them. I took one of the horse and buggy tours quite a few times. I love it. I have also taken the bus tour. Its a small bus.
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OK Thanks for that. Can't think of the name of it there is a movi9e with matt Damon, and Robert Redford?? in it and some other good actors about the Golf Game in Savannah is it Bagger Vance?
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I don't know, but there's a movie about how strange Savannah is called Midnight Garden of Good and Evil. A very interesting movie.
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Ok so the haunted houses thing is still current then?
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Yes it is.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi Barbara,
I see where your coming from with those first post. I can't help but wonder how many of those ancestors(though deceased) still live there. Good job with this chapter. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
I see where your coming from with those first post. I can't help but wonder how many of those ancestors(though deceased) still live there. Good job with this chapter. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Thank you for kind review. You're great.
Comment from nora arjuna
Barb, good thing you posted early. Don't think I can afford more time here before the holidays. See some suggestions:
**OK, I didn't get to post this review before I left. So here it is now:
You look hot. I'll get some lemonade. - the 'hot' part sounds like she's saying the woman looks terrific. How about 'flushed'?
Or
You look like you could do with a cold drink...
Does anything in those bags need [to be] in the refrigerator?" - insert those words
I know how much you hate mud on your truck." Billy Joe chuckled, took Cash's keys, and held the chair as [she] stood. - after quite a gap, not sure who 'she' refers to here. Is it his wife, or Paige?
Paige turned [her head] when she heard Cash call her name. "I'm in the library." - not needed.
[When she heard] footsteps come closer, - repetition too close. Try to vary:
As his footsteps approached, she looked up from a book and smiled.
"It seems when Major General William Tecumseh Sherman." - I don't get this speech. Something missing?
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Barb, good thing you posted early. Don't think I can afford more time here before the holidays. See some suggestions:
**OK, I didn't get to post this review before I left. So here it is now:
You look hot. I'll get some lemonade. - the 'hot' part sounds like she's saying the woman looks terrific. How about 'flushed'?
Or
You look like you could do with a cold drink...
Does anything in those bags need [to be] in the refrigerator?" - insert those words
I know how much you hate mud on your truck." Billy Joe chuckled, took Cash's keys, and held the chair as [she] stood. - after quite a gap, not sure who 'she' refers to here. Is it his wife, or Paige?
Paige turned [her head] when she heard Cash call her name. "I'm in the library." - not needed.
[When she heard] footsteps come closer, - repetition too close. Try to vary:
As his footsteps approached, she looked up from a book and smiled.
"It seems when Major General William Tecumseh Sherman." - I don't get this speech. Something missing?
Comment Written 28-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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I am sorry you read this after I had promoted it. I really appreciate the help.
Comment from elgone
Yes, there are place where the Civil War is still being fought. This is an engaging read. You're doing well presenting the realistic aspects of it while leading up to the supernatural.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Yes, there are place where the Civil War is still being fought. This is an engaging read. You're doing well presenting the realistic aspects of it while leading up to the supernatural.
E
Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from writerwish
This is great that you are writing another book. I love the setting. The dialogue's here seemed very realistic and 'in the moment'. I felt like I was there.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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This is great that you are writing another book. I love the setting. The dialogue's here seemed very realistic and 'in the moment'. I felt like I was there.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Showboat
Hi Barbara,
Yes, the war might be over but the battles rage on. As you know, I'm in the middle of a novel set in New Orleans, and it's a pretty constant theme.
The War of Northern Aggression. Really good one here, loved the bit of repartee and now that Paige has a woman friend, she'll stop getting lost, lol!
Great chapter,
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Hi Barbara,
Yes, the war might be over but the battles rage on. As you know, I'm in the middle of a novel set in New Orleans, and it's a pretty constant theme.
The War of Northern Aggression. Really good one here, loved the bit of repartee and now that Paige has a woman friend, she'll stop getting lost, lol!
Great chapter,
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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I think Paige's lack of directions is here to stay. I enjoyed your review.
Comment from Janie King
Oh, I'm beginning to see why the first two chapters were needed....duh...I'm a little slow...this was well-written and should prove to be quite a love story...I hope. God bless.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Oh, I'm beginning to see why the first two chapters were needed....duh...I'm a little slow...this was well-written and should prove to be quite a love story...I hope. God bless.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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You are not the only one. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
Another great chapter. I loved the exchanges between the three women, plus the humor between Cash and Billy Joe. Your dialogue comes across very realistically.
I'm curious to see how Bradley and Alice are going to be further involved in the story. I'm finding it all very intriguing and can't wait to continue reading with the next chapter.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Another great chapter. I loved the exchanges between the three women, plus the humor between Cash and Billy Joe. Your dialogue comes across very realistically.
I'm curious to see how Bradley and Alice are going to be further involved in the story. I'm finding it all very intriguing and can't wait to continue reading with the next chapter.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Another nicely written chapter. Interesting and enjoyable. Good, fun dialogue and good character development. I can't wait to find out more about the ghosts!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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Another nicely written chapter. Interesting and enjoyable. Good, fun dialogue and good character development. I can't wait to find out more about the ghosts!!! Debbie
Comment Written 15-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
