Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Chapter 1 part I"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
87 total reviews
Comment from mumsyone
A good beginning chapter, Barbara, with some interesting background to begin your book.
"We'll call it the September 7, 1863 exodus (Exodus) of Virginia."
Frank removed his ragged floppy cap, scratched his scraggly brown hair, before replacing it. (You may want to reword this sentence; here,it sounds like Frank replaced his hair after scratching it.)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
  |
A good beginning chapter, Barbara, with some interesting background to begin your book.
"We'll call it the September 7, 1863 exodus (Exodus) of Virginia."
Frank removed his ragged floppy cap, scratched his scraggly brown hair, before replacing it. (You may want to reword this sentence; here,it sounds like Frank replaced his hair after scratching it.)
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for catching that. I once had a table answer the phone, by my wording.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I loved how you set the beginning of this story. I'm sure this is going to be another very interesting book. You are such a great writer, I love the realistic way of your writing.
God bless Barbara!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
|
I loved how you set the beginning of this story. I'm sure this is going to be another very interesting book. You are such a great writer, I love the realistic way of your writing.
God bless Barbara!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
Fantastic dialogue and description. It's obvious from reading this interesting and compelling piece that the author has done much meticulous research to be able to compose a ''period'' piece of such depth and weight. Well done! Thanks for sharing this one here.
cheers
js
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
|
Fantastic dialogue and description. It's obvious from reading this interesting and compelling piece that the author has done much meticulous research to be able to compose a ''period'' piece of such depth and weight. Well done! Thanks for sharing this one here.
cheers
js
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mishelly
As soon as I started reading this I felt myself being drawn into another place and time. You have set the beginning of your story very nicely, and have already caught my interest. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
|
As soon as I started reading this I felt myself being drawn into another place and time. You have set the beginning of your story very nicely, and have already caught my interest. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from DianeLWood
Obviously you are a polished writer Barbara. This background piece has the right combination of description, action and dialogue. I enjoyed reading it. Will be interesting seeing where the story goes. Cheers, Diane.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
|
Obviously you are a polished writer Barbara. This background piece has the right combination of description, action and dialogue. I enjoyed reading it. Will be interesting seeing where the story goes. Cheers, Diane.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Readywriter52
War is never fun. The troops were not supplied very well. This was described well in this chapter. The civil war was hard on both the south and north. The soldiers fought well despite their poor conditions.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
|
War is never fun. The troops were not supplied very well. This was described well in this chapter. The civil war was hard on both the south and north. The soldiers fought well despite their poor conditions.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cornelius2000
An intriguing beginning to your novel. Good characters, good dialogue and well written. My only suggestion would be to put some asterists ******* to show the passage of time after the sentence that beings, "Our stomachs not growling," etc. Nice start.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
|
An intriguing beginning to your novel. Good characters, good dialogue and well written. My only suggestion would be to put some asterists ******* to show the passage of time after the sentence that beings, "Our stomachs not growling," etc. Nice start.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the suggestion. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Ed_Anderson
I'm intrigued as to where the story is going! You have me hooked, and interested in everything that is going on. The characters are interesting, even though I know you said that the story wasn't taking place during the Civil War, I hope we 'hear' more from them! Great piece!!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
|
I'm intrigued as to where the story is going! You have me hooked, and interested in everything that is going on. The characters are interesting, even though I know you said that the story wasn't taking place during the Civil War, I hope we 'hear' more from them! Great piece!!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
-
My next post is the end of the section about the Civil War, but it does have a background in my 21st century novel.
Comment from Sasha
I didn't see anything that needed to be changed. I do have one question. The Background information at the top is distracting. Even though you explain that this story takes place in the present, I don't think this is needed. The reader will be able to figure this out as they read.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
|
I didn't see anything that needed to be changed. I do have one question. The Background information at the top is distracting. Even though you explain that this story takes place in the present, I don't think this is needed. The reader will be able to figure this out as they read.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review. I am honored you're reading me.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Starting this almost 200 years ago certainly has me intrigued. I'm looking forward to seeing how it will come together. Nice start.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
|
Starting this almost 200 years ago certainly has me intrigued. I'm looking forward to seeing how it will come together. Nice start.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2012
-
Thank you for the kind review.
