A Leaf on the Wind
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Comment from chaswriter
Hey Smurphy - Congratulations on getting a "FS Seal of Quality" on your biographical story. I bow to your success and wish you even more success in your writing. Charlie
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Hey Smurphy - Congratulations on getting a "FS Seal of Quality" on your biographical story. I bow to your success and wish you even more success in your writing. Charlie
Comment Written 28-Sep-2009
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2009
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Thank you so very much for your kind words of support. I was/am deeply honored to have received this award.
Comment from medicnate
This is going to hit very close to home for me. I'm afraid to read on, but I will make myself do it. I appreciate you writing about this. The work is very good, no SPAG that I can see. The story is engaging and has me clicking on the next chapter shortcut. Nice work.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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This is going to hit very close to home for me. I'm afraid to read on, but I will make myself do it. I appreciate you writing about this. The work is very good, no SPAG that I can see. The story is engaging and has me clicking on the next chapter shortcut. Nice work.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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I sincerely appreciat your caution in reading this. I can tell you that I make a point of not spending too much time on graphic detail and focus mostly on emotional and psychologial aspects. And for what it is worth, it does have an uplifting ending.
Comment from prodigal
I want to thank you for writing this. My own wife and sister went through some of the horrors of abuse. I read recently that we spend the last 75 years of our lives trying to get over the first five. I think this is true. I have read some of the chapters in here, but I wanted to go back to the beginning. Everything that I have read has come straight from the heart in this book. I hope you are able to get it published. - Sam
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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I want to thank you for writing this. My own wife and sister went through some of the horrors of abuse. I read recently that we spend the last 75 years of our lives trying to get over the first five. I think this is true. I have read some of the chapters in here, but I wanted to go back to the beginning. Everything that I have read has come straight from the heart in this book. I hope you are able to get it published. - Sam
Comment Written 20-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2009
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Thank you very much for your kind words and encouaging comments. I sincerely appreciate them.
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Valerie:)
This is a great introduction to your book. It is concise and to the point. Clearly an expose of sexual abuse of small children and the terrible consequence of such abuse.
More importantly, you plan to shine a light of understanding on this disgraceful betrayal of innocents.
I am trying to go back to review your book from the start.
Roger
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Hi Valerie:)
This is a great introduction to your book. It is concise and to the point. Clearly an expose of sexual abuse of small children and the terrible consequence of such abuse.
More importantly, you plan to shine a light of understanding on this disgraceful betrayal of innocents.
I am trying to go back to review your book from the start.
Roger
Comment Written 17-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. There is a lot to catch up on but it reads fast. Thank you for you interst.
Comment from laurelp
OK, I am totally confused. Is this a prologue to the book you are writing or did I miss the end somehow or are you going back and correcting problems? I found no problem in the writing.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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OK, I am totally confused. Is this a prologue to the book you are writing or did I miss the end somehow or are you going back and correcting problems? I found no problem in the writing.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Sorry. You are not going crazy....that's my job. I wrote the prologue a long time ago but never posted it until yesterday. It appears just before the last chapter because it is a new post. In a few days, after the certifiate expires, it will go back where it belongs...at the beginning of the book. Sorry....I didn't realize it would do that. So, just to ease your mine you are didn't miss anything...
Comment from Helen Tan
Everyone has an interesting life story to tell. It's sad you had to go through sexual abuse, it's tough on anyone especially a child who has no support.
"Why, if the abuse stopped years ago, are you still crying about it twenty years later?"
Writing your life story will help you know yourself better. Hopefully it will be that journey to recovery too.
I will never know whom or what I may have become had my father not abused me.
This is terrible. You survived a stronger person, that's the plus side of this.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Everyone has an interesting life story to tell. It's sad you had to go through sexual abuse, it's tough on anyone especially a child who has no support.
"Why, if the abuse stopped years ago, are you still crying about it twenty years later?"
Writing your life story will help you know yourself better. Hopefully it will be that journey to recovery too.
I will never know whom or what I may have become had my father not abused me.
This is terrible. You survived a stronger person, that's the plus side of this.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Thank you for our kind words and high review.
Comment from Deejharrington
You self-discovery and ability to be so honest and open about it, amazes me. You write with a frankness that is so "sane", it allows anyone to empathize with you. Even someone who has had no contact with this kind of violence, can through your writing, finally try to understand. I applaud you!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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You self-discovery and ability to be so honest and open about it, amazes me. You write with a frankness that is so "sane", it allows anyone to empathize with you. Even someone who has had no contact with this kind of violence, can through your writing, finally try to understand. I applaud you!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind and encouraging words. I sincerely appreciate them.
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You're welcome
Comment from kiwirose
It is really interesting story and talking about child abuse. As same as my grandmother was very hard life since she was a little girl.
Thank you for your sharing with us :)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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It is really interesting story and talking about child abuse. As same as my grandmother was very hard life since she was a little girl.
Thank you for your sharing with us :)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Thanky for your kind review and encouaging words.
Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
Dear Smurphy,
Your writing is always exceptional in content and tone.
Having said that, and with all due respect, I would suggest you clarify "abuse" in your opening statement. I would strengthen it by writing,
"the sexual abuse of a child"...
Another suggestion: Where you write,
"I chose to write my story from the point of view of myself as the child I was at the time of the abuse."
Consider editing this to read:
"I chose to write my story from my own experiences as an abused child."
Continue the thought in PRESENT tense:
"I want... NOT "wanted." the reader to experience etc.
So the sentence should read:
"I want the reader to experience the confusion, fear, anger..." etc.
Oh! This is such a POWERFUL introduction! I cannot express my thoughts enough in congratulating you in sharing your story.
Please allow me to re-rate when the changes have been considered. I believe they will lead to a much more powerful introduction.
With warmest regards,
Seraph~
SECOND REVIEW: SIX STARS
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Dear Smurphy,
Your writing is always exceptional in content and tone.
Having said that, and with all due respect, I would suggest you clarify "abuse" in your opening statement. I would strengthen it by writing,
"the sexual abuse of a child"...
Another suggestion: Where you write,
"I chose to write my story from the point of view of myself as the child I was at the time of the abuse."
Consider editing this to read:
"I chose to write my story from my own experiences as an abused child."
Continue the thought in PRESENT tense:
"I want... NOT "wanted." the reader to experience etc.
So the sentence should read:
"I want the reader to experience the confusion, fear, anger..." etc.
Oh! This is such a POWERFUL introduction! I cannot express my thoughts enough in congratulating you in sharing your story.
Please allow me to re-rate when the changes have been considered. I believe they will lead to a much more powerful introduction.
With warmest regards,
Seraph~
SECOND REVIEW: SIX STARS
Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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As always, your eagle eye has done an excellent job putting my work in a better form....I sincerely appreciate your suggestions and will go over the prologue and make the changes. Thanks.
Comment from LadyBrendragon
Very good prologue on a subject that many still find hard to deal with. You confront it with courage and a hint of relief to finally let everything out into the open. It seems like a burden has been lifted and it must be hard to reveal such a private part of yourself. Good luck.
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Very good prologue on a subject that many still find hard to deal with. You confront it with courage and a hint of relief to finally let everything out into the open. It seems like a burden has been lifted and it must be hard to reveal such a private part of yourself. Good luck.
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2009
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Thanks. Yes it was difficult, but necessary. I appreciate your kind word of encouragement.
