As Spring Sidles in
a 5-5-512 total reviews
Comment from patricia dillon
We do not have cheerleaders where I come from, but I can appreciate the comparison. It is a very picturesque metaphor. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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We do not have cheerleaders where I come from, but I can appreciate the comparison. It is a very picturesque metaphor. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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We have a clumps of daffodils now in bloom, all cheering on spring. Many thanks, patricia, for sharing and praising my poem. Rod
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You are welcome
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you now have two votes!
I love poem about Mother Nature but it's not easy to find a fresh , creative way to celebrate Her beauty.
You did just that with your analogy between daffodils and cheerleaders that shake their pom poms.
Both are a delight to watch!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Ciao poet, you now have two votes!
I love poem about Mother Nature but it's not easy to find a fresh , creative way to celebrate Her beauty.
You did just that with your analogy between daffodils and cheerleaders that shake their pom poms.
Both are a delight to watch!
Comment Written 15-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Many thanks, tempeste, for your enthusiastic response to my poem and your vote. Rod
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like the way your 5-5-5 verse flows with very pleasing imagery of those spring flowers bursting forth like cheerleaders. This is a well presented post imaginatively expressed. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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I like the way your 5-5-5 verse flows with very pleasing imagery of those spring flowers bursting forth like cheerleaders. This is a well presented post imaginatively expressed. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Debbie, for your high praise of my shortie.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A field of daffodils will burst their yellow blossoms and send cheer. Daffodils are not out of the ground yet, but as soon as the warmth appears they will burst their joy.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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A field of daffodils will burst their yellow blossoms and send cheer. Daffodils are not out of the ground yet, but as soon as the warmth appears they will burst their joy.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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We have clumps of daffodils now in bloom, all rooting on spring. Many thanks, Rosemary, for sharing my poem. Rod
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-5-5, As Spring Sidles In, has the proper formatting and allows that the appearance of the pretty flowers coincides with the post-winter season.
Just a note: I know that punctuation has an unsteady position here on the site, but my rule of thumb has always been, No punctuation - no capital letters. Since your poem is actually a sentence, and not a disembodied thought, I think the poem ought to be presented like this:
Daffodils, like a
troupe of cheerleaders,
burst forth upon us.
Happy day.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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This 5-5-5, As Spring Sidles In, has the proper formatting and allows that the appearance of the pretty flowers coincides with the post-winter season.
Just a note: I know that punctuation has an unsteady position here on the site, but my rule of thumb has always been, No punctuation - no capital letters. Since your poem is actually a sentence, and not a disembodied thought, I think the poem ought to be presented like this:
Daffodils, like a
troupe of cheerleaders,
burst forth upon us.
Happy day.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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You bring up a key issue with short poems: Do you or do you not punctuate? I chose not to just to keep smooth the flow of words. Many thanks for sharing my poem, Bill, and your suggestion. Rod
Comment from Baltimore Born
This is a very nice poem. Good simile in the poem. Your 5-5-5 syllable count is in good order for this writing prompt. Your last line sums the poem up well. Nice complimentary picture. Good job.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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This is a very nice poem. Good simile in the poem. Your 5-5-5 syllable count is in good order for this writing prompt. Your last line sums the poem up well. Nice complimentary picture. Good job.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, BB, for your kind praise of my poem. Rod
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 5-5-5- Writing prompt. The syllables meet the criteria. I loved the way the daffodils were portrayed as the cheerleaders of Spring, which is exactly what they are. Very nicely done.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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An excellent entry for the 5-5-5- Writing prompt. The syllables meet the criteria. I loved the way the daffodils were portrayed as the cheerleaders of Spring, which is exactly what they are. Very nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2024
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Ah, we have clumps of daffodils in bloom, Marilyn, all rooting on Spring. Many thanks for your high praise of my poem. Rod
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is a cute little poem. It fits perfectly in the 5-5-5 format. It really makes me long for spring reading this , and the daffodils are like a troupe of cheerleaders with their boldness!
Love it!
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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This is a cute little poem. It fits perfectly in the 5-5-5 format. It really makes me long for spring reading this , and the daffodils are like a troupe of cheerleaders with their boldness!
Love it!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I hope I put you there amidst those cheerleaders, Jodi. Many thanks for sharing my poem.
Comment from Nicki Hayes
I gave you six stars for this one because it so completely perfectly captures SPRING! Comparing daffodils to cheerleaders was OUTSTANDING! I suddenly feel like clapping and cheering.ð???
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I gave you six stars for this one because it so completely perfectly captures SPRING! Comparing daffodils to cheerleaders was OUTSTANDING! I suddenly feel like clapping and cheering.ð???
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I am thrilled by your applause and six-star rating, Nicki. Many thanks for both.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I love personification! This is an excellent poem for the challenge! You use good descriptive words and colorful imagery. The reader can tell the word march is proud. The image chosen fits perfectly with your work, too.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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I love personification! This is an excellent poem for the challenge! You use good descriptive words and colorful imagery. The reader can tell the word march is proud. The image chosen fits perfectly with your work, too.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 13-Mar-2024
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much, Alex, for your high praise of my short poem.
