Leap
addiction67 total reviews
Comment from Doc Holiday
Making the change in your daily routine is the hardest thing one can do especially when it involves drug usage. You have pointed out all of the benefits in making this change in your poem. I think your poem Leap is what one must do in order to change their live, a small step, won't cut it!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Making the change in your daily routine is the hardest thing one can do especially when it involves drug usage. You have pointed out all of the benefits in making this change in your poem. I think your poem Leap is what one must do in order to change their live, a small step, won't cut it!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting
Comment from jb wade
I read your work. The word in the next to last stanza 'suppose' should have a 'd' added? If added, I feel the meaning is more clear. I looked both words up in the dictionary before I wrote the review. A re-read? The artwork helps carry your poem. Thanks.
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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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I read your work. The word in the next to last stanza 'suppose' should have a 'd' added? If added, I feel the meaning is more clear. I looked both words up in the dictionary before I wrote the review. A re-read? The artwork helps carry your poem. Thanks.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting. I will look at your correction suggestion
Comment from rashi kumar
I adore the selection of words and phrases,
again a wonderful rhyming!
I suggest, the font size should be at least 16 or 18 for clarity in Comic sans.
The tone and tenor is very powerful!
Pleasure to read!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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I adore the selection of words and phrases,
again a wonderful rhyming!
I suggest, the font size should be at least 16 or 18 for clarity in Comic sans.
The tone and tenor is very powerful!
Pleasure to read!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting. I changed it to 18. Thanks for the help!
Comment from TammyGail
This was really a creative piece of writing
well expressed and written
your imagery compelling and indeed perfect
thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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This was really a creative piece of writing
well expressed and written
your imagery compelling and indeed perfect
thanks for sharing
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Very powerful poem, sort of how I felt before during and after the addiction of nicotine. Love the lines wash away..., don't be afraid... Great job on the imagery and flow. Nice work!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Very powerful poem, sort of how I felt before during and after the addiction of nicotine. Love the lines wash away..., don't be afraid... Great job on the imagery and flow. Nice work!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting
Comment from gordonmrln
You have chosen your words very cleverly her my friend and arranged them so your poem has a natural flow to it.It does not make the reader feel they are been hurried along.I like the theme of your work it is sometimes hard to look at one's self and be content at what you see.Although we would all like to say that we are content how many of us actually are.Yes your poem is good food for thought.I also love the Image you have chosen as the cracks appear does the mask we wear fall away.Top marks for this effort your style is forever improving and I enjoy your work very much please keep up the good work.Thank You.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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You have chosen your words very cleverly her my friend and arranged them so your poem has a natural flow to it.It does not make the reader feel they are been hurried along.I like the theme of your work it is sometimes hard to look at one's self and be content at what you see.Although we would all like to say that we are content how many of us actually are.Yes your poem is good food for thought.I also love the Image you have chosen as the cracks appear does the mask we wear fall away.Top marks for this effort your style is forever improving and I enjoy your work very much please keep up the good work.Thank You.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting
Comment from Tristian
what a lovely, deep poem! Your rhyming and cadence reflect the feeling...you are where you are supposed to be...and ...look within for something true... are just wonderful. A beautiful, uplifting poem. Thank you.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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what a lovely, deep poem! Your rhyming and cadence reflect the feeling...you are where you are supposed to be...and ...look within for something true... are just wonderful. A beautiful, uplifting poem. Thank you.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Nicely done. Although this poem was regarding addiction, I think it could apply to other areas of our life, too. This was good to read and it just seemed to flow from the page.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Nicely done. Although this poem was regarding addiction, I think it could apply to other areas of our life, too. This was good to read and it just seemed to flow from the page.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting
Comment from geetika sethi
at the outset let m e congratulate for trying to bring about a change and there after welcome something new. i loved this piece of poetry which is so very educative, serious as well as let us know that a little lonliness can take us into a shell . but once we get out of that shell , we are ready to overcome our inhibitions and welcome a new start.well done.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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at the outset let m e congratulate for trying to bring about a change and there after welcome something new. i loved this piece of poetry which is so very educative, serious as well as let us know that a little lonliness can take us into a shell . but once we get out of that shell , we are ready to overcome our inhibitions and welcome a new start.well done.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting
Comment from Jen Gentry
Pierre,
This is another great and inspirational write I am enjoying your poems very much this evening, you have lifted my spirits
Thank you
Jenny
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Pierre,
This is another great and inspirational write I am enjoying your poems very much this evening, you have lifted my spirits
Thank you
Jenny
Comment Written 02-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind words. Thank you for taking the time to read the poem and commenting
