Longing lunatic
This happened two summers ago2 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
I would like to welcome you to fan story. I listened to your poem, but I had a very difficult time with it because you have not used punctuation. I cannot see to read things, so I have to listen to him and without punctuation it goes along, like a string of pearls Without any breaks. I'm giving you a five because of what a welcome you to fan story.
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I would like to welcome you to fan story. I listened to your poem, but I had a very difficult time with it because you have not used punctuation. I cannot see to read things, so I have to listen to him and without punctuation it goes along, like a string of pearls Without any breaks. I'm giving you a five because of what a welcome you to fan story.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
Comment from Yusita
I am sorry you had to taste the bitter side of love, but at the same time I want to say, this is a very good piece. You express your pain, longing, and desperation so well that the reader can vividly feel it. Some of the lines are amazing in their imagery and uniqueness as well. For example, "in the corner of my prison cell I'll be eating the ashes of our memories "... what a line! I also really liked the line that said: Cupid hit me but missed his second shot. Wow. So well put. A great poem.
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I am sorry you had to taste the bitter side of love, but at the same time I want to say, this is a very good piece. You express your pain, longing, and desperation so well that the reader can vividly feel it. Some of the lines are amazing in their imagery and uniqueness as well. For example, "in the corner of my prison cell I'll be eating the ashes of our memories "... what a line! I also really liked the line that said: Cupid hit me but missed his second shot. Wow. So well put. A great poem.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
