Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Chapter 2, part I"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello again Barbara
I really enjoyed this chapter. I think it has a superb dialog and just the right amount of suspense. I think the sunset was a cool deal and she had to pick the right room. I too wonder if ghosts walk through locked doors. I'll just have to wait & see
Bear
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
Hello again Barbara
I really enjoyed this chapter. I think it has a superb dialog and just the right amount of suspense. I think the sunset was a cool deal and she had to pick the right room. I too wonder if ghosts walk through locked doors. I'll just have to wait & see
Bear
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mary Ann MCPhedran
Hi I enjoyed this story as always your stories are well written and need no change to them. I enjoyed reading the descriptive, and well displayed story. Thanks for sharing.Mary
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
Hi I enjoyed this story as always your stories are well written and need no change to them. I enjoyed reading the descriptive, and well displayed story. Thanks for sharing.Mary
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where cash and paige meet and they have a language barrier. i enjoyed reading this one...
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
this is very well written, barbara, you did a great job writing this chapter where cash and paige meet and they have a language barrier. i enjoyed reading this one...
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
This book promises to be intriguing and replete with mystery. You have good characters that come alive for me in the great dialogue you have composed. I had to laugh about the leather seats...they can burn your thighs if you happen to be in shorts! I am already intrigued with this story. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
Hi Barbara,
This book promises to be intriguing and replete with mystery. You have good characters that come alive for me in the great dialogue you have composed. I had to laugh about the leather seats...they can burn your thighs if you happen to be in shorts! I am already intrigued with this story. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from WilliamDeen
GREAT chapter! I really like your characters! Good show on northern and southern words for the same thing! I found one word change needed and one typo.
Georgia July sun doesn't work to well/ to should be too
"Billy Joe scratched his head./ remove the quotation marks before Billy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
GREAT chapter! I really like your characters! Good show on northern and southern words for the same thing! I found one word change needed and one typo.
Georgia July sun doesn't work to well/ to should be too
"Billy Joe scratched his head./ remove the quotation marks before Billy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the catches.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Hmm is this gonna be a romance or a thriller/romance. It has inklings of both. I love the name Cash (like Johnny). And the language barrier is to familiar. I got people in SC and the first time I saw a Piggly Wiggly I almost hollard. You've definitely piqued my interest. Let the ride begin.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
Hmm is this gonna be a romance or a thriller/romance. It has inklings of both. I love the name Cash (like Johnny). And the language barrier is to familiar. I got people in SC and the first time I saw a Piggly Wiggly I almost hollard. You've definitely piqued my interest. Let the ride begin.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
You just need to put the current date at the top. The characters will introduce themselves as they appear...just a suggestion.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
You just need to put the current date at the top. The characters will introduce themselves as they appear...just a suggestion.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
I enjoyed this post just as much as the previous ones. I already have a good sense of who your characters are, especially Cash who shows himself to be a hard-working trust-worthy man. This was so different to your previous two posts, and I wait excitedly to see how it all fits together.
I love the subtle humor in the story, and I couldn't help smile regarding the language barriers because I find my writing doesn't always translate correctly in other countries.
Just one little fault I could see. In the part where you wrote Billy Joe scratched his head - you've put a quotation mark at the beginning even though this wasn't dialogue.
I would have given you six stars but unfortunately I can not give six stars to the same author more than twice.
Loved your story, and can't wait for more.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
I enjoyed this post just as much as the previous ones. I already have a good sense of who your characters are, especially Cash who shows himself to be a hard-working trust-worthy man. This was so different to your previous two posts, and I wait excitedly to see how it all fits together.
I love the subtle humor in the story, and I couldn't help smile regarding the language barriers because I find my writing doesn't always translate correctly in other countries.
Just one little fault I could see. In the part where you wrote Billy Joe scratched his head - you've put a quotation mark at the beginning even though this wasn't dialogue.
I would have given you six stars but unfortunately I can not give six stars to the same author more than twice.
Loved your story, and can't wait for more.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from rheabug
Oh Barbara, You have a winner here or so it seems. I Like this story line and I look forward to reading others to come. I love the picture of the house. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
Oh Barbara, You have a winner here or so it seems. I Like this story line and I look forward to reading others to come. I love the picture of the house. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and kind words.
Comment from Ted T
Hi Barbara :)
Good atmosphere and imaging in this chapter. It's just me I guess, but the accent seems forced and on the edge of irritating. It's your call.
she was teasing, but ..." [Her voice trailed.] -- Unnecessary tag line. The ellipsis does the job.
The word [she] is repeated nine times throughout the last two paragraphs. Internal dialogue in the closing paragraph is too much and too long. All of the thinking is written in complete sentences. It should be a bit more fragmented to seem natural. Otherwise, not bad.
Ted
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
Hi Barbara :)
Good atmosphere and imaging in this chapter. It's just me I guess, but the accent seems forced and on the edge of irritating. It's your call.
she was teasing, but ..." [Her voice trailed.] -- Unnecessary tag line. The ellipsis does the job.
The word [she] is repeated nine times throughout the last two paragraphs. Internal dialogue in the closing paragraph is too much and too long. All of the thinking is written in complete sentences. It should be a bit more fragmented to seem natural. Otherwise, not bad.
Ted
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Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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I have made the last two adjustments and will consider the first. Thank you for your review.
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You're most welcome :)