The Day Has to Die
Tanka- Jisei poem19 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
This is nicely put. It tells a fundemental truth...that everything and everyone has to leave at some point to make room for the new. I love your chosen image, it's lovely. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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This is nicely put. It tells a fundemental truth...that everything and everyone has to leave at some point to make room for the new. I love your chosen image, it's lovely. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much .I am sorry for the late reply.
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Thank you very much and I am sorry for the delay in reply .I am not keeping well
Comment from teafor2
Sanku: I am impressed with the 'metaphoric' rotation of the earth through
a twenty four hour period:
"The day has to die
for a new dawn to be born" (B's allits)
The four seasons implied in line #4 with activities of Fall center stage: "...ageing leaves forsake their trees" (T's allits)
Last line advises that humanity needs to get in step w/'mother nature' for synergy...Picture indicates the cleansing of old/dead bush through burning to make way for fresh earth growth. Good luck in the contest.
teafor2
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Sanku: I am impressed with the 'metaphoric' rotation of the earth through
a twenty four hour period:
"The day has to die
for a new dawn to be born" (B's allits)
The four seasons implied in line #4 with activities of Fall center stage: "...ageing leaves forsake their trees" (T's allits)
Last line advises that humanity needs to get in step w/'mother nature' for synergy...Picture indicates the cleansing of old/dead bush through burning to make way for fresh earth growth. Good luck in the contest.
teafor2
Comment Written 19-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you for taking trouble to write such detailed review .I am sorry for the delay in my reply .I suffer from frozen shoulders and my computer time is severely restricted..
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I am glad you liked my little poem . I am sorry for the delay in replybecause I am not keeping well
Comment from Janet Foor
Beautiful Jisei poem for this Japanese Poetry Club entry. You have stated beautifully that the day must die for a new day to dawn. It also has a spiritual feel to this message as well.
Nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Beautiful Jisei poem for this Japanese Poetry Club entry. You have stated beautifully that the day must die for a new day to dawn. It also has a spiritual feel to this message as well.
Nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much for the review I am sorry for the delay in replying.
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Thank you for the review and I am happy that you got the spiritual message .I am not keeping well hence the delay in my reply
Comment from Lisasview
What a fabulous entry dearest Sanku for the JISEI POEM event... Love your words and the image you chose.
Thank you for sharing,
Lisasview................
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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What a fabulous entry dearest Sanku for the JISEI POEM event... Love your words and the image you chose.
Thank you for sharing,
Lisasview................
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you verymuch for the review and I am glad you lked it .I am sorry for the delay in my reply...
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How nice to hear from you as it has been awhile.. but we all get busy.
Life seems to get in our way.
I did finally post a few pieces and I won first place for three of them so I am thrilled...
Lisasview
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I will check them out
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Sounds great!
Comment from QC Poet
Though I'm not that familiar with the JISEI POEM" format it has the elements painting a mental picture of the elements of life and death . Thank you for Sharing this poetic form
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Though I'm not that familiar with the JISEI POEM" format it has the elements painting a mental picture of the elements of life and death . Thank you for Sharing this poetic form
Comment Written 18-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much .I am sorry for the delay in my reply .It is because of health reasons.
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Thank you very much .I am not keeping well hence the delay in muy reply
Comment from jim vecchio
This was so beautifully and sensitively written! Sorry I don't have that extra star. There is a theatrical play I love, called "The Fantasticks". This made me recall a line from the lead character, El Gallo:"There is a curious paradox that no one can explain: who understands the secrets of the reaping of the grain? Who understands why spring is born out of winter's laboring pain, or why we all must die a bit before we grow again?"
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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This was so beautifully and sensitively written! Sorry I don't have that extra star. There is a theatrical play I love, called "The Fantasticks". This made me recall a line from the lead character, El Gallo:"There is a curious paradox that no one can explain: who understands the secrets of the reaping of the grain? Who understands why spring is born out of winter's laboring pain, or why we all must die a bit before we grow again?"
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much especially for the wish to have an extra star.. I am sorry for the delay i reply .I liked the dialogue by El Gallo .He is so right .
I suffer from frozen shoulders and am doing physio therapy for it My computer time is severely limited..till the pain is reduced
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Thank you very much for your review. I liked tEl Gallos dialogue .So true.
I suffer from frozen shoulders and am not able to sit and type for long..hencethe delay in my reply
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You don't have to worry about that. I fall behind many times. My fingers on the left hand are numb, causing me always to hot wrong keys. It's enough to know you are out there!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
An excellent way to connect nature and human nature. An effective way to represent death. Thank you for participating in the Japanese Poetry Club event. Great entry with a good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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An excellent way to connect nature and human nature. An effective way to represent death. Thank you for participating in the Japanese Poetry Club event. Great entry with a good syllable count and connection between lines. Beautiful presentation and imagery.
Good job,
Gypsy
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much.I am sorry for the delay in my reply .I am under considerable pain because of stiff neck and shoulder muscles .So my computer time is limited..
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Thank you very much .I am sorry for the delay in reply .I suffer from neck and shoulder pain and so my computer time is limited..
Comment from royowen
The only way we can reconcile our past is to reconcile it somewhere,,the only place I know is the cross of Christ, He paid the penalty of my past, my present, my future, now I am free to embrace a sinless future, bless you Santha, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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The only way we can reconcile our past is to reconcile it somewhere,,the only place I know is the cross of Christ, He paid the penalty of my past, my present, my future, now I am free to embrace a sinless future, bless you Santha, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much .I am sorry for the delay .It is because of my frozen shoulders..I have to cut my computer time
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Thank you very much am sorry for the delay in reply . not feeling weell
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No problem,
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed the sentiment here, we cannot fight nature, we have to accept the seasons and go with the flow, I enjoyed your fine words here, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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I enjoyed the sentiment here, we cannot fight nature, we have to accept the seasons and go with the flow, I enjoyed your fine words here, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much and sorry for the delay in reply .I am not keeping well .I have severe neck and shoulder pain so my computer time is restricted..
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Thank you very much sorry for the delay in replying .not keeping well
Comment from jaded831
Spiritual in nature, all life must end, so new life can be born. Very insightful, easy for everyone to relate to. The picture adds to your beautiful words, but your words paint a picture by themselves.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Spiritual in nature, all life must end, so new life can be born. Very insightful, easy for everyone to relate to. The picture adds to your beautiful words, but your words paint a picture by themselves.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2024
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Thank you very much .and i am sorry my reply was delayed because i amnot keeping well
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Thank you very much .I am sorry for the delay in reply . have severe pain in the neck and shoulders
