Sleeping Storm
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Comment from Lisasview
You followed the 3-6-9 Poem contest entry rules perfectly...
I do have one tiny suggested as I stumbled a bit on the in indecision
two ins in a row...maybe find another word..with... or something like that...
Just a thought...
Lisa. new to this site
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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You followed the 3-6-9 Poem contest entry rules perfectly...
I do have one tiny suggested as I stumbled a bit on the in indecision
two ins in a row...maybe find another word..with... or something like that...
Just a thought...
Lisa. new to this site
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you for reading and reviewing today. I ought to go back and check that.
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You are so welcome. I believe in good reviewing and letting the poet know if there is an issue...
You might enjoy some of my poems...Only a few as I am new here.. Check out my portfolio if you have the time.
Lisasview
Comment from Lea Tonin1
Very nice poem! Your first line grabbed me great work! Storm clouds always look so ominous. Par for the course I think. Beautifully written with fine word choices. You hav2 followed the contest rules quite well and delivered a great poem. I see no issues with grammar or aesthetics. It all looks good to me. Thanks for your submission and I hope you have a great night!
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Very nice poem! Your first line grabbed me great work! Storm clouds always look so ominous. Par for the course I think. Beautifully written with fine word choices. You hav2 followed the contest rules quite well and delivered a great poem. I see no issues with grammar or aesthetics. It all looks good to me. Thanks for your submission and I hope you have a great night!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you for a super review.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-6-9, Sleeping Storm, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that the storm may rise from the horizon and change the day in a minute.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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This 3-6-9, Sleeping Storm, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that the storm may rise from the horizon and change the day in a minute.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023
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Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have seen people fish with a full covering up in all weathers and I wonder what is the point of it all, but fishermen just love catching fish! I enjoyed your vivid descriptions here Crystie and good luck with the contest, this is a good entry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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I have seen people fish with a full covering up in all weathers and I wonder what is the point of it all, but fishermen just love catching fish! I enjoyed your vivid descriptions here Crystie and good luck with the contest, this is a good entry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your super review and well wishes.
Comment from lyenochka
Love how you got a bird in there! Terns have such dramatic flight. I like your use of enjambment and alliteration and especially the personification of the storm clouds "mulling in indecision"! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Love how you got a bird in there! Terns have such dramatic flight. I like your use of enjambment and alliteration and especially the personification of the storm clouds "mulling in indecision"! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for a great review.
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You're so welcome. Enjoyed the dramatic description of the ocean storm scene!
Comment from karenina
I love the ocean...sunshine or raging storm. You've captured the "mood" transition as the waved roil and the winds pick up and...oh my, better run for cover! Very nice 3-6-9. Plus? I learned both "kelter" and "kilter" are acceptable spellings. (This may come in handy in my Scrabble games!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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I love the ocean...sunshine or raging storm. You've captured the "mood" transition as the waved roil and the winds pick up and...oh my, better run for cover! Very nice 3-6-9. Plus? I learned both "kelter" and "kilter" are acceptable spellings. (This may come in handy in my Scrabble games!)
Karenina
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thanks for reviewing today! Hmm, that is a good thing to know for Scrabble all right.
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(I need all the help I can get!)
My pleasure, reviewing...
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very lovely poem that you have written for the contest. It goes well with the picture of the storm that you used for the image. I really enjoyed reading it and I enjoyed the presentation very much. I wish you the best in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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This is a very lovely poem that you have written for the contest. It goes well with the picture of the storm that you used for the image. I really enjoyed reading it and I enjoyed the presentation very much. I wish you the best in the contest.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thank you for such a kind review.
Comment from Paul Manton
Hello Christie -this is the first time we met. I am a writer, musician and teacher from North London, and I'm new to Fanstory. I really enjoyed your 3-6-9 poem, and I can see that you are an intuitive writer because you have an instinctive use of rhyme, alliteration and assonance.
I suppose 'fishin' was too good to miss! But it's kind of a cheat, because I'm not convinced your glowering sea would be conducive to rod and line - so maybe the rhyme there wasn't necessary. In spite of that, it's a great poem and really evocative. Best wishes, Paul
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Hello Christie -this is the first time we met. I am a writer, musician and teacher from North London, and I'm new to Fanstory. I really enjoyed your 3-6-9 poem, and I can see that you are an intuitive writer because you have an instinctive use of rhyme, alliteration and assonance.
I suppose 'fishin' was too good to miss! But it's kind of a cheat, because I'm not convinced your glowering sea would be conducive to rod and line - so maybe the rhyme there wasn't necessary. In spite of that, it's a great poem and really evocative. Best wishes, Paul
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your super review. I guess the 'fishin' line was a nod to my brother, who founded a fishing club at our high school years ago.
Comment from JSD
Oh, excellent. Really succinctly conveying the prelude to a storm. Great imagery, use of sound, and plenty of internal rhyme. And then the end is such a personal and natural word. Just love it. Well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Oh, excellent. Really succinctly conveying the prelude to a storm. Great imagery, use of sound, and plenty of internal rhyme. And then the end is such a personal and natural word. Just love it. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review!
Comment from royowen
Great use of imaginative metaphors Crystie, a great exercise in using literary imagery to paint and shape a Projected image on a verbal canvas, beautifully written entry, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Great use of imaginative metaphors Crystie, a great exercise in using literary imagery to paint and shape a Projected image on a verbal canvas, beautifully written entry, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your generous review! It is very much appreciated.
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