Trouble at the Market
A Forbidden Fruit contest entry8 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
What a mean man! (Stavros for cut-throat pricing, and then calling the law)
Very well written.
continued to spruik his wares. - 'spruik' - This one's new to me.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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What a mean man! (Stavros for cut-throat pricing, and then calling the law)
Very well written.
continued to spruik his wares. - 'spruik' - This one's new to me.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thanks, Wayne! Spruik is like the American word "shill". :)
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a creatively fascinating story. I was hoping Mario would win the battle of the sales. I liked his idea of a raffle, but he failed to check the laws before selling tickets. In the end, all he did was make it possible for Stavros to sell his fruit at a higher price. This is well written and maintains interest. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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This is a creatively fascinating story. I was hoping Mario would win the battle of the sales. I liked his idea of a raffle, but he failed to check the laws before selling tickets. In the end, all he did was make it possible for Stavros to sell his fruit at a higher price. This is well written and maintains interest. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from papa55mike
The throat you cut may come back to bite you. I know it's a dog-eat-dog world in the fruit market. What a wonderfully written story with a good twist. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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The throat you cut may come back to bite you. I know it's a dog-eat-dog world in the fruit market. What a wonderfully written story with a good twist. Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 13-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2024
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Thank you so much! :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
You got a good one here. I can visually see what was written as clearly as if I was in the farmer's market with a Greek and an Italian dueling like two kids on banjoes.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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You got a good one here. I can visually see what was written as clearly as if I was in the farmer's market with a Greek and an Italian dueling like two kids on banjoes.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, Tom! :)
Comment from Yusita
This story demonstrates great creativity and imagination! As annoyed as I am with Stavros (I was rooting for Mario), I think this was a great story and a solid entry. Well done!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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This story demonstrates great creativity and imagination! As annoyed as I am with Stavros (I was rooting for Mario), I think this was a great story and a solid entry. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, Yusita! :)
Comment from RodG
I truly enjoyed this story of competition in the food market. I especially like how you insert the "forbidden fruit" theme. Excellent characterization of Mario through his words and actions. A clever plot twist at the end when his competitor gets even. Rod
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I truly enjoyed this story of competition in the food market. I especially like how you insert the "forbidden fruit" theme. Excellent characterization of Mario through his words and actions. A clever plot twist at the end when his competitor gets even. Rod
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thanks so much, Rod! :)
Comment from royowen
I had to have a giggle at this, what an entrepreneur, I think I should have employed him when I was in business I would have made a fortune, I loved this fabulous story, I know where Victorian markets, beautifully written, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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I had to have a giggle at this, what an entrepreneur, I think I should have employed him when I was in business I would have made a fortune, I loved this fabulous story, I know where Victorian markets, beautifully written, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you, Roy! :)
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Most welcome
Comment from Jasmine Girl
"Fresh from the Orchard" is a charming and witty tale that offers a humorous glimpse into the world of market rivalry, with a lesson on the perils of bending the rules in pursuit of success.
Well done.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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"Fresh from the Orchard" is a charming and witty tale that offers a humorous glimpse into the world of market rivalry, with a lesson on the perils of bending the rules in pursuit of success.
Well done.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2024
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2024
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Thank you! :)
