Elvena's Bad Day
He wants to talk.4 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like the way this acrostic is versed in dialogue that flows effortlessly without any indication it is restricted by the acrostic format. It's excellently done in skilful rhyming verse and a strong contender! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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I like the way this acrostic is versed in dialogue that flows effortlessly without any indication it is restricted by the acrostic format. It's excellently done in skilful rhyming verse and a strong contender! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Debbie
Comment from C.M. Brown
This is intense! I felt like I could feel what was happening. I was really moved and then shocked at the end. I mean I knew it was coming but not as strongly as it did. Great job! Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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This is intense! I felt like I could feel what was happening. I was really moved and then shocked at the end. I mean I knew it was coming but not as strongly as it did. Great job! Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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He decided not to mince words! Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from FurryBunny
This whimsical poem features playful dialogue, a consistent rhyming scheme, and a surprising twist that leaves readers intrigued about the characters and their relationship.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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This whimsical poem features playful dialogue, a consistent rhyming scheme, and a surprising twist that leaves readers intrigued about the characters and their relationship.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Bunny :)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, my. When he finally got to the point, he got to the POINT. *smile* I liked the fact he even said he COULD lie - but no. He'd just be straight about it. Surely she wouldn't try to wiggle around THAT. hahaha
(Though I have known plenty of sad, lonely, needy women who might try.)
A fun piece that meets all the criteria for the contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Dear Mystery Writer,
Oh, my. When he finally got to the point, he got to the POINT. *smile* I liked the fact he even said he COULD lie - but no. He'd just be straight about it. Surely she wouldn't try to wiggle around THAT. hahaha
(Though I have known plenty of sad, lonely, needy women who might try.)
A fun piece that meets all the criteria for the contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Robyn. I'd like to have seen her face haha :)
