Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Chapter 1 part I"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
87 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for the additional details about the photograph and the list of states in your notes. The "background" you provide makes the reader curious to learn more about the period and the story itself. Your use of regionalisms and jesting, like his feet getting "lots of air" adds to the realism. The fact that chamber pot contents were used in making gunpowder and the meaning of the Cherokee word are fascinating. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thank you for the additional details about the photograph and the list of states in your notes. The "background" you provide makes the reader curious to learn more about the period and the story itself. Your use of regionalisms and jesting, like his feet getting "lots of air" adds to the realism. The fact that chamber pot contents were used in making gunpowder and the meaning of the Cherokee word are fascinating. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 05-Jul-2014
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2014
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi Barbara,
By your notation at the beginning, I take it this chapter is a prologue of sorts to set the the stage for your novel?
Likes the easy flow of words between Bradly and Frank.
Touching end hook about him mailing the letter, if he could find a way to mail it!
On to the next chapter.
Cheers &
Keep Smilin'... Jax
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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Hi Barbara,
By your notation at the beginning, I take it this chapter is a prologue of sorts to set the the stage for your novel?
Likes the easy flow of words between Bradly and Frank.
Touching end hook about him mailing the letter, if he could find a way to mail it!
On to the next chapter.
Cheers &
Keep Smilin'... Jax
Comment Written 17-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2014
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I felt my readers needed the background to follow and know who Bradley is. Thank you.
Comment from Sankey
Good work. Really interesting story. I have always enjoyed for some queer reason reading about the Civil war and so on in USA. I will be glad when we get into the "meat" of it all. No Spags.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Good work. Really interesting story. I have always enjoyed for some queer reason reading about the Civil war and so on in USA. I will be glad when we get into the "meat" of it all. No Spags.
Comment Written 09-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by. Wow, the entire book WOW!!!
Comment from mtnspirit
Hi Barbara,
It sure is good to reading your work again. I have been gone for sometime but I'm back. Just can't stay away. I did change my screen name to mtnspirit. Your story sounds great and I'm sure you had to do a lot of research for this one. I saw your latest post last night and knew I'd have to read the entire piece so please be patient as I get caught
Up. No spag and a flows smoothly. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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Hi Barbara,
It sure is good to reading your work again. I have been gone for sometime but I'm back. Just can't stay away. I did change my screen name to mtnspirit. Your story sounds great and I'm sure you had to do a lot of research for this one. I saw your latest post last night and knew I'd have to read the entire piece so please be patient as I get caught
Up. No spag and a flows smoothly. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2012
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I appreciate your support.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
I like the set up so far, but can't help wondering if 9/11 will have a more significant meaning further into the story. This is certainly a different feel than your previous work. Lets see where it takes me. Hugs.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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I like the set up so far, but can't help wondering if 9/11 will have a more significant meaning further into the story. This is certainly a different feel than your previous work. Lets see where it takes me. Hugs.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Barbara:)
This seems to provide an authentic feel for a story with origins in the Civil War. Since this prologue simply sets the background, I can't tell how relevant it will be to the overall novel. It is well-written and gives a ood feel for the lack of supplies for the rebs.
Love and Irish Hugs. I look forward to reading more.
Roger
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Hi Barbara:)
This seems to provide an authentic feel for a story with origins in the Civil War. Since this prologue simply sets the background, I can't tell how relevant it will be to the overall novel. It is well-written and gives a ood feel for the lack of supplies for the rebs.
Love and Irish Hugs. I look forward to reading more.
Roger
Comment Written 07-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from donaldww
I enjoyed reading this opening to your book. The dialogue is well written and conversation during a march has an opening of a movie feel to i'. Great way to get things out into the open for the reader right away. They can essentially reveal anything you need to set up your story.
One thing I noticed, and this is for you simply to ponder, is the language in the first letter to Alice. It felt like there might be some 21st century sounding phrases in there. For example:
...and make-shift coffee's getting pretty old.
The idea of a concept rather than an object getting old seems like something that has started within the last few years.
And the word procure.
I may be blowing hot air, but I thought you might take a second look.
Everything else seemed perfect to me!
DW
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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I enjoyed reading this opening to your book. The dialogue is well written and conversation during a march has an opening of a movie feel to i'. Great way to get things out into the open for the reader right away. They can essentially reveal anything you need to set up your story.
One thing I noticed, and this is for you simply to ponder, is the language in the first letter to Alice. It felt like there might be some 21st century sounding phrases in there. For example:
...and make-shift coffee's getting pretty old.
The idea of a concept rather than an object getting old seems like something that has started within the last few years.
And the word procure.
I may be blowing hot air, but I thought you might take a second look.
Everything else seemed perfect to me!
DW
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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I will take a look at it. I wanted to make it clear that the soldiers didn't have real coffee. I was often made by acorns or chickory. Thank you for your kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from WilliamDeen
This Chapter 1 part I, Savannah Love, is well written. It has interesting historical information. I found NO grammatical corrections needed. Will check out the next part.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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This Chapter 1 part I, Savannah Love, is well written. It has interesting historical information. I found NO grammatical corrections needed. Will check out the next part.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from elgone
This is an interesting start to a story.i know you say it is a preface to the real story that follows, but I like the historic element of it. It's like watching something on the history channel.
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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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This is an interesting start to a story.i know you say it is a preface to the real story that follows, but I like the historic element of it. It's like watching something on the history channel.
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Comment Written 23-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I have a question that you might be able to answer. I used harmonic instead of mouth organ, which is what they would call it during that time frame. If I used mouth organ do you think most readers would know what it is?
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Most people with southern roots would. If it is in dialogue it probably is how it would be referred to. I suppose you'd have to explain it in notes. I doubt most people in the UK would know what it means.
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It's not in dialogue, so I think I may leave it as is. In a novel their won't be author's notes. Thank you.
Comment from Heidixoxo
Hello Barbara,
I was anxious to stop by and read this story. Naturally I had to start with the beginning, right?? You never seem to disappoint. You are off to a great start and I'm excited to read more. See you at the next posting....xoxo
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Hello Barbara,
I was anxious to stop by and read this story. Naturally I had to start with the beginning, right?? You never seem to disappoint. You are off to a great start and I'm excited to read more. See you at the next posting....xoxo
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I posted today. I hope you can read it while it's still promoted.
