Willing Hearts
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Comment from Gunner Lil
A really good part of your chapter.
An easy read that has excellent dialogue that moves the story along, Like the conflict between Noah and Sami.
This reader wants more.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024
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A really good part of your chapter.
An easy read that has excellent dialogue that moves the story along, Like the conflict between Noah and Sami.
This reader wants more.
Thank you.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Jacob1395
I really like how you bring out your character's emotions in this chapter, Barbara which really drew me in. I thought your writing flowed really well and I enjoyed reading it. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024
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I really like how you bring out your character's emotions in this chapter, Barbara which really drew me in. I thought your writing flowed really well and I enjoyed reading it. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement. I appreciate it.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
I'm not sure what to make of Noah, or of Sami for that matter. I understand that he is trying to protect her, and probably is getting a crush on her, but taking over once he's inside seems kind of John Wayne like, not at all what I would expect in this day and age.
Sami, while meaning well, is putting herself and others in danger. I think if I were her, I'd be packing some pepper spray and taking lessons in the art of self defense. Pimps are near the bottom of the rung of society, and that makes them very dangerous. Interesting post gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Hello Barbara,
I'm not sure what to make of Noah, or of Sami for that matter. I understand that he is trying to protect her, and probably is getting a crush on her, but taking over once he's inside seems kind of John Wayne like, not at all what I would expect in this day and age.
Sami, while meaning well, is putting herself and others in danger. I think if I were her, I'd be packing some pepper spray and taking lessons in the art of self defense. Pimps are near the bottom of the rung of society, and that makes them very dangerous. Interesting post gal.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Later on, Noah will be described as having 'the social graces of a gorilla'. He struggles with people because he never learned. It will come out later. Sami is impulsive. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, so we're well into a new story, this time about Noah and Sami. I like it. Some sentences are a bit abrupt, but otherwise it works out well. Hugs, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Hi Barbara, so we're well into a new story, this time about Noah and Sami. I like it. Some sentences are a bit abrupt, but otherwise it works out well. Hugs, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
As I read your story, I kept thinking about sex trafficking. There's money and killing in this kind of behavior and it's nothing to play around with. I fear for the young teenagers out there who have this happening to them. This story is a great reminder of what that kind of life does to a teenager.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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As I read your story, I kept thinking about sex trafficking. There's money and killing in this kind of behavior and it's nothing to play around with. I fear for the young teenagers out there who have this happening to them. This story is a great reminder of what that kind of life does to a teenager.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Yes, today's teenagers have a difficult life. I pray for them all. Thank you for sharing this kind review.
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the story along nicely. I think you have captured the idealism of a 20-year-old in Sammi. very well. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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This is another excellent chapter. You are moving the story along nicely. I think you have captured the idealism of a 20-year-old in Sammi. very well. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sanku
I hope she wont go there the next day.But she is committed to find the girls .It is a tough decision. Noah is a strong person and he knows exactly how to handle her.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I hope she wont go there the next day.But she is committed to find the girls .It is a tough decision. Noah is a strong person and he knows exactly how to handle her.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Sami needs a firm hand. I wonder if Noah's hand is firm enough. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a nice slow development of the Sami/Noah relationship. We will probably see how stupid Sami is in the next installment. It should be interesting to see how Jasper fits into the story.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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This is a nice slow development of the Sami/Noah relationship. We will probably see how stupid Sami is in the next installment. It should be interesting to see how Jasper fits into the story.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Jasper does play a part in this novel. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I like Noah. I like that Sami has a huge dog. I will keep reading, if you keep writing. You have a very good weekend, I am writing more. Keep your eye out. Karen
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I like Noah. I like that Sami has a huge dog. I will keep reading, if you keep writing. You have a very good weekend, I am writing more. Keep your eye out. Karen
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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I will always keep writing. I'm in the process of writing another novel. Thank you for the encouragement.
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I think a lot of us here must write. No Druthers about it. Karen
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So true, if I get so busy, I can't write, I get grumpy.
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Right back at you sister. I could write a lot more if I didn't have to earn points.!!!!
Karen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Barbara, another romantic story about an independent and brave woman and a savior. A little overbearing but with good intentions. They remind me of Seth and Emma.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Hello, Barbara, another romantic story about an independent and brave woman and a savior. A little overbearing but with good intentions. They remind me of Seth and Emma.
Well done, my friend.
Gypsy
Comment Written 15-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2024
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Noah has his own issues that will soon start coming out. Sami will soften him, although he fights it. Thank you for the kind review.
