Secondhand Diamonds
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Coffin-Maker"Three Character Studies -- 2289 words
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Comment from purrfect tale
Eeeew! But a wonderful piece of writing. You did an excellent job of telling the story through the eyes of someone so young.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Eeeew! But a wonderful piece of writing. You did an excellent job of telling the story through the eyes of someone so young.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Thanks, chick!
Comment from amada
The title called my attention. I just read an article last week about customized coffins, rich people on cars simulating coffins. Your story is very well written.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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The title called my attention. I just read an article last week about customized coffins, rich people on cars simulating coffins. Your story is very well written.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Thanks. I appreciate your review! robo
Comment from Spitfire
A well-written piece based on a fact I knew nothing about! Now I want to research it. Whether intended or not, I loved the humor of Uncle Sawyer's name. Outstanding use of voice. Details of making the coffins, descriptions of people drowned or lost all make this came to life. A nice touch-counting the holes in the strip of leather--makes your character even more real. And the father's crying! The emphasis on eating all his beans, The thought of having to burn all those bodies. This is a piece worthy of a prize. Enter it in a flash fiction contest, my dear.
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A well-written piece based on a fact I knew nothing about! Now I want to research it. Whether intended or not, I loved the humor of Uncle Sawyer's name. Outstanding use of voice. Details of making the coffins, descriptions of people drowned or lost all make this came to life. A nice touch-counting the holes in the strip of leather--makes your character even more real. And the father's crying! The emphasis on eating all his beans, The thought of having to burn all those bodies. This is a piece worthy of a prize. Enter it in a flash fiction contest, my dear.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Thanks. And yes, Sawyer was intended. I didn't know how many would know or cathc it. I wanted the leather holes to seem like they represented the lives lost like stars in heaven - don't know if that came across. Thanks for the vote of confidence. I may enter it in a contest, after all. *smile*
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Definitely the hole symbolism came across.
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Yea!
Comment from Torrence Winter
This was a very good recounting of a storm that happened in 1928. You told the story with deep accuracy. There was no spag that I could find.
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This was a very good recounting of a storm that happened in 1928. You told the story with deep accuracy. There was no spag that I could find.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Thanks, Fox. I appreciate the review. HAve a great day ! robo
Comment from GEETBHIM
Such a great tragedy, very painful when one looses their love one in such kind of natural disaster, you have told this in very good manner, well done a very good real life story.
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Such a great tragedy, very painful when one looses their love one in such kind of natural disaster, you have told this in very good manner, well done a very good real life story.
geetbhim
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Thanks so much. It is a terrible tragedy. They call it the forgotten hurricane. It needs to be remembered. Thanks for the review. Have a great day - robo
Comment from oozer
OH....how very gruesome...but at least they were coffined afore being burnt- that gave them some.... respect...i suppose...It seemed so shocking... until it at long last...
it dawned on me tat is was nothing more than an open-air
CREMATION!
GREAT LAST LINE
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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OH....how very gruesome...but at least they were coffined afore being burnt- that gave them some.... respect...i suppose...It seemed so shocking... until it at long last...
it dawned on me tat is was nothing more than an open-air
CREMATION!
GREAT LAST LINE
Comment Written 06-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Thanks oozer. I'm never sure how these things will go over til the first couple of reviews. You've helped my heart and helped my lungs begin to breathe again. Bless you. robo
Comment from Linda England Bonam
Oh, my, this was a tragic story for sure. I felt for all the families there that lost their loved ones, and the coffin maker had his hands full. So sad. Such a well told story!
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Oh, my, this was a tragic story for sure. I felt for all the families there that lost their loved ones, and the coffin maker had his hands full. So sad. Such a well told story!
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2011
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2011
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Thanks, Linda. It was heart felt. Such a tragic tale. Truth is stranger and more terrifying than fiction!
