Blue Velvet Sky
Contemplating the sky49 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your poem. It makes me ponder the mystery of the night sky too. Your poem is very well written. The 'ight' rhyming scheme worked will in this poem. Thank you for sharing.
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I enjoyed reading your poem. It makes me ponder the mystery of the night sky too. Your poem is very well written. The 'ight' rhyming scheme worked will in this poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for reading my short poem.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This creative poem is very descriptive and thought-provoking. Yes, in spite of man's brilliance and endless research, there ARE still mysteries--always will be mysteries except to God.
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This creative poem is very descriptive and thought-provoking. Yes, in spite of man's brilliance and endless research, there ARE still mysteries--always will be mysteries except to God.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for your support, Janice.
Comment from June Sargent
This is lovely - the imagery of the night sky being a blanket of blue velvet is perfect. As a mantle of mystery - the night sky has much to reveal...well done!
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This is lovely - the imagery of the night sky being a blanket of blue velvet is perfect. As a mantle of mystery - the night sky has much to reveal...well done!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for your support, June.
Comment from Janet Foor
I love the night sky and all the facets of the day turning into night. Your vivid and descriptive language is lovely.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
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I love the night sky and all the facets of the day turning into night. Your vivid and descriptive language is lovely.
Very nicely done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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I am delighted thay your like this piece, dear Janet.
Comment from Wendy G
Beautiful poem speaking of the serenity and majesty of the the night sky, which enthralled us as it did you. You stand small, alone and vulnerable, spell-bound by the grandeur. Then a metaphysical turn the reality and hardness of Truth. Excellent writing, thoughtful and pure.
Wendy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Beautiful poem speaking of the serenity and majesty of the the night sky, which enthralled us as it did you. You stand small, alone and vulnerable, spell-bound by the grandeur. Then a metaphysical turn the reality and hardness of Truth. Excellent writing, thoughtful and pure.
Wendy
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you for liking my lines of inspiration, it means a lot to me.
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
This is an is an extremely well-written with emotions arising from the depths of hearts. There is serenity in this poem andmakes one to join the mysteries of the sky, moon and stars. Well done!
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This is an is an extremely well-written with emotions arising from the depths of hearts. There is serenity in this poem andmakes one to join the mysteries of the sky, moon and stars. Well done!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Than you for reading my poem.
Comment from Senyai
Hi Amada,
Such a strange and emotional poem with a connection to the mood of the sky on a cloudless, moonless, starless night. Staring up into that great beyond, you must have felt so small, I know I do. I love your carefully chosen phrases:
"Draped in blue velvet"
"tingles with the unknowns"
"mantle of mysteries"
...and then there is the fear element, knowing how small we really are looking up at the deep, sometimes impersonal expansive Universe.
" the truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg
I soak in the spell of this mystery, tonight."
Very well written, excellent perspective taken as you become child like in your awe.
Have a good week, Amada :))
Senyai
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Hi Amada,
Such a strange and emotional poem with a connection to the mood of the sky on a cloudless, moonless, starless night. Staring up into that great beyond, you must have felt so small, I know I do. I love your carefully chosen phrases:
"Draped in blue velvet"
"tingles with the unknowns"
"mantle of mysteries"
...and then there is the fear element, knowing how small we really are looking up at the deep, sometimes impersonal expansive Universe.
" the truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg
I soak in the spell of this mystery, tonight."
Very well written, excellent perspective taken as you become child like in your awe.
Have a good week, Amada :))
Senyai
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you for liking these lines about my sky. Lovely...
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There is a mix of emotions in your thought process here as you admire the night sky but feel the chill in he air and the impending frailty of future events, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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There is a mix of emotions in your thought process here as you admire the night sky but feel the chill in he air and the impending frailty of future events, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you for your lovely comments, faithful supporter of my words. Hugs,
Comment from rama devi
I love the sense of awe and serenity in this poem. It took my to the scene and made me feel I was also viewing a mantle of mysteries (great phrase!)
Nice alliteration o M, S and D-- and consonance of L and S too.The repetition of the word TONIGHT has a rhythmic groove. Well done!
Just a few suggestions on caps and punctuation for your consideration:
Draped in blue velvet(,) the sky shines tonight.
Deep and silent, it tingles with unknowns....
No moon or stars in the sky, tonight(.)
e(E)nthralled, I am, by this mantle of mysteries'.....
l(L)ike a child, I just inhale the wondrous sight....(PERIOD instead of ellipses)
(.)
t(T)he truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg(.)
I soak in the spell of this mystery, tonight.
With above edits:
Draped in blue velvet, the sky shines tonight.
Deep and silent, it tingles with unknowns....
No moon or stars in the sky, tonight.
Enthralled, I am, by this mantle of mysteries'.....
Like a child, I just inhale the wondrous sight.
The truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg.
I soak in the spell of this mystery, tonight.
TINGLE WITH UNKNOWNS... Nice!
Love this, dear friend.
Hugs,
rd
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I love the sense of awe and serenity in this poem. It took my to the scene and made me feel I was also viewing a mantle of mysteries (great phrase!)
Nice alliteration o M, S and D-- and consonance of L and S too.The repetition of the word TONIGHT has a rhythmic groove. Well done!
Just a few suggestions on caps and punctuation for your consideration:
Draped in blue velvet(,) the sky shines tonight.
Deep and silent, it tingles with unknowns....
No moon or stars in the sky, tonight(.)
e(E)nthralled, I am, by this mantle of mysteries'.....
l(L)ike a child, I just inhale the wondrous sight....(PERIOD instead of ellipses)
(.)
t(T)he truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg(.)
I soak in the spell of this mystery, tonight.
With above edits:
Draped in blue velvet, the sky shines tonight.
Deep and silent, it tingles with unknowns....
No moon or stars in the sky, tonight.
Enthralled, I am, by this mantle of mysteries'.....
Like a child, I just inhale the wondrous sight.
The truth is cold and flat like a heartless iceberg.
I soak in the spell of this mystery, tonight.
TINGLE WITH UNKNOWNS... Nice!
Love this, dear friend.
Hugs,
rd
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Blue Velvet Sky", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece.
Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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"Blue Velvet Sky", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece.
Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much, duchess.
amada, you're very welcome.
God bless you and take care,
the Duchess
