Faces
A poem on the darkness of depression16 total reviews
Comment from Jersey Dreamer
Hi Dejohnsrld,
Your poem was an interesting read, I couldn't quite make out what it is you were.
It may help to have a little description in the author notes to give your great poem more punch,
It is a lovely group of expressions though,
Best wishes
Carl
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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Hi Dejohnsrld,
Your poem was an interesting read, I couldn't quite make out what it is you were.
It may help to have a little description in the author notes to give your great poem more punch,
It is a lovely group of expressions though,
Best wishes
Carl
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2010
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Thank you kindly for the review. I agree using the author's notes might have been beneficial.
Comment from Ruffyan
This could be a haunting reminder of the constant fight to keep depression under control. While the various phases or moods seems pretty normal, there is that disturbing, recurring darkness and numbness. Well stated. I take it that this is a free verse poem - this seems pretty effective. I hope that the subject is seeking help.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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This could be a haunting reminder of the constant fight to keep depression under control. While the various phases or moods seems pretty normal, there is that disturbing, recurring darkness and numbness. Well stated. I take it that this is a free verse poem - this seems pretty effective. I hope that the subject is seeking help.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I have been under a Dr.'s care for many years ans haven't been this depressed for about 11 years. The fear of going back to that point is always there though. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from ejebb1951
Everything blends, everything flows so well. This was me in times past. Brought back so many memories. Well written with such emotion. By the way, love the photograph. It goes well with depression. I'm so glad for that sliver of light.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Everything blends, everything flows so well. This was me in times past. Brought back so many memories. Well written with such emotion. By the way, love the photograph. It goes well with depression. I'm so glad for that sliver of light.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you for your kind review. I'm glad the emotions make sense to others. I too am glad for the light that I have in my present life.
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And it gets even better.
Comment from RYME4U
Very deep and dark poem but well written. It has a hint of hope at the end. Many aspects of depression are represented here. This lets the reader know how it feels/ Good work
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Very deep and dark poem but well written. It has a hint of hope at the end. Many aspects of depression are represented here. This lets the reader know how it feels/ Good work
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you kindly for your review. So many people think that depression is just being a little sad. It is so much more than that.
Comment from kintesiegel
This poem about depression made me shiver. Boy do I hate those feelings and the pain that goes with them. You expressed it well. The word transcend seemed a little bit off at first then I saw you meant that the darkness permeated everything. good writing
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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This poem about depression made me shiver. Boy do I hate those feelings and the pain that goes with them. You expressed it well. The word transcend seemed a little bit off at first then I saw you meant that the darkness permeated everything. good writing
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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Thank you kindly for the review. I'm glad I was able to express it in a way that was meaningful to others. Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
dejohnsrld:
having battled depression for many years,
I truly understand everything you have
written in this poem -- it is such an
insidious disease as one never knows when
it is going to rear its ugly head
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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dejohnsrld:
having battled depression for many years,
I truly understand everything you have
written in this poem -- it is such an
insidious disease as one never knows when
it is going to rear its ugly head
thanks for sharing
love,
jan
Comment Written 07-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2010
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I am sorry you also have depression. This is a bad time for me when the days get shorter and the time changes. I'm not anywhere as depressed as I was when I had the experiences I wrote about. I'm glad my poem was on target and you could relate to it.
Take care. Debbie
Comment from Jen Gentry
My My I think you are describing me perfectly mood swings and all, wow, this is really great
That is the worst
Unable to feel joy, pain
Darkness, light
Contented
Nothing matters
I don't matter.
I love this stanza because I can relate to it so well. Great write.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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My My I think you are describing me perfectly mood swings and all, wow, this is really great
That is the worst
Unable to feel joy, pain
Darkness, light
Contented
Nothing matters
I don't matter.
I love this stanza because I can relate to it so well. Great write.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2010
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I am sorry you also have these feelings. Sometimes I think I am the only one. The fall with the shorter days is always hard for me. After Thaksgiving, I usually fell better. I guess I get a little bit of Christmas spirit. Thank you for the review. Take care.
Comment from richard7
A well expressed view on depression
the many sides of it and how closing in it can be.
Lost in the darkness
Wandering, wondering
I like how this can be taken on 2 points, physical lost, and mental lost.
Has a good flow to it to end in a glimmer of hope with a positive way out.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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A well expressed view on depression
the many sides of it and how closing in it can be.
Lost in the darkness
Wandering, wondering
I like how this can be taken on 2 points, physical lost, and mental lost.
Has a good flow to it to end in a glimmer of hope with a positive way out.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2010
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Thank you kindly for your review. Have a great day.
Comment from 11:17
Wow! Yes, I do love your poem. It surely speaks to my heart and soul. You have expressed the exact way I have felt many times over. I love the way you chose to use faces to describe it. Great idea!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2010
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Wow! Yes, I do love your poem. It surely speaks to my heart and soul. You have expressed the exact way I have felt many times over. I love the way you chose to use faces to describe it. Great idea!
Comment Written 03-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2010
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Thank you kindly for your review. I noticed you also spoke of being numb in your last post. Do you have a worsening of your "darkness" when the days get shorter? I do and struggle with it every fall. Take care.
Comment from quashdog
Been there, many years ago. The worst depression I ever felt was as an adolescent. Funny thing is that what had me down back then pales in comparison to my adult troubles. There comes a point when you have to decide well screw it, every problem has a solution and I'm not going to stop living until all my problems are resolved. That will only happen the day that I die.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2010
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Been there, many years ago. The worst depression I ever felt was as an adolescent. Funny thing is that what had me down back then pales in comparison to my adult troubles. There comes a point when you have to decide well screw it, every problem has a solution and I'm not going to stop living until all my problems are resolved. That will only happen the day that I die.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2010
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2010
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I have not been to the point of numbness and darkness that I describe here for several years. It is always a fear that I will slip back into it especially in the fall when the days are shorter.
