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Comment from ZigzagMLT
Gayle, bravo! You did a great job capturing the scene.
I must say that it might have been a little tougher than that for Cathy to have a dog on her when suffering from broken ribs.
That dog of yours makes the scene - it's that relationship, unbridled love, that did it for me.
What a lovely ending. Best of luck with getting this one out to your fans and new readers. I am sure that it is going to please!
Zigzagmlt
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Gayle, bravo! You did a great job capturing the scene.
I must say that it might have been a little tougher than that for Cathy to have a dog on her when suffering from broken ribs.
That dog of yours makes the scene - it's that relationship, unbridled love, that did it for me.
What a lovely ending. Best of luck with getting this one out to your fans and new readers. I am sure that it is going to please!
Zigzagmlt
Comment Written 25-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2010
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Hi Ziggi and thank you so much for the wonderful words. They warm my heart, for sure. I'm in the middle of giving this story a final edit and then it's off to be published.
Again, thank you so much for your support and encouragement!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from RenieReader
Oh, Gayle, this is just glorious and super and terrific. What a wonderful miracle for all of them, but especially Cathy. I wonder if it will change her artistic style? Hmmmm. Interesting thought. :D I'm going to have to join the friends for a good cry too. Thank you, sweet friend, for a fantastic read. I love your characters and the story plot. Doggies really add zest to the combination.
leaving her only for trips to the rest()room. restroom==one word.
Hugs,
Renie
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Oh, Gayle, this is just glorious and super and terrific. What a wonderful miracle for all of them, but especially Cathy. I wonder if it will change her artistic style? Hmmmm. Interesting thought. :D I'm going to have to join the friends for a good cry too. Thank you, sweet friend, for a fantastic read. I love your characters and the story plot. Doggies really add zest to the combination.
leaving her only for trips to the rest()room. restroom==one word.
Hugs,
Renie
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Hey Renie,
I'm so glad you liked this one. I'll link up those words and thank you, sweetness, for always being such a shining light. I so appreciate you!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from William Walz
Forgive me for not keeping up with the story. You post far faster than my ability to keep up with it. But what the heck, many times I'll read the ending of a short story or a novel first.
If everything that came before is as good as this then I think you have a winner on your hands. You completely capture the tension and fear for Cathy's situation with concise, meaningful dialog and brief but telling descriptions of the scene. The ending sets just the right tone of joy without being maudlin.
I've gone over this several times, trying to find some change or way to improve but I can't offer anything at all.
Sorry I had to read as a stand-alone but even as such it still is a wonderful piece of writing. If I can ever get off my lazy ass I promise I will go back and read from start to finish, just for my own enjoyment.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Forgive me for not keeping up with the story. You post far faster than my ability to keep up with it. But what the heck, many times I'll read the ending of a short story or a novel first.
If everything that came before is as good as this then I think you have a winner on your hands. You completely capture the tension and fear for Cathy's situation with concise, meaningful dialog and brief but telling descriptions of the scene. The ending sets just the right tone of joy without being maudlin.
I've gone over this several times, trying to find some change or way to improve but I can't offer anything at all.
Sorry I had to read as a stand-alone but even as such it still is a wonderful piece of writing. If I can ever get off my lazy ass I promise I will go back and read from start to finish, just for my own enjoyment.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Hey Bill,
Gosh, it's so good to see you again. And a sixer! WOW! I'm truly humbled by your review. I loved this book, too, and hope to get the final edit out to offer by spring. I think it's a good 'summer read'. Thanks so much and don't be a stranger!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from joelh605
Both girls burst into uncontrolled tears, hugging Cathy, each other and Rudy in wild abandon.
Ohhhh, we could see this coming a long way off; a physical trauma, the eyes inexplicably quit. Another, and they come back the same way they left. But wouldn't real people react with stunned, quiet joy, instead of going all squishy-huggy-teary-noisy? OK - a guy thing, my bad ;-)
Re prior chapter review - - if you add a sound like a watermelon being chopped, that could be the sound of Norman "hitting the rocks" so to speak. Just a thought. Sort of let the reader know not to worry about Norman any more.
Fingers plucked her shorts, causing her to turn toward Cathy.
BABOOM great cue that Cathy's eyes are working. Such an ordinary detail,... Loved it!!
Good show, Gayle. Commas all looked fine, but there are some style issues (below). That's your lookout, so full stars.
Joel
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but the consensus was that she should have awakened by now.
After ten days, shouldn't "by now" be "more than a week ago". ?? Yah you got the phrase in the next paragraph - which is where the "ten days" figure might fit better. You da writer, Gayle, but "by now" is sorta limp under the circumstances.
I've been right here all week.
Uhh, did'n you say "more than a week"?
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Both girls burst into uncontrolled tears, hugging Cathy, each other and Rudy in wild abandon.
Ohhhh, we could see this coming a long way off; a physical trauma, the eyes inexplicably quit. Another, and they come back the same way they left. But wouldn't real people react with stunned, quiet joy, instead of going all squishy-huggy-teary-noisy? OK - a guy thing, my bad ;-)
Re prior chapter review - - if you add a sound like a watermelon being chopped, that could be the sound of Norman "hitting the rocks" so to speak. Just a thought. Sort of let the reader know not to worry about Norman any more.
Fingers plucked her shorts, causing her to turn toward Cathy.
BABOOM great cue that Cathy's eyes are working. Such an ordinary detail,... Loved it!!
