Savannah Love
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Comment from Rdfrdmom2
barbara:
I'm excited you've started on another book. I hope
to be able to follow this one all the way through
and not get behind. I'm intrigued as to where you
might be going with this one.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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barbara:
I'm excited you've started on another book. I hope
to be able to follow this one all the way through
and not get behind. I'm intrigued as to where you
might be going with this one.
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rheabug
You seem to have hit another good subject for this book. I wish you the very best with this one. The picture was a nice addition to this presentation. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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You seem to have hit another good subject for this book. I wish you the very best with this one. The picture was a nice addition to this presentation. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the support.
Comment from Jendowoz
This is compelling to read, Barbara. I thoroughly enjoyed it. And can't wait for the next chapter. I am glad I have got in at the ground floor. It is written really well and couldn't stop. I was unaware I would find war time stories so Interesting
Regards, Jen
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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This is compelling to read, Barbara. I thoroughly enjoyed it. And can't wait for the next chapter. I am glad I have got in at the ground floor. It is written really well and couldn't stop. I was unaware I would find war time stories so Interesting
Regards, Jen
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lynnhartz
Excellent start! I am a Civil War buff and have been professionally published (my first) about John Brown's Raid and the hanging at Harper's Ferry, WV. I love stories set in that time period. Also, for years I took my children to Chatanooga every summer, and the cavern and the railroad-- oh, the wonderful memories!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Excellent start! I am a Civil War buff and have been professionally published (my first) about John Brown's Raid and the hanging at Harper's Ferry, WV. I love stories set in that time period. Also, for years I took my children to Chatanooga every summer, and the cavern and the railroad-- oh, the wonderful memories!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. This is not about the civil war but I needed it for the background information. The story is set in the 21st Century.
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I can't wait for what comes next in this century!
Comment from Janie King
I wondered what you would do for your next book. My dad and brother were in the Navy but I don't know a lot of military lingo..what is enfields? Great intro. God bless.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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I wondered what you would do for your next book. My dad and brother were in the Navy but I don't know a lot of military lingo..what is enfields? Great intro. God bless.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. Enfield are rifles.
Comment from AprilShower
Well done, Barbara. It's a good start. I want to read more. Sometimes we have to give the background before anyone will understand the main story. I can't help wonder if the story will take place in the south.
April :o)
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Well done, Barbara. It's a good start. I want to read more. Sometimes we have to give the background before anyone will understand the main story. I can't help wonder if the story will take place in the south.
April :o)
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara, I'm glad to find your new novel. This is a good start, in which you give us info of a military experience and life. I look forward to your next chapters.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Hi, Barbara, I'm glad to find your new novel. This is a good start, in which you give us info of a military experience and life. I look forward to your next chapters.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This a great start to your next book. I enjoyed reading this one. I love history, well I used too:) I can't remember any of that knowledge but I still like reading about it.
This I thought was well penned. You grabbed me quickly and held me all the way through.
This was wonderful work. Looking forward to this story ramping up:)
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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This a great start to your next book. I enjoyed reading this one. I love history, well I used too:) I can't remember any of that knowledge but I still like reading about it.
This I thought was well penned. You grabbed me quickly and held me all the way through.
This was wonderful work. Looking forward to this story ramping up:)
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Your new novel is off to a great start, barbara! I think your familiarity with the military life is a real advantage here. Your dialogue is authentic to my mind, and your knowlege of battles impressive. Looking forward to reading more. Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Your new novel is off to a great start, barbara! I think your familiarity with the military life is a real advantage here. Your dialogue is authentic to my mind, and your knowlege of battles impressive. Looking forward to reading more. Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from jjstar
This sounds like it's the set up for an epic saga. I can't wait for the next chapter. I really loved your bits of dialect and local color language in the letter to Alice. There was also a line where MG Hood says, "Load them up." I found myself thinking, being a lifelong army brat, would it come out more like "Load 'em up, ladies!" (Famous army line) They also say ooorahs...pronounced uruhhhhh with the emphasis on the first u..whenever they go anywhere! It's how army guys always end their sentences...
I think I kept waiting for some of the army slang or Virginia boy talk...something tells me we'll have some coming up, I hope? :)
exodus of Virginia--just thinking---maybe from Virginia?
Hate to be nit-picky---but this might be a little awkward--
He won't figure we'd be arriving by train."=== maybe a bit better to say- He was thinking we'e be arriving by train, or he didn't figure...just a thought...
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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This sounds like it's the set up for an epic saga. I can't wait for the next chapter. I really loved your bits of dialect and local color language in the letter to Alice. There was also a line where MG Hood says, "Load them up." I found myself thinking, being a lifelong army brat, would it come out more like "Load 'em up, ladies!" (Famous army line) They also say ooorahs...pronounced uruhhhhh with the emphasis on the first u..whenever they go anywhere! It's how army guys always end their sentences...
I think I kept waiting for some of the army slang or Virginia boy talk...something tells me we'll have some coming up, I hope? :)
exodus of Virginia--just thinking---maybe from Virginia?
Hate to be nit-picky---but this might be a little awkward--
He won't figure we'd be arriving by train."=== maybe a bit better to say- He was thinking we'e be arriving by train, or he didn't figure...just a thought...
Comment Written 15-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2012
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I'll take a another look at that area. I was an Army wife for 23 years. The books I have on writing suggest that we lonely use dialect very sparingly. I am trying to do that, just to get the favor. We'll see how it works. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yeah, then wouldn't you know I married into the military. You think I would have learned my lesson lol. Okay, about the dialect..that is great to know! I didn't know that at all! I was wondering if that was the case with you. I thought you might be leading up to something. I think I'm just caught up on the dialect thing because the picture that you've painted just screams what we see in movies. Or I envision children's books I've read or used in teaching literature. At any rate, I'm excited to read the next chapter! One more thing about dialect, my husband has a book posted here, and there is heavy, heavy dialect all the way through. Should I tell him to clean it up a bit?
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He's the author, it's his choice. Here's what my book says: The 38 Most Common Fiction Writing Mistakes by Jack M Binkham. Chapter 17 page 47. I will copy the first two paragraphs. "There was a time not so long ago, when fiction writers strove for authenticity in some of their stories by attempting to imitate regional and ethnic dialects and pronunciations by purposely misspeliing words in their dialogue. Today such practices have fallen into disfavor. For one thing, it takes a very high degree of skill to depart from standard English in dialogue without unnecessarily distracting the reader. For another, styles simply change, and stories using such devices today often seem quaint and old-fashioned. In addition the senisbilities of minorities are keener today, and they tend to view such mangling of characters' speech as offensive.
For all these reason, the use of funny spelling or other typographical devices to inidcate minority diviations from standard American speech is frowned upon by most cautious editor, and may earn a rejection for your otherwise admirable story."
