Comment from Douglas Goff

Exceptional

Oh my, my, my, opportunity knocks. How is it possible that this wonderful contest winner has no six and is also lacking Recognition? I'm here to save the day!

Great piece of work!!! You nailed the feeling perfectly.
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 Comment Written 27-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2024

You are absolutely saving the day today - this is an incredibly generous stretch of reviewing! Thank you so much! :)

reply by Douglas Goff on 27-Jan-2024

Thank you for being such a kind awesome writer!

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

I can see why this one was the winner. You captured the tormenting cravings of a jealous heart - shaped by events that felt unfair, unjust and which ultimately made her feel unloved. Well done!

 Comment Written 23-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Dec-2023

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from BenThrone

Excellent

I can see why this won the contest! You have provided a vivid and highly relatable depiction of what jealousy feels like. The extended metaphor of a parasite is perfect for this topic. Well done!

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023

Thank you so much, Ben! I wish I could say this one was purely fictional ... oh well, it's all grist for the writing mill. I appreciate your feedback very much as always. :)

reply by BenThrone on 22-Dec-2023

Well, if you read through my portfolio to poems posted before you joined you?ll find plenty of evidence that I can sympathize. It does hurt?but poetry I have found is at least as effective as therapy.

reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023

Yes. I feel it's an all too common affliction. Such is life. It's not what happens to you - it's how you deal with it, right? :)

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This poem on jealousy, Thou Shalt Not Covet, moves through the longings with a replaced woman having to witness her replacement replacing her. It is like unplanned vengeance with a cherry on top.

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023

Thank you! :)

Comment from Gerard F Keogh

Excellent

I could see this as an interior monologue in a grand old film noir delivered by Joan Crawford, Anne Baxter, Jane Greer. It has this raw power that barely seems to be under wraps. GK

 Comment Written 22-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023

Thank you so much - I really appreciate this feedback! :)

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

Understanding the topic of this poem can be dangerous. First, the parasite is already ready to attack! Jealousy is probably the one thing the parasite dislikes. To relieve the tension perhaps walking away would help.

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023

That's the message in the final stanza. Thanks. :)

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

You did a great job writing this impassioned and well-written verse. It's perfect for this prompt and oh, so real. Wonderful job on developing this FreeVerse and making it a poem we can all relate to ~ if we're truthful. Good luck.

Melissa

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023

Thank you so much, Melissa! :)

Comment from papa55mike

Excellent

I love the interesting description of the jealousy ripping away at your stomach. What a wonderfully written poem.

Good luck in the contest.
Have a great day, and Merry Christmas!

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from Yusita

Excellent

This is an excellent entry for the Jealousy contest. You describe it with such vivid imagery, and the scenario is one which I'm sure many can relate to...

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023

Thank you so much! :)

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Powerful and stirring poetry. Your imagery is graphic and your choices of vocabulary so effective. Well done and all the best of luck in the competition.

John x

 Comment Written 21-Dec-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Dec-2023

Thanks so much. :)