Good show, Gayle. Commas all looked fine, but there are some style issues (below). That's your lookout, so full stars.
Joel
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but the consensus was that she should have awakened by now.
After ten days, shouldn't "by now" be "more than a week ago". ?? Yah you got the phrase in the next paragraph - which is where the "ten days" figure might fit better. You da writer, Gayle, but "by now" is sorta limp under the circumstances.
I've been right here all week.
Uhh, did'n you say "more than a week"?
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Hey Joel,
Excellent suggestions, which I will implement. I'm doing an 'Afterward' to clear up any question about Norman.
You're right..both of those are weak. Even though he sluffed through the time in his dialogue, I could make it more specific, for sure.
Thanks so much for the great review, my friend! You always make me smile!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Isaiah Ramesses
A heart warming ending to this. Evil Norman doesn't prevail. The chapters that I have read of this have been excellent.
Very entertaining tale.
Isaiah Ramesses
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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A heart warming ending to this. Evil Norman doesn't prevail. The chapters that I have read of this have been excellent.
Very entertaining tale.
Isaiah Ramesses
Comment Written 27-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2010
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review. I appreciate you stopping by for a R&R. Thanks again,
Gayle
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
I've only read a couple chapters of this book so I don't know if her blindness was psychosomatic, or caused by Norman, but wouldn't it be nice if all blindness could be cured by a conk on the head.
made breathing labored, ---
This doesn't sound right. One has labored breathing, but I don't think you can make breathing labored. made breathing difficult would sound better.
Roberta
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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I've only read a couple chapters of this book so I don't know if her blindness was psychosomatic, or caused by Norman, but wouldn't it be nice if all blindness could be cured by a conk on the head.
made breathing labored, ---
This doesn't sound right. One has labored breathing, but I don't think you can make breathing labored. made breathing difficult would sound better.
Roberta
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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Hi Roberta,
Cathy fell down the escalator at a department store and when she came to, she couldn't see. This fall restored her sight although I don't go into any details in either direction. I know it's a long stretch, but I hope it works. And yes, my dear, wouldn't it just be wonderful if all blindness could be cured this way.
Roberta, it's been a pleasure getting to know you. Charlie's told me so much about you, I feel like we're friends.
Thank you so much for the wonderful review!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from nor84
You probably knew this--I didn't. "Gale" can be used to describe an emotional outburst, but actually it's a wind (not a storm) works anyhow.
rest room is separated in one place, combined in another. Dictionary says it's one word
Well, you got a POV swing when the Nurse comes in, but I think you know that.
Good job, Gayle.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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You probably knew this--I didn't. "Gale" can be used to describe an emotional outburst, but actually it's a wind (not a storm) works anyhow.
rest room is separated in one place, combined in another. Dictionary says it's one word
Well, you got a POV swing when the Nurse comes in, but I think you know that.
Good job, Gayle.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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Alrighty, Norma, I fixed the spaggies in Desperation, thank you so much. Y'know about me and that pov thingy! Actually, as I wrote that, this little voice..the Dickie Floyd voice kept saying, what are you doing? AGAIN! I'll fix restroom. Sheesh, I knew that! Gotta wonder about me sometimes.
Thanks again, my friend. So appreciated!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from barbara.wilkey
What a perfect ending. I wish all blind people could have such great ending. You kept us on pins and needles until the end. Good job.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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What a perfect ending. I wish all blind people could have such great ending. You kept us on pins and needles until the end. Good job.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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Hey Barbara,
Yeah, wouldn't that be wonderful? I love happy endings and from the moment I started this book, I knew I'd have to figure out how to restore her sight.
Thanks so much for the read and review!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Oh, Gayle, you do have a flare for the
dramatic ending, don't you? As I was
reading the part about Cathy's eyes
gazing at Terry and El, I kept thinking
she was supposed to be blind. I would trade
a broken leg for the renewal of my eyesight
any day. Congratulations. love, jan
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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Oh, Gayle, you do have a flare for the
dramatic ending, don't you? As I was
reading the part about Cathy's eyes
gazing at Terry and El, I kept thinking
she was supposed to be blind. I would trade
a broken leg for the renewal of my eyesight
any day. Congratulations. love, jan
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2010
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Hey Jan,
I really liked the ending, too. This is what the characterd demanded. I wanted a huge fight, some cliffhangers, the dogs rescuing her, y'know how I like it, but nope, the characters would not let me do it, so here we are, and I like this one, too. They just didn't want me to make Norman any 'badder' than I had to do to get the job done.
Ah, go figure. I'm just the typist!
Thanks so much for the wonderful review!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from patmedium
Finito. WoW!
Now to go back to page one and read it again, curled up on the couch with my cuppa tea and my cigs.
Gayle... I don't have sixes... But, then, I would have given you five hundred if I could.
Thankyou so very much. Pat. xxx
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Finito. WoW!
Now to go back to page one and read it again, curled up on the couch with my cuppa tea and my cigs.
Gayle... I don't have sixes... But, then, I would have given you five hundred if I could.
Thankyou so very much. Pat. xxx
Comment Written 26-Mar-2010
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2010
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Oh, Pat, what a wonderful review, and birthday present! I want to thank you for your support throughout the whole book and your enthusiasm! Man, you're the best, and that virtual sixer is just fine, m'dear!
Hugs,
Gayle
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Happy birthday, dear, and DO enjoy your celebratory meal. Pat. xxx
