Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chapter 1, part II"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from Wes Guptill
The previous chapter that I had R&R'd had, to me, felt a little choppy (not too much), if memory serves me. At least that is how I regarded the work in my review. This segment, however, is clean and fluid. The dialogue and dialect work very well, and there is a great deal of plot conflict at work, that kept the pace moving at a good tempo. I was compelled to keep reading. And I am glad that I did, for I was treated to a lovely scene, a supernatural drift, if you will. Very nicely done. You have gotten my attention.
There were a couple of skips (calling the Yankees heathens, then having them praying in the next sentence; and a couple of minor punctuation points that could have been tighter...) in the prose, but nothing that was a detriment to the story. These can be polished and burnished with little effort, I am sure.
Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed it.
Peace to you and yours...
Salud!
Wes Guptill
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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The previous chapter that I had R&R'd had, to me, felt a little choppy (not too much), if memory serves me. At least that is how I regarded the work in my review. This segment, however, is clean and fluid. The dialogue and dialect work very well, and there is a great deal of plot conflict at work, that kept the pace moving at a good tempo. I was compelled to keep reading. And I am glad that I did, for I was treated to a lovely scene, a supernatural drift, if you will. Very nicely done. You have gotten my attention.
There were a couple of skips (calling the Yankees heathens, then having them praying in the next sentence; and a couple of minor punctuation points that could have been tighter...) in the prose, but nothing that was a detriment to the story. These can be polished and burnished with little effort, I am sure.
Thank you for sharing this. I enjoyed it.
Peace to you and yours...
Salud!
Wes Guptill
Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Marja G
An intriguing prequel that makes me curious about your science fiction/fantasy(?) main story.
Thoughtful description and set-up to create atmosphere. I felt like I could see, smell and feel everything that was happening. Well written. It reflects intimate knowledge or research of the historical events.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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An intriguing prequel that makes me curious about your science fiction/fantasy(?) main story.
Thoughtful description and set-up to create atmosphere. I felt like I could see, smell and feel everything that was happening. Well written. It reflects intimate knowledge or research of the historical events.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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My main novel will be romance.
Comment from JaclynNightbreeze
Pretty well done, not to much Info, or to Little. Loved the story. I love how it wasn't necessarily about the war, but you had it put in as well.
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Pretty well done, not to much Info, or to Little. Loved the story. I love how it wasn't necessarily about the war, but you had it put in as well.
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Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the review.
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Your welcome.
Comment from Bobbi22
This looks like an interesting story. I am always excited when I catch a story in one of the early chapters - now to go back and read chapter one. Very well written.
A couple of suggestions:
Hot damn, I bet we be the best colonic them yanks ever had. -- It seems like there should be an exclamation point after Hot damn
A three men scout team -- three-men (hyphenated)
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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This looks like an interesting story. I am always excited when I catch a story in one of the early chapters - now to go back and read chapter one. Very well written.
A couple of suggestions:
Hot damn, I bet we be the best colonic them yanks ever had. -- It seems like there should be an exclamation point after Hot damn
A three men scout team -- three-men (hyphenated)
Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check those areas out.
Comment from Doc Holiday
A well-written chapter of the sights, sounds, and smells of the battlefields of the South. Well told characterization of the story and the birth of James Bradley. Hope you have a great time with your grandchildren! Enjoy yourself! Doc
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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A well-written chapter of the sights, sounds, and smells of the battlefields of the South. Well told characterization of the story and the birth of James Bradley. Hope you have a great time with your grandchildren! Enjoy yourself! Doc
Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I just got back from Colombia and was glad to see you are posting chapters of a new book. I scanned the first chapter so I could catch up when I read this one. This is going to be a great story. You have developed your characters well and have made them interesting. I am behind so will quit for now but will wait for the next chapter. Well done.....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Hi Barbara,
I just got back from Colombia and was glad to see you are posting chapters of a new book. I scanned the first chapter so I could catch up when I read this one. This is going to be a great story. You have developed your characters well and have made them interesting. I am behind so will quit for now but will wait for the next chapter. Well done.....blessings, chey
Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and I am glad you are back.
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I'm glad I am back too!
Comment from MizKat
Wow, Barbara - I can tell this is going to be a great book. I know I really like both parts of Chapter One. Have a fun time visiting you grandchildren and your parents. Kat
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Wow, Barbara - I can tell this is going to be a great book. I know I really like both parts of Chapter One. Have a fun time visiting you grandchildren and your parents. Kat
Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cynthia Tee
There is only one word that comes to my mind about this background for you book...rivetting!! Very well done my friend and I can feel it is something I will enjoy very much. Good vivid description. Warm regards, Cynthia
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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There is only one word that comes to my mind about this background for you book...rivetting!! Very well done my friend and I can feel it is something I will enjoy very much. Good vivid description. Warm regards, Cynthia
Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review,
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Well done, Barbara. You do a good job with the description of Bradley bleeding to death while his comrades steal his equipment. His apprearance to his laboring wife Alice is a believable phenomenon and again perfectly played. Great pacing. A nice piece of historical fiction. Looking forward to part 3. :) nancy
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Well done, Barbara. You do a good job with the description of Bradley bleeding to death while his comrades steal his equipment. His apprearance to his laboring wife Alice is a believable phenomenon and again perfectly played. Great pacing. A nice piece of historical fiction. Looking forward to part 3. :) nancy
Comment Written 24-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from TammyGail
barbara excellent work crafting this chapter
well written and expressed like always
you pull me in and keep me
thanks for the notes as well
and enjoy your vacation
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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barbara excellent work crafting this chapter
well written and expressed like always
you pull me in and keep me
thanks for the notes as well
and enjoy your vacation
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
