Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

I loved the ending, totally didn't see it coming. Roger was a real creep. Good luck in the contest. I haven't had much luck with them either.

 Comment Written 11-May-2012

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reply by the author on 11-May-2012

I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the review, Cindy... and for the good luck wish, but I think that ship may have sailed.

Comment from Meta~Mark

Excellent

wow...hollywood stars, moon crashing at the earth..abductions leadign to pregnacy as a pervert is carted away...this is a great story!

bravo!

 Comment Written 10-May-2012

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reply by the author on 10-May-2012

Thank you, Mark... I appreciate your appreciation. lol I'll never understand these contest results. Strange stories get a lot of votes and other stories I thought were great don't get many. Makes me think people only read one and vote and that's too bad. If you do vote I hope you'll read the other stories too. Thanks for the praise for this. I agree 100%. lol

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Well, you suprised me. I wasn't expecting the ending. The writing was a little choppy with a lot of small paragraphs, but the story was good.

 Comment Written 10-May-2012

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reply by the author on 10-May-2012

Hi Robyn, Yes, the writing did get choppy. This particular story should have been at least a thousand words, maybe fifteen hundred, so description and detail kind of took a hit. Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

Comment from Darla9

Excellent

This is so brilliant, I can't even tell you how much I love it. Roger was a freaking genius LOL I was not expecting the ending at all, I think we've got a winner here :)

 Comment Written 09-May-2012

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reply by the author on 10-May-2012

LoL Yes, I guess he was a genius, now that you mention it, a pathetic psychopathic genius, but, then again, no one is perfect. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Thanks for the great review.

And that's a great name, Darla. Reminds me of Angel on t.v.

reply by Darla9 on 10-May-2012

Funny you say that, that's where the name is from :) I didn't want to use my real name and I am a massive fan of Angel/Buffy. Darla was always one of my favourites. Yes I know she is evil LOL but I couldn't help but like her. And I always thought her name was beautiful so I stole it. :)

reply by the author on 10-May-2012

Kool, a fellow Joss Whedon fan. See Cabin in the Woods and the Avengers. The man has not lost it. Loved them both.. Oh, and Darla was my favorite. I also liked that actress' work on Dexter. I wish I had a spaceship in a soundstage for that actress. lol

Comment from mommerry

Excellent

What a horrific story. I was sailing out in space with them and wondering what would be the point of surviving and then the smashing - surprising - very imaginative story ended so much different that I expected. No SPAG. Great read.

 Comment Written 09-May-2012

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reply by the author on 09-May-2012

Thank you. Yeah, I guess despite her finding out she'd been basically kidnapped and raped, in one sense I think she'd feel relieved. That does qualify as horrific. Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment.

Comment from Chris Tee

Excellent

Wow! Now this is how a short story should be told! It captures the reader and ends with a fantastic twist in the tail. Excellent work here! His doomsday has arrived for sure!

 Comment Written 09-May-2012

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reply by the author on 09-May-2012

I'm glad you liked it. Yes, I think it's one of my best stories, but I hate the title. Wish I could have thought of something better there. Thanks so much for the excellent review.

Comment from inkedone

Excellent

Excellent writing. I love the twist at the end. This story was really well thought out. Great job and interesting imagination.

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 Comment Written 08-May-2012

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reply by the author on 08-May-2012

Thanks for taking the time Ink. Your opinion is always respected and appreciated.

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Exceptional

trying to see if others escaped into space << verb tense: if others HAD escaped...

WOW! WHat an awesome ending! Bravo! A true masterpiece! Deserves the prize for sure!

 Comment Written 08-May-2012

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reply by the author on 08-May-2012

Wow, thank you so much for the six star rating. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'd been kicking this idea around for years and finally created a prompt that would force me to write it. And, yes, that 'had' was a casualty of cuts to get this thing under the word count, but you're right. I think I should put it back. There are a lot of other shortcuts I took too, but I think the other cuts may have actually improved the writing. lol

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 08-May-2012

I told him he was nuts, that the spaceship he had built << If you change "he had" to "he'd" you will lose one word in the count. :)

reply by the author on 08-May-2012

Awesome! lol I'm actually going to do that right now. I keep stressing about all the stuff I had to leave out. Thanks.