Leap
addiction67 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
a very interesting picture my friend and your poem wow addiction is a terrible thing and takes such strength to fight against fabulous thank you gazza
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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a very interesting picture my friend and your poem wow addiction is a terrible thing and takes such strength to fight against fabulous thank you gazza
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Comment from James crofoot
Excellent rhyming and meter, making it flow so smoothly. Thus very easy to read. I really liked the message, you know, don't worry, that its useless. peace
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Excellent rhyming and meter, making it flow so smoothly. Thus very easy to read. I really liked the message, you know, don't worry, that its useless. peace
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
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Comment from Jacklefty
This is art! I sincerely enjoyed this read. The poem is well conceived and written. It has good flow and form. The storyline is so true!
(Sometime, I think we push ourselves to fare.)
An Outstanding write.
Jacklefty
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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This is art! I sincerely enjoyed this read. The poem is well conceived and written. It has good flow and form. The storyline is so true!
(Sometime, I think we push ourselves to fare.)
An Outstanding write.
Jacklefty
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thanks again for the 6th star!
Comment from cvcopac
Hello! This one makes sense and I sense that we're back on track again. I hope. Good disciplined stanzas with nice rhythm and not bad rhyming couplets. Again, lots of re-used imagery but good cohesion of thoughts.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Hello! This one makes sense and I sense that we're back on track again. I hope. Good disciplined stanzas with nice rhythm and not bad rhyming couplets. Again, lots of re-used imagery but good cohesion of thoughts.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate you reading the poem and commenting
Comment from stephybs
This is a very well written and very well thought through piece. Its meaning goes quite deep too! The art work is quite striking too! Excellent! Stephanie
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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This is a very well written and very well thought through piece. Its meaning goes quite deep too! The art work is quite striking too! Excellent! Stephanie
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate you reading the poem and commenting
Comment from Scarbrems
This has great depth and perspicacity. It has good pace and rhythm and avoids plunging into schmaltzy moralising. I found it very thought provoking.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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This has great depth and perspicacity. It has good pace and rhythm and avoids plunging into schmaltzy moralising. I found it very thought provoking.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate you reading the poem and commenting
Comment from mumsyone
Your poem has a good message, is well written, and flows well until the very last lines, where 'world' and 'turmoil' aren't even near rhymes. I hope you will consider some sort of change there, to make you poem perfect.
In keeping with the tense:
Curtain drops, you began (begin) to weep
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Your poem has a good message, is well written, and flows well until the very last lines, where 'world' and 'turmoil' aren't even near rhymes. I hope you will consider some sort of change there, to make you poem perfect.
In keeping with the tense:
Curtain drops, you began (begin) to weep
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the correction and I will consider your suggestion. I appreciate you reading the poem and commenting
Comment from Silverlock
I thought this was a very well written and moving poem about breaking free of addiction.
Makes one imagine this isn't the day
To take the leap and make the change
That others hope will relieve your pain
Great imagery throughout, really enjoyed it, and I loved your accompanying artwork.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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I thought this was a very well written and moving poem about breaking free of addiction.
Makes one imagine this isn't the day
To take the leap and make the change
That others hope will relieve your pain
Great imagery throughout, really enjoyed it, and I loved your accompanying artwork.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate you reading the poem and commenting
Comment from Kelleigh
Oh, what a poignant and real tale of what can happen as life takes it's toll on youlittle by little with each passing day/month/year. But your point is well takes, don't let your past dictate who you are, but let it be a part of who you become...I believe Dear Abby said that once. Although we cannot change our past, the path in front of us has yet to be carved, and it is up to us to make our own decision as to whether or not it leads to a good or a bad place. Thank you so much for sharing, this was quite thought provoking!!
~Kelleigh
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Oh, what a poignant and real tale of what can happen as life takes it's toll on youlittle by little with each passing day/month/year. But your point is well takes, don't let your past dictate who you are, but let it be a part of who you become...I believe Dear Abby said that once. Although we cannot change our past, the path in front of us has yet to be carved, and it is up to us to make our own decision as to whether or not it leads to a good or a bad place. Thank you so much for sharing, this was quite thought provoking!!
~Kelleigh
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate you reading the poem and commenting
Comment from write hand blue
This is well written, with a thought provoking
picture. I do like the rhythm of this expressive,
visual and concise poem. A most enjoyable,
inspiring read... Mel.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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This is well written, with a thought provoking
picture. I do like the rhythm of this expressive,
visual and concise poem. A most enjoyable,
inspiring read... Mel.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate you reading the poem and commenting
