Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chapter 1, part II"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
89 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hey Barb,
Really good chapter with Bradly falling, to the enemy robbing him as he lay dying, and then the touching way Bradly smoothed out the letter.
And really, once one has had labor pains, one can soooo identify with another in such a state!
I'm hooked!
Cheers &
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Hey Barb,
Really good chapter with Bradly falling, to the enemy robbing him as he lay dying, and then the touching way Bradly smoothed out the letter.
And really, once one has had labor pains, one can soooo identify with another in such a state!
I'm hooked!
Cheers &
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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God Bless.
Comment from Sankey
Good work again. Really looking forward to getting into the guts of the story now.
Glad I met you. Be back in here again soon. A ton of reviewing to do, but I wanted to get you started.
One spag in the Author notes.
The story is set i(n)s the 21st Century.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Good work again. Really looking forward to getting into the guts of the story now.
Glad I met you. Be back in here again soon. A ton of reviewing to do, but I wanted to get you started.
One spag in the Author notes.
The story is set i(n)s the 21st Century.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. Thank you again for the catch.
Comment from justmarly
"Hot Master Bradley done doneThis is good. I hope Mr Bradley doesn't die. I enjoy this story. By the way you are a very good looking woman. How do you keep your flash so smooth? Keep up the good work. Marly
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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"Hot Master Bradley done done
Comment Written 10-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I am so sorry you had to review this no points.
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That's ok I also met you have a very nice complexion. flesh*
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Thank you, I think I was born with good skin. One of the lucky ones. You can thank my Welsh mother and my half Native American and German father.
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wow I'm native American and people think I look younger than my age so maybe thats what helps LOL Did you say your stories give points and member dollars? MJ
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Yes, they do. My newest post is #2. It pays good.
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi Barbara,
Your descriptions are awesome as you made me feel as if I was right there seeing everything. It is so sad when their unable to return home especially when he was a new father and poor Alice. I feel for them. I saw no spag and the smooth flow left me with clear understanding. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
Your descriptions are awesome as you made me feel as if I was right there seeing everything. It is so sad when their unable to return home especially when he was a new father and poor Alice. I feel for them. I saw no spag and the smooth flow left me with clear understanding. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Thank you, again.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Oh man you starting with the heart strings already. Goodness woman I just barely recovered from Anna and Troy. Now you give me Bradley (I swear I hear a twang in me head just now) and Alice. What a way to give birth, and how deep was the love they shared that he could be with her in spirit. You are gonna traumatize me again. I just know it.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Oh man you starting with the heart strings already. Goodness woman I just barely recovered from Anna and Troy. Now you give me Bradley (I swear I hear a twang in me head just now) and Alice. What a way to give birth, and how deep was the love they shared that he could be with her in spirit. You are gonna traumatize me again. I just know it.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. You are a wonderful fan!!!!!!!
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
Avery dramatic end to a soldier's life, but though the miracle of prayer, he was there for his son's birth. I ave just a few specific comments:
1. A yank would have to be fools to face us riled up Southern boys. {For better flow, I suggest: Yanks would have to be fools to face us riled up Southern boys.}
2. Exhaustion and the soft sound of his buddy playing a harmonica brought on sleep. {I still have a harmonica that my great grandmother played during the Civil War. It is one of te few things tat she gave me. She was fourteen when the war started. she lived near Lamar, Missouri on the fringe of the Ozarks and told me a few stories about the war.]
3. [Hell --> Hell's] bells, my sick ol' granny could whip them without working up a sweat. {I think this may be a typo}
Great start1 Love and more Irish Hugs,
Roger
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Hi Barbara:)
Avery dramatic end to a soldier's life, but though the miracle of prayer, he was there for his son's birth. I ave just a few specific comments:
1. A yank would have to be fools to face us riled up Southern boys. {For better flow, I suggest: Yanks would have to be fools to face us riled up Southern boys.}
2. Exhaustion and the soft sound of his buddy playing a harmonica brought on sleep. {I still have a harmonica that my great grandmother played during the Civil War. It is one of te few things tat she gave me. She was fourteen when the war started. she lived near Lamar, Missouri on the fringe of the Ozarks and told me a few stories about the war.]
3. [Hell --> Hell's] bells, my sick ol' granny could whip them without working up a sweat. {I think this may be a typo}
Great start1 Love and more Irish Hugs,
Roger
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you and I have made the corrections.
Comment from marchapril
This is a very intense piece, especially when Bradley dies and goes to Alice. Very well written. "A three men scout team", I believe, should read "A three man..." Other than that it flowed. My favorite character by far is Beatrice. Was there another person in the room with her and Alice? At one point Beatrice says, "Miz Alice is seeing things." as if she was talking to a 3rd person. Was she?
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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This is a very intense piece, especially when Bradley dies and goes to Alice. Very well written. "A three men scout team", I believe, should read "A three man..." Other than that it flowed. My favorite character by far is Beatrice. Was there another person in the room with her and Alice? At one point Beatrice says, "Miz Alice is seeing things." as if she was talking to a 3rd person. Was she?
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your input.
Comment from forestport12
I would hate to compete against this great first chapter for book chapter of the month. As always I love your use of action verbs like fingered and how you understood the kind of writing that would create the mood with words for the time period and battle. You can't teach some writer instincts in class 101 or 201. I'm glad I got in on the first one. This particular book is appealing to me. Stan
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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I would hate to compete against this great first chapter for book chapter of the month. As always I love your use of action verbs like fingered and how you understood the kind of writing that would create the mood with words for the time period and battle. You can't teach some writer instincts in class 101 or 201. I'm glad I got in on the first one. This particular book is appealing to me. Stan
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging.
Comment from ScarletClearwater
This is a great addition to your book. I really thought it descriptive and smart. Well penned. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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This is a great addition to your book. I really thought it descriptive and smart. Well penned. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Great story! Lots of exciting action, fabulous dialogue and the southern slang rings true. The characters are more than believable, they leap off the page! The private thoughts are represented well with italics and the descriptive phrasing is clear, concise writing at its best- (slapping mosquitoes, etc.)An overall winner in my books! Why the heck do we only get six stars!!! More please...! of this excellent tale AND the stars! Bravo!!!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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Great story! Lots of exciting action, fabulous dialogue and the southern slang rings true. The characters are more than believable, they leap off the page! The private thoughts are represented well with italics and the descriptive phrasing is clear, concise writing at its best- (slapping mosquitoes, etc.)An overall winner in my books! Why the heck do we only get six stars!!! More please...! of this excellent tale AND the stars! Bravo!!!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2012
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Thank you for your kind review and encouraging words.
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You are very welcome - it was a wonderful read!
