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A woman is stalked by a fan

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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HUMMM, very interesting. This is very good. I enjoyed reading this post. You did a good job. I didn't find any mechanical errors. I don't have anything else to say, sorry.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
    Well, that's good, too. I got it all covered in this one. I have to admit, I'm fascinated with stuff like this. Glad you are, too!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
Comment from shelley kaye
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[busses] <-- one 's' (buses)

other than that a great chapter

this is getting so good
can't wait to see what happens next!

thanx for sharing!
shelley :)

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
    I blush! Got that fixed before I even replied here. Good grief! I wonder about myself sometimes.

    Good eyes, my little Cali gurl. Thanks for reading along, shelley, I always enjoy seeing you!

    Gayle
Comment from EllieKaye
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I'm glad I was clicking on the 'Next' button today! I think I better become a fan so I can keep reading this story. This Nathan has me so intrigued. You did a wonderful job with his description. You really managed to develop him into someone I want to know more about. Was he the one--the green eyed guy--in the last chapter? And he loves animals--so if he IS a bad killer who forgets what horrible things he does, we see a good side of him, which makes the character even more interesting. Oh, yeah, I need to read more. Gonna be your fan. :) If I had a 6, it'd be yours!

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Well I'm just smiling all over my face. What a treat. Yes, I think we have a guy with a personality problem of epic proportions. We'll have lots of fun!

    Hugs and thanks,
    Gayle
Comment from Korton
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Nathan seems to have a real problem here. It seems that we may be dealing with a schytzophreaniac or possibly MPD. My curiosity partly arises from this line in chapter 10. Does Nathan sometimes think he is Nathan and at others think he's Norman? Intriuging, Very well done.

("Norman Stanley sat in the visitor's parking lot of Cathy's condo")

to the pedestal table, gaze[d] down,

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Ah, Frank, you never disappoint. Yep, I think we have a DID type here. You know how I love to write about them anyway, so, yeah we have two for one!

    Thanks so much for the great review!

    Gayle
Comment from patmedium
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I don't know what on earth to say about this one: I read it with increasing puzzlement and confusion.
I feel lost.
THIS isn't what I was expecting.
I await enlightenment in the next installment.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Okay, Pat, I'll give it up. Think about Dr. Jeckyl and Mr. Hyde. Sorry to throw you for a loop. You'll see what's going on in a little bit. I promise!

    Gayle
reply by patmedium on 06-Jan-2010
    DUR... sorry, dear, I didn't make myself too clear: I realised that... not till the last eighth of the page, though! I was trying to show you EXACTLY how I'd felt while reading it! XXXX
Comment from BPL76
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This is good
It flows well
It does not seem rushed to me
I like the plot
Good Job
BPL..................................................................


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 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Hi BPL, thanks for the R&R and your fine comments.

    Gayle