Savannah Love
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Comment from OLA THOMAS
Good communication and smooth run of ideas too. Some pun and fun in this chapter, giving it a gripping power to read to the end without hesitation. Like the last lines, locking the doors against ghosts and probably call the police.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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Good communication and smooth run of ideas too. Some pun and fun in this chapter, giving it a gripping power to read to the end without hesitation. Like the last lines, locking the doors against ghosts and probably call the police.
ola thomas
Comment Written 09-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Heaven Bound
Very nice job. I found it quite easy and pleasant to read. Make me ready to read the next chapter. 2 comments - early on talking about the railing is the word "vanish"; I'm sure you were intending "varnish". Also in the spot about going to the grocery store it says "I'm going to grocery store." Think there should be a "the" in there.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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Very nice job. I found it quite easy and pleasant to read. Make me ready to read the next chapter. 2 comments - early on talking about the railing is the word "vanish"; I'm sure you were intending "varnish". Also in the spot about going to the grocery store it says "I'm going to grocery store." Think there should be a "the" in there.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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I have made those corrections. Thank you for your eagle eye.
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No problem. Have a good day.
Comment from Readywriter52
Paige is moving into the house after her Aunt died. She might have visited her Aunt, but she seems out of place. I'm sure helping restore the house will keep her mind off of her problems. I wonder who or what is in the kitchen,
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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Paige is moving into the house after her Aunt died. She might have visited her Aunt, but she seems out of place. I'm sure helping restore the house will keep her mind off of her problems. I wonder who or what is in the kitchen,
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from fictionwriter
A wonderful chapter you've got here. I love ghost stories, and can't wait to see where this one leads. Having had a haunted house myself, I love to hear more,and Savannah, well that just adds to it. Well done.
dirty bandanna( delete , or add subject after it) before adjusting
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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A wonderful chapter you've got here. I love ghost stories, and can't wait to see where this one leads. Having had a haunted house myself, I love to hear more,and Savannah, well that just adds to it. Well done.
dirty bandanna( delete , or add subject after it) before adjusting
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TammyGail
Excellent work crafting this chapter barbara - like always you pull me in and keep my full throughout the read - loved your use of imagery as well as loving where your novel is going - can't wait for the next read - thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Excellent work crafting this chapter barbara - like always you pull me in and keep my full throughout the read - loved your use of imagery as well as loving where your novel is going - can't wait for the next read - thanks for sharing
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Savannah's historic district is so pretty with everything arranged around the squares. A fascinating place with so much history to appreciate. Well done, Barbara. I like the setting and the characters. :)Nancy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Savannah's historic district is so pretty with everything arranged around the squares. A fascinating place with so much history to appreciate. Well done, Barbara. I like the setting and the characters. :)Nancy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
NICE HOOK AT THE END , , ,HAS THE READER'S INTEREST AS TO WHAT THE PROTAGONIST SAW. GREAT DIALOGUE, ESPECIALLY WITH THE SOUTHERN ACCENT. GOOD INTERACTION BETWEEN CHARACTERS AS WELL A DECENT SCENES. EXCELLENT WRITING, OVERALL!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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NICE HOOK AT THE END , , ,HAS THE READER'S INTEREST AS TO WHAT THE PROTAGONIST SAW. GREAT DIALOGUE, ESPECIALLY WITH THE SOUTHERN ACCENT. GOOD INTERACTION BETWEEN CHARACTERS AS WELL A DECENT SCENES. EXCELLENT WRITING, OVERALL!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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THANK YOU FOR YOUR KIND REVIEW.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
I see I missed the beginning of this, but I'll catch up. Interesting story and it sounds like it could be an interesting house.
Nice chapter, interesting that there are language differences north to south in the US but in a country as big and spread out as yours, I suppose it's bound to happen.
Patrick
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Hi Barbara,
I see I missed the beginning of this, but I'll catch up. Interesting story and it sounds like it could be an interesting house.
Nice chapter, interesting that there are language differences north to south in the US but in a country as big and spread out as yours, I suppose it's bound to happen.
Patrick
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, there are huge language differences in the US.
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Well, I'll admit to lurking on Sasha's piece about me, totally in awe of her generous words of praise. As I looked over the reviews she'd gotten, I came upon yours and became curious to know more about this anonymous reader of my Narcisa. I don't recall ever having had a review from you, and that peaked my curiosity all the more, so I came to your page for a look.
I'm glad I did. This is a sensational piece of writing, my friend, and so compelling to read, in that it stirs the reader's curiosity to know what's gonna happen next. And with just the right hint of suspense too. (is the house really haunted? And is this gonna turn into a supernatural thriller? Only one way to find out. Reading on....) Well done.
I found the dialogue and pacing went beautifully hand in hand to move the story along in an effortless manner. Only small problem I had, in fact, was this: At the beginning, we're bombarded with so many names and characters, I had to go back several times to try and figure out who is who. I can't suggest how to make this aspect easier on the readers mind, but you're certainly a good enough writer to work out the logistics of that small matter without my two cents, should you agree with my humble assessment of that one minor shortcoming.
Loved the whole tone and feel of this piece. It promises to continue be a exceptional read going forward. Wish this damned thing would let me give it a six! Thanks for the chance to check it out and review it here. Best of luck!
cheers
js
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Well, I'll admit to lurking on Sasha's piece about me, totally in awe of her generous words of praise. As I looked over the reviews she'd gotten, I came upon yours and became curious to know more about this anonymous reader of my Narcisa. I don't recall ever having had a review from you, and that peaked my curiosity all the more, so I came to your page for a look.
I'm glad I did. This is a sensational piece of writing, my friend, and so compelling to read, in that it stirs the reader's curiosity to know what's gonna happen next. And with just the right hint of suspense too. (is the house really haunted? And is this gonna turn into a supernatural thriller? Only one way to find out. Reading on....) Well done.
I found the dialogue and pacing went beautifully hand in hand to move the story along in an effortless manner. Only small problem I had, in fact, was this: At the beginning, we're bombarded with so many names and characters, I had to go back several times to try and figure out who is who. I can't suggest how to make this aspect easier on the readers mind, but you're certainly a good enough writer to work out the logistics of that small matter without my two cents, should you agree with my humble assessment of that one minor shortcoming.
Loved the whole tone and feel of this piece. It promises to continue be a exceptional read going forward. Wish this damned thing would let me give it a six! Thanks for the chance to check it out and review it here. Best of luck!
cheers
js
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Coming from an author of your quality I am extremely honored.
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My pleasure. And it would be my honor to have a review of Narcisa, since you're reading it anyway. LOL. Like my ol' man used to say, "long as you're goin' to hell, ya may as well shake hands with the devil."
cheers
js
Comment from marlafae
Nice work, Barbara. Just a few details for you to look at:
*hot humid Georgia sun.--delete humid, sun can't be humid.
*Georgia July sun doesn't work to well with black--delete to, add too
I love anything with a historical setting. I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Nice work, Barbara. Just a few details for you to look at:
*hot humid Georgia sun.--delete humid, sun can't be humid.
*Georgia July sun doesn't work to well with black--delete to, add too
I love anything with a historical setting. I'm looking forward to reading more of this story.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the kind review.
