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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Home Again"A woman is stalked by a fan
16 total reviews
Comment from Allezw2
lady Gayle,
You are a Grinch.
Just when everything is whipping right along, all sunshine and flowers you leave a nasty note of foreshadowing all kinds of bad things potentially in store.
Now we have Cathy expressing a possible reservation about her friend's fiance, too.
Pot stirrers!
Nicely done,
Wayne
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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lady Gayle,
You are a Grinch.
Just when everything is whipping right along, all sunshine and flowers you leave a nasty note of foreshadowing all kinds of bad things potentially in store.
Now we have Cathy expressing a possible reservation about her friend's fiance, too.
Pot stirrers!
Nicely done,
Wayne
Comment Written 23-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2010
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Hey Wayne!
So nice to see you again, my friend. Glad you're liking this one. I don't want you to get too comfortable, here. Things are about to heat up!
Thanks for the great review!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from RenieReader
Gayle: What a miracle with little Suzi making her way home after all this time. That's got to be an interesting story. I see the creepazoid is still hanging around. Grrr.
The sidewalks get so hot in the summer[,] I put them on her to protect her feet."
"Here you go[,] Cathy, incoming."
Hugs,
Renie
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2010
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Gayle: What a miracle with little Suzi making her way home after all this time. That's got to be an interesting story. I see the creepazoid is still hanging around. Grrr.
The sidewalks get so hot in the summer[,] I put them on her to protect her feet."
"Here you go[,] Cathy, incoming."
Hugs,
Renie
Comment Written 10-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2010
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I'll round up those little commas, as they're really needed, but you know how I hate the little buggers!
Thanks so much for the great R&R!
Hugs,
Gayle
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Oh, there aren't THAT many. :D
Comment from c_lucas
This is a very well written story. Anyone can google about pets returning home to find so wonderful heart warming tales. This is very good filler chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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This is a very well written story. Anyone can google about pets returning home to find so wonderful heart warming tales. This is very good filler chapter.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
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Had to get the dog back. She was getting to be too much of a distraction.
Glad you liked this one!
Gayle
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You're welcome, Gayle. Charlie
Comment from Sasha
Now that's a cliffhanger. Where is the world was Suzi? You've got me wondering about who is really who and what is really going on. I cannot wait to read the next chapter. Great work building up the tension and excitement in this one.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Now that's a cliffhanger. Where is the world was Suzi? You've got me wondering about who is really who and what is really going on. I cannot wait to read the next chapter. Great work building up the tension and excitement in this one.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hey Sasha,
Thanks for the great comments and your encouragement. Makes me smile!
Thanks and see you again soon,
Gayle
Comment from joelh605
Not very far away, a man with bright green eyes looked down on them, murder on his mind.
What happened to Rudy's sixth sense? Why isn't he casually, almost automatically, scanning for trouble? Are the green eyes hidden in Bad Bart's lanai shrubbery?
Three weeks on the road - I'll bet you've researched the gamut of abandoned pets finding home or even their old owners' new home, across half a continent. I'll guess that Bad Bart took Suzi to some remote part of Arizona / New Mexico and left her beside the road - but then I always like to get ahead of the action.
Grins,
Joel
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Rudy sat on the floor and after scooting Kip out of the way, brushed more salve on Suzi's paws and one-by-one,
"one by one" is a phrase that needs full bracketing, or none. You can omit the comma following it, or add one before it.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Not very far away, a man with bright green eyes looked down on them, murder on his mind.
What happened to Rudy's sixth sense? Why isn't he casually, almost automatically, scanning for trouble? Are the green eyes hidden in Bad Bart's lanai shrubbery?
Three weeks on the road - I'll bet you've researched the gamut of abandoned pets finding home or even their old owners' new home, across half a continent. I'll guess that Bad Bart took Suzi to some remote part of Arizona / New Mexico and left her beside the road - but then I always like to get ahead of the action.
Grins,
Joel
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Rudy sat on the floor and after scooting Kip out of the way, brushed more salve on Suzi's paws and one-by-one,
"one by one" is a phrase that needs full bracketing, or none. You can omit the comma following it, or add one before it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hey Joel,
I can't tell!It won't be long, though. I'll get that fixed, buddy. Thanks for the sharp eyes. Y'know, I thought I might need one, like, from time-to-time!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Dave M
Gayle,
This is excellent writing. I'm giving you a six-star review because you understand dogs so well. They act exactly like I'd expect them to, and we've had dogs for almost all of our marriage (45 years). OW, the chapter is excellent, too.
