Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Chapter 2, part I"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
68 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Barb,
Something tells me fireworks of 'all' kinds are on the horizon. Count me it --- I'll be back to read more.
Cheers &
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Hi Barb,
Something tells me fireworks of 'all' kinds are on the horizon. Count me it --- I'll be back to read more.
Cheers &
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Oh my!! I can't believe you're going all the way back to read. There's no money attached.
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Good reading has nothing to do with the money attached. I'm enjoying your story very much. ('-') Cheers
Comment from Sankey
I can tell this is gonna be a great story. You dine well so far. I love the mystery and all that. Always been interested in "Southern".. mainly the gentility and all not so much the rotten slavers.
Good work NO SPAGS!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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I can tell this is gonna be a great story. You dine well so far. I love the mystery and all that. Always been interested in "Southern".. mainly the gentility and all not so much the rotten slavers.
Good work NO SPAGS!
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from justmarly
You are so smart. I might of had to find mistakes but I never. You have a good story here and I do hope its a scary one because I like a scary story not horror where you see on T.V. people get picked up with no help. I hate them. Keep up the good work. MJ
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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You are so smart. I might of had to find mistakes but I never. You have a good story here and I do hope its a scary one because I like a scary story not horror where you see on T.V. people get picked up with no help. I hate them. Keep up the good work. MJ
Comment Written 11-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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You are more than welcome. MJ
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi Barbara,
Enjoyed the read very much. I saw no spag but, I did find one place you might want to look over.
She set it on the car seat, sat, and turned on the engine.
It just sounds a bit odd to say your setting a towel on a seat. If it were mine I would say, She spread the towel over the hot seat.
Just thought you might want to check that one. Good job and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
Enjoyed the read very much. I saw no spag but, I did find one place you might want to look over.
She set it on the car seat, sat, and turned on the engine.
It just sounds a bit odd to say your setting a towel on a seat. If it were mine I would say, She spread the towel over the hot seat.
Just thought you might want to check that one. Good job and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Wow!! thank you
Comment from elgone
I'm getting around to reading the story. It is an interesting beginning, following the preface about the war. You have introduced the main character. I like the language barrier. Having lived for nine years in New England, I can appreciate it. Heros or Po Boys were grinders in Connecticut. Tonic or Coke was soda. Imagine that difference from just a state away. When I was at UT Austin, I had a friend from Boston. I was originally from Ohio. You can imagine the stories I could tell.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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I'm getting around to reading the story. It is an interesting beginning, following the preface about the war. You have introduced the main character. I like the language barrier. Having lived for nine years in New England, I can appreciate it. Heros or Po Boys were grinders in Connecticut. Tonic or Coke was soda. Imagine that difference from just a state away. When I was at UT Austin, I had a friend from Boston. I was originally from Ohio. You can imagine the stories I could tell.
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Comment Written 19-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I bet you have fun with the differences. Being from Northenn IL, and my husband being military, we have lived in many states and it's fun the slight differences in culture. Although some Southern states let you know they are Southern and are proud of it.
Comment from felicia_tung
I like the character development. Paige seems engaging. I will keep reading to see what would make a (likely arrogant) Yankee fall for a guy who talks like Cash. I'd like to know a little more about what she is thinking. I also can't picture the inside of the house. Part of the charm of a story like this where the local color is a character in the story, is the details of the place. Is the old furniture there? A faded couch, an end table with old photographs? or is everything under plastic? Is it dusty from sanding? All I know so far is that there is a mahogany railing, a staircase, 5 bedrooms and a kitchen. How bad is the disrepair?
I struggled a little with the accents. They sound not just southern but ignorant. I lived in the south for 10+ years (although not in Savannah). Sometimes you capture it, sometimes it seems like the guy would have left the "g" off a word, and sometimes it just seems like I am reading "dumb hick" accent.
Examples are helpful, I'm sure:
Would Cash really refer to his buddy as an "associate?" That struck me as unlikely, unless he was saying it tongue-in-cheek, to impress the Boston girl. But I haven't gotten the impression he is self-conscious about his speech or their class differences, so I'm not sure he would do that.
Also, Cash says about the luggage: "Where'd you like them?" I felt like he should have said "Where'd you like 'em?" or "Where'd ya like 'em?" or "Where'd y'all like 'em?" (I don't know how much y'all-ing they do in Savannah.)
Also, Cash is "working on the cast iron fence." It seemed to me he would be "workin'" on it.
Hope that helps. I am looking forward to reading the rest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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I like the character development. Paige seems engaging. I will keep reading to see what would make a (likely arrogant) Yankee fall for a guy who talks like Cash. I'd like to know a little more about what she is thinking. I also can't picture the inside of the house. Part of the charm of a story like this where the local color is a character in the story, is the details of the place. Is the old furniture there? A faded couch, an end table with old photographs? or is everything under plastic? Is it dusty from sanding? All I know so far is that there is a mahogany railing, a staircase, 5 bedrooms and a kitchen. How bad is the disrepair?
I struggled a little with the accents. They sound not just southern but ignorant. I lived in the south for 10+ years (although not in Savannah). Sometimes you capture it, sometimes it seems like the guy would have left the "g" off a word, and sometimes it just seems like I am reading "dumb hick" accent.
Examples are helpful, I'm sure:
Would Cash really refer to his buddy as an "associate?" That struck me as unlikely, unless he was saying it tongue-in-cheek, to impress the Boston girl. But I haven't gotten the impression he is self-conscious about his speech or their class differences, so I'm not sure he would do that.
Also, Cash says about the luggage: "Where'd you like them?" I felt like he should have said "Where'd you like 'em?" or "Where'd ya like 'em?" or "Where'd y'all like 'em?" (I don't know how much y'all-ing they do in Savannah.)
Also, Cash is "working on the cast iron fence." It seemed to me he would be "workin'" on it.
Hope that helps. I am looking forward to reading the rest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Cash is educated. Billy Joe is not. It will come out later. Thank you for your opinions. I will consider them. I have been told I am using too much southern dialogue, so I doubt I use more.
Comment from Showboat
Hi Barbara,
How nice for me to find you starting a novel! I usually come in at chapter 55 and get lost. I loved this chapter. I also read the two prologue chapters.
Great beginning, introducing the characters slowly with enough background that the reader already 'knows' them. I'm off for more!
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Hi Barbara,
How nice for me to find you starting a novel! I usually come in at chapter 55 and get lost. I loved this chapter. I also read the two prologue chapters.
Great beginning, introducing the characters slowly with enough background that the reader already 'knows' them. I'm off for more!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 16-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2012
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Thank you for reading when no points were attached.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
A cute beginning, and Paige is not just beautiful, she has an active imagination. Sounds like a twenty-something year-old. Like it so far. No errors found.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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A cute beginning, and Paige is not just beautiful, she has an active imagination. Sounds like a twenty-something year-old. Like it so far. No errors found.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2012
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She is 20 something. She tends to be a little dingy too. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from burton.0115
I don't very often read stories but this is intrigueing!
I think it is very well written and interesting too.
I like the sound of the house.
Of course, the American expressions are different for me, I am from the UK!
Mary
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2012
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I don't very often read stories but this is intrigueing!
I think it is very well written and interesting too.
I like the sound of the house.
Of course, the American expressions are different for me, I am from the UK!
Mary
Comment Written 11-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from smudge
I expect the very rich have their groceries delivered or have a housekeeper to do it. I have never seen a ghost walk through a door. Fall through a solid floor, yes.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2012
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I expect the very rich have their groceries delivered or have a housekeeper to do it. I have never seen a ghost walk through a door. Fall through a solid floor, yes.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
