Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chapter 1, part II"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
89 total reviews
Comment from Gargantuan2
You did well with this post, a great send off to you visit with grandkids. I hope you have a good time there. I will look forward to the next post although it may be a while coming. Family is first, or should be. Until then.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
  |
You did well with this post, a great send off to you visit with grandkids. I hope you have a good time there. I will look forward to the next post although it may be a while coming. Family is first, or should be. Until then.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Chris Tee
Barbara your story is filled with intrigue and it is so sad that Bradley will not see his son. I enjoyed this part as well and it is excellent work here girl.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
|
Barbara your story is filled with intrigue and it is so sad that Bradley will not see his son. I enjoyed this part as well and it is excellent work here girl.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara, I'm curious where this story will lead to. Why the date is so important. And what will happen to Bradley. I guess I have to wait until after your vacation. Have fun!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
|
Hi, Barbara, I'm curious where this story will lead to. Why the date is so important. And what will happen to Bradley. I guess I have to wait until after your vacation. Have fun!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from volcomfury
A very interesting read. Obviously I will need to read more to pull the plot together. Still though, your word usage and flow sizzles it talent.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
|
A very interesting read. Obviously I will need to read more to pull the plot together. Still though, your word usage and flow sizzles it talent.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbara,
Now this was a very effective use of colorling the dialog with some nice Southernisms; it was just enough to add flavor without getting silly with it. This is waht I was talking about. I think in those days a "harmonica" was commonly refered to as a "mouth organ", might give it another little authentic touch. Great job!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
 |
Dear Barbara,
Now this was a very effective use of colorling the dialog with some nice Southernisms; it was just enough to add flavor without getting silly with it. This is waht I was talking about. I think in those days a "harmonica" was commonly refered to as a "mouth organ", might give it another little authentic touch. Great job!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Good chapter, one can only feel sorry for the politics which ripped the US apart in this tragic war, and wonder at the way the two political parties seem to be whipping up the same divisions once more.
Civil war is always tragic, and here it makes a good starting point and backdrop to your story.
Patrick
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
|
Hi Barbara,
Good chapter, one can only feel sorry for the politics which ripped the US apart in this tragic war, and wonder at the way the two political parties seem to be whipping up the same divisions once more.
Civil war is always tragic, and here it makes a good starting point and backdrop to your story.
Patrick
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
This intrigued me from beginning to end. I am very curious about the part where Bradley wanted to go to Alice, knowing she was in labor, and then Alice saw him standing next to her. I can't wait to read what's going to happen next. Enjoy your vacation, and I look forward to your next post when you return.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
|
This intrigued me from beginning to end. I am very curious about the part where Bradley wanted to go to Alice, knowing she was in labor, and then Alice saw him standing next to her. I can't wait to read what's going to happen next. Enjoy your vacation, and I look forward to your next post when you return.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from unimatrix001
A sad, yet compelling story of love and loss.
Much improved southern tone in the dialog over part 1.
I would like to know what happened to Bradley's friend, Frank. Maybe that will be in a future part.
You wrote: Master Bradley done done
I think you can lose the second done.
Bradley's thought "About three hundred yards away, by that yonder tree I saw something" feels combersome in the context. I think it would sound better as an action statement rather than a thought. Just change I to he.
great story so far, can't wait to read more.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
|
A sad, yet compelling story of love and loss.
Much improved southern tone in the dialog over part 1.
I would like to know what happened to Bradley's friend, Frank. Maybe that will be in a future part.
You wrote: Master Bradley done done
I think you can lose the second done.
Bradley's thought "About three hundred yards away, by that yonder tree I saw something" feels combersome in the context. I think it would sound better as an action statement rather than a thought. Just change I to he.
great story so far, can't wait to read more.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
With the southern dialect during that time period the two dones are correct. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Stalking Wolf
A very good follow up chapter to the last one, action still smooth and detailed well. Look forward to the transition to modern times. Note, 4th para, believe "confederates" should be capitalized, might seem trivial and possibly is but as a true Son of the South must note. LOL
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
|
A very good follow up chapter to the last one, action still smooth and detailed well. Look forward to the transition to modern times. Note, 4th para, believe "confederates" should be capitalized, might seem trivial and possibly is but as a true Son of the South must note. LOL
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review. This Northern gal will fix that. LOL.
Comment from purrfect tale
I think I'm going to really like this one. You have me feeling sorry for Bradley and Alice already. smooth switch from him dying on the field to her having the baby.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
|
I think I'm going to really like this one. You have me feeling sorry for Bradley and Alice already. smooth switch from him dying on the field to her having the baby.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