Here's a line I really liked:
"Now she's licking Suzi's feet." Our dogs lick us and each other whenever there's a scratch or an abrasion. This is something built into them.
I have one problem:
"I'm sure you're more at home here than I am." This sentence contradicts the previous conversation, where it turns out that Cathy scarcely knows Hank. Maybe you want it this way, but OW, you might think about this.
Otherwise, I can't get a line on Hank. The conversation is so expected and ordinary, for the situation, that it's hard to say.
Dave
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Gayle,
This is excellent writing. I'm giving you a six-star review because you understand dogs so well. They act exactly like I'd expect them to, and we've had dogs for almost all of our marriage (45 years). OW, the chapter is excellent, too.
Here's a line I really liked:
"Now she's licking Suzi's feet." Our dogs lick us and each other whenever there's a scratch or an abrasion. This is something built into them.
I have one problem:
"I'm sure you're more at home here than I am." This sentence contradicts the previous conversation, where it turns out that Cathy scarcely knows Hank. Maybe you want it this way, but OW, you might think about this.
Otherwise, I can't get a line on Hank. The conversation is so expected and ordinary, for the situation, that it's hard to say.
Dave
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Hey Dave, Wow, what an honor. A sixer! Thanks so much for that!
I think it might be that thing when best friends get a boyfriend in between them. I think Cathy is, or at least was, jealous of Hank. And with good reason. He's about to cause a huge change in her life. Now, with Rudy, it's not so much. We'll see, huh?
We'll see where that leads. I'm not set in stone on it. I'm only about half way through the book, so I won't be pouring them out so fast her pretty soon. Plus it's getting costly! Sheesh, I've spent like %460 FS bucks on these stories. Just twelve of them! Whoa, pricy, huh?
Thanks for the great review!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment from Readywriter52
Everyone is quite happy when Suzi returns. Cathy is lucky both dogs get alone so well. I'm surprised she didn't go to a vet to check Suzi. I guess Cathy was lucky someone vandalized Rudy's car because she would have missed Suzi's return.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Everyone is quite happy when Suzi returns. Cathy is lucky both dogs get alone so well. I'm surprised she didn't go to a vet to check Suzi. I guess Cathy was lucky someone vandalized Rudy's car because she would have missed Suzi's return.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Yes, that's true, isn't it? If they were at the farm, Suzi would have to wait for them. Glad it worked as it did,
Thanks,
Gayle
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am so happy Suzi it back. I wonder what she could tell us about her journey. It probably isn't pleasant. Another good post.
Check the cupboard next to the kitchen door. (I don't know why but and editor I have used changed all my 'next to's to 'beside'. Since it's his profession I guess he knows what he's taking about.)
you how happy I am that she's back (The same thing with 'that'. He took all the unnecessary ones out. This on is unnecessary.)
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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I am so happy Suzi it back. I wonder what she could tell us about her journey. It probably isn't pleasant. Another good post.
Check the cupboard next to the kitchen door. (I don't know why but and editor I have used changed all my 'next to's to 'beside'. Since it's his profession I guess he knows what he's taking about.)
you how happy I am that she's back (The same thing with 'that'. He took all the unnecessary ones out. This on is unnecessary.)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Hey Barbara,
You're right. 'That' is in disfavor because of over-use and the same with next to vs beside. On that note, I heard a seminar speaker once say that 'next to' went better with things, while 'beside' went with people. Now, who knows what he knew? LOL! But yes, I like the sound better, and that's half the battle. Thanks for stopping and for the review and input!
Gayle
Comment from jayesnb
Another great chapter and enjoyable read..You seem to have a talent for leaving me hanging at the end...can't wait to get to the next chapter..
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Another great chapter and enjoyable read..You seem to have a talent for leaving me hanging at the end...can't wait to get to the next chapter..
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
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Well, hang in there, lol, more's on the way!
Thanks for the great review,
Gayle
Comment from ZigzagMLT
Well done. This is a tight chapter. I like the ending... adds to the mystery.
One note: Two Lemon Drops
And things are heating up.
Thanks!
Zigzagmlt
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Well done. This is a tight chapter. I like the ending... adds to the mystery.
One note: Two Lemon Drops
And things are heating up.
Thanks!
Zigzagmlt
Comment Written 06-Jan-2010
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
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Hold on Zig, one more to go and things will start to clear up ... or maybe not! We'll see how long I can keep it a mystery.
Thanks,
Gayle
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Holding my breath... and I shall wait. It's too good to miss. Z
