Blackbird Perches
5-7-5 about blackbird and early autumn15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Oh, this is just too good to be sitting here waiting for one more review to be "recognized!" "autumn's first tears"-- It's one of those "Wow, I wish I'd thought of that" lines! Stunning 5-7-5! Nice alliteration here as well!
Bravo to you!
Karenina
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Oh, this is just too good to be sitting here waiting for one more review to be "recognized!" "autumn's first tears"-- It's one of those "Wow, I wish I'd thought of that" lines! Stunning 5-7-5! Nice alliteration here as well!
Bravo to you!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your super review. And your enthusiastic comments.
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Today? Autumn's first tears fell from the sky...as SNOW!
WHAT? It's November FIRST!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Crystie,
This 5-7-5 uses metaphor and personification well to describe this bird sitting in a tree after and Autumn rain. Did the picture or the poem come first?
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Hi Crystie,
This 5-7-5 uses metaphor and personification well to describe this bird sitting in a tree after and Autumn rain. Did the picture or the poem come first?
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 14-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your super review. I thought of a blackbird first and started searching for blackbird ideas. There are some fantastic bird photos on fanartreview.com that always exceed anything I could photograph in our suburban neighborhood.
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My pleasure, Chystie. There is a lot of good art on the format.
Joan
Comment from Ginda Simpson
Filled with beautiful imagery and emotion, this is a truly lovely verse and well deserving of its win. I love the last line. Its notes linger. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023
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Filled with beautiful imagery and emotion, this is a truly lovely verse and well deserving of its win. I love the last line. Its notes linger. Well done!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for your friendly review.
Comment from judiverse
Excellent use of alliteration. The blackbird might be thinking of making a trip to warmer climates. I appreciate your use of autumn's first tears. to me, autumn is a sad time because it's a reminder of winter to come. You've captured the feeling of autumn. Best of luck in the contest. judi
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
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Excellent use of alliteration. The blackbird might be thinking of making a trip to warmer climates. I appreciate your use of autumn's first tears. to me, autumn is a sad time because it's a reminder of winter to come. You've captured the feeling of autumn. Best of luck in the contest. judi
Comment Written 06-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
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Thank you for reviewing this little poem about a blackbird today.
Comment from JSD
Lovely picture indeed. I like your alliteration here and the way you convey the character of the watching bird, taking in nature's changes. Then you finish with the metaphor of weeping rain. Excellent. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Lovely picture indeed. I like your alliteration here and the way you convey the character of the watching bird, taking in nature's changes. Then you finish with the metaphor of weeping rain. Excellent. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation, Crystie.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery with
the blackbird, raindrops, and autumn.
-Effective alliteration in line one, and
a good comparison in line two.
-A very good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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-Very nice image and presentation, Crystie.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery with
the blackbird, raindrops, and autumn.
-Effective alliteration in line one, and
a good comparison in line two.
-A very good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Thank you for such a detailed review. These short-short poem forms sure require careful attention to detail.
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You are welcome, and they do require some thought!
Comment from zanya
Oh yes - our feathered friends probably feel the change in the seasons even before we humans do - lovely image 'autumn's first tears' and a great pic to accompany
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Oh yes - our feathered friends probably feel the change in the seasons even before we humans do - lovely image 'autumn's first tears' and a great pic to accompany
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Thank you so very much for your generous review! It just made my day.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Blackbird Perches, has the proper formatting and finds the ebony witness to the changing season and the ever cooling and saturating elements.
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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This 5-7-5, Blackbird Perches, has the proper formatting and finds the ebony witness to the changing season and the ever cooling and saturating elements.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Thank you much for stopping by to read and review.
Comment from w.j.debi
Nice alliteration in both the first and second lines. You paint a vivid picture with your verse. The picture just supports it. I love the closing line. Autumn is certainly around the corner.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Nice alliteration in both the first and second lines. You paint a vivid picture with your verse. The picture just supports it. I love the closing line. Autumn is certainly around the corner.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind review!
Comment from lyenochka
That's such a beautiful bird! I love the alliterative "calm as compassion" and he does look like he's calm and compassionate and what a soothing thing to see as we bade summer farewell. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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That's such a beautiful bird! I love the alliterative "calm as compassion" and he does look like he's calm and compassionate and what a soothing thing to see as we bade summer farewell. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your great review today!
