Spring Has Sprung
Ways to show how spring starts15 total reviews
Comment from Navada
You've used a variety of imagery and metaphors to depict the arrival of Spring in a lovely way. I like the choice to depict the birds and bees in this way, as well as describing the effect that blooming gardens have upon us.v I wondered whether "creating" or "providing" might be a slightly better fit than "luring" in your sixth line? Just a thought. I also wondered whether "nature's fun" might be a slightly better fit than "nature run". This is a lovely response to the prompt - good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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You've used a variety of imagery and metaphors to depict the arrival of Spring in a lovely way. I like the choice to depict the birds and bees in this way, as well as describing the effect that blooming gardens have upon us.v I wondered whether "creating" or "providing" might be a slightly better fit than "luring" in your sixth line? Just a thought. I also wondered whether "nature's fun" might be a slightly better fit than "nature run". This is a lovely response to the prompt - good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Comment from Lisasview
Lovely sweet poem about Spring... Weird to read because we are now in Fall... but wonderful anyway.
Really do love the image you chose to go along with your words... really perfect.
Lisasview
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Lovely sweet poem about Spring... Weird to read because we are now in Fall... but wonderful anyway.
Really do love the image you chose to go along with your words... really perfect.
Lisasview
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
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You are very welcome,
Lisa
Comment from jaded831
Your poem created a feeling, a welcoming change after a hard, cold winter. Spring brings new life and creates a magical feeling of peace and calm. You captured that in your poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Your poem created a feeling, a welcoming change after a hard, cold winter. Spring brings new life and creates a magical feeling of peace and calm. You captured that in your poem. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Janis M.
I love the short couplets, as it focuses on one idea and then moves to the next quite smoothly. Even with a mixture of near rhymes, the meter is consistent so it isn't distracting even when ending a verse with an indefinite article, as it picks up just as quickly in the following couplet. It takes a certain level of skill and bravery to not write with such strict grammar in poetry and allowing the verses to communicate a thought even if it isn't a complete sentence.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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I love the short couplets, as it focuses on one idea and then moves to the next quite smoothly. Even with a mixture of near rhymes, the meter is consistent so it isn't distracting even when ending a verse with an indefinite article, as it picks up just as quickly in the following couplet. It takes a certain level of skill and bravery to not write with such strict grammar in poetry and allowing the verses to communicate a thought even if it isn't a complete sentence.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Yusita
What a way to paint pictures with a pen! And not only could I vividly see everything you described in my mind, I could hear (eg: the birds) and feel them (eg: the breeze) as well. A lovely write and a worthy tribute to spring. I personally found that the ending was a little abrupt, but that could well have been intentional... and maybe I just wanted the poem to continue because I was enjoying it so much.
Good luck in the contest!
Blessings,
-Yusita
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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What a way to paint pictures with a pen! And not only could I vividly see everything you described in my mind, I could hear (eg: the birds) and feel them (eg: the breeze) as well. A lovely write and a worthy tribute to spring. I personally found that the ending was a little abrupt, but that could well have been intentional... and maybe I just wanted the poem to continue because I was enjoying it so much.
Good luck in the contest!
Blessings,
-Yusita
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from leather
Congratulations on your 50th post--that's a significant accomplishment.
This is a lovely poem to wake up to, especially since this is November. The poem flows nicely, and there are no spelling errors.
I did have to enlarge the size using my computer because it takes my eyes a while to focus in the morning.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Congratulations on your 50th post--that's a significant accomplishment.
This is a lovely poem to wake up to, especially since this is November. The poem flows nicely, and there are no spelling errors.
I did have to enlarge the size using my computer because it takes my eyes a while to focus in the morning.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Neonewman
Great entry for the Spring contest. As Winter nears, most will immediately long for Spring. Fall is my favorite time of the year, and our Winter's in Texas aren't usually too bad. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Great entry for the Spring contest. As Winter nears, most will immediately long for Spring. Fall is my favorite time of the year, and our Winter's in Texas aren't usually too bad. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from royowen
I know we are enjoying spring down here, and conversely the northern hemisphere is enjoying autumn heading into winter, you've described how spring comes into all its creative beauty, lovely poem. Well done. Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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I know we are enjoying spring down here, and conversely the northern hemisphere is enjoying autumn heading into winter, you've described how spring comes into all its creative beauty, lovely poem. Well done. Blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
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Comment from Daylily
We are on the cusp of winter here in the USA and I would like it to be spring instead since very rough weather is forecasted this year. Your beautiful poem expresses the many beautiful attributes of a freshly-awakened season. So lovely!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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We are on the cusp of winter here in the USA and I would like it to be spring instead since very rough weather is forecasted this year. Your beautiful poem expresses the many beautiful attributes of a freshly-awakened season. So lovely!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This excellent work. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in readers. I enjoyed reviewing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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This excellent work. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in readers. I enjoyed reviewing this.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 15-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your review.
