Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chapter 1, part II"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
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Comment from Heidixoxo
Hello again Barbara,
wow....as I thought another fantastic story you have written here. It indeed captured my attention from the start and held my attention throughout. Im looking forward to reading more of this story and I will be watching for current postings. Best of luck to you my friend....xoxo
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Hello again Barbara,
wow....as I thought another fantastic story you have written here. It indeed captured my attention from the start and held my attention throughout. Im looking forward to reading more of this story and I will be watching for current postings. Best of luck to you my friend....xoxo
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from mumsyone
Good chapter, Barbara. Have anice time with your family!
He stretched his five-feet(foot)-eleven body across the blanket.
He lay alone under the hot steaming sun.(, his) His head bare.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Good chapter, Barbara. Have anice time with your family!
He stretched his five-feet(foot)-eleven body across the blanket.
He lay alone under the hot steaming sun.(, his) His head bare.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the catch. I wondered about the foot and feet since five is more than one I used feet. I guess I'd better research it. Thank you for the kind review.
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Feet just sounds a little awkward, and I'm sure foot is allowable in a case like this. I'd be interested to know what you find out about it.
Comment from AprilShower
Wow! His wish was fulfilled. He was there with his wife in spirit. She saw him. I wonder for a moment if she had died. I felt like I was there Barbara. Well done.
I don't know if this was intentional or not.
Master Bradley done done all he can do. (repeated word)
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Wow! His wish was fulfilled. He was there with his wife in spirit. She saw him. I wonder for a moment if she had died. I felt like I was there Barbara. Well done.
I don't know if this was intentional or not.
Master Bradley done done all he can do. (repeated word)
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Yes, that done was intentional. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
My updated comments for the last chapter are the same for this one. I don't think you need the background information...it is a little distracting.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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My updated comments for the last chapter are the same for this one. I don't think you need the background information...it is a little distracting.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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I hope you do read the entire book. I know you will be a reliable source if I need help.
Comment from Readywriter52
I don't know how people can glamorize war. It's dirty, hot and painful. There is no pity for the wounded. The soldier stole everything of value from Bookman. Alice won't ever see him again. He will never see his just born child. That is very sad.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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I don't know how people can glamorize war. It's dirty, hot and painful. There is no pity for the wounded. The soldier stole everything of value from Bookman. Alice won't ever see him again. He will never see his just born child. That is very sad.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Yes, it is very sad. I appreciate your kind review.
Comment from Cornelius2000
Good story, well told, well written. Excellent description of the horrors of war, and the pain of natural childbirth. Well written dialect....I don't see a thing I would change. Nicely done. Have a good vacation.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Good story, well told, well written. Excellent description of the horrors of war, and the pain of natural childbirth. Well written dialect....I don't see a thing I would change. Nicely done. Have a good vacation.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from rtobaygo
YOU MAKE IT FEEL AS IF I'M IN THE WAR, SITTING NEXT TO JOHNY REB. VERY GOOD IMAGERY AND DIALOGUE. AS I STATED IN AN EARLIER REVIEW, YOUR RESEARCH IS EXCELLENT, WHICH BRINGS THIS STORY, ALONG WITH YOUR IMAGINATION TO LIFE. KUDOS!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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YOU MAKE IT FEEL AS IF I'M IN THE WAR, SITTING NEXT TO JOHNY REB. VERY GOOD IMAGERY AND DIALOGUE. AS I STATED IN AN EARLIER REVIEW, YOUR RESEARCH IS EXCELLENT, WHICH BRINGS THIS STORY, ALONG WITH YOUR IMAGINATION TO LIFE. KUDOS!
TAKE CARE,
RAY
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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THANK YOU FOR THE KIND REVIEW AND ENCOURAGING WORDS.
Comment from Shirley McLain
This is a very realistic reading chapter. I enjoyed every word from start to finish. Have a great vacation and I'll be ready for the next chapter when you get back.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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This is a very realistic reading chapter. I enjoyed every word from start to finish. Have a great vacation and I'll be ready for the next chapter when you get back.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
This is well penned Barbara, as always you writing keeps me locked into it as I move through the post.
Everything was perfect and your building the scene and story well. Have a great vacation and enjoy your time with your family.:D
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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This is well penned Barbara, as always you writing keeps me locked into it as I move through the post.
Everything was perfect and your building the scene and story well. Have a great vacation and enjoy your time with your family.:D
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Dave M
Barbara,
I'm sure you'll enjoy seeing your family. I enjoyed reading this post where the father dies as the child is born. I also have one suggestion:
"Emanating from the woods Bradley heard the sounds of guns popping, bayonets clashing, and men's last dying moans." This sentence starts off with a dangling participle. I'd write it differently: "The sounds of guns popping, bayonets clashing, and men's last dying moans filled the woods."
Dave
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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Barbara,
I'm sure you'll enjoy seeing your family. I enjoyed reading this post where the father dies as the child is born. I also have one suggestion:
"Emanating from the woods Bradley heard the sounds of guns popping, bayonets clashing, and men's last dying moans." This sentence starts off with a dangling participle. I'd write it differently: "The sounds of guns popping, bayonets clashing, and men's last dying moans filled the woods."
Dave
Comment Written 22-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2012
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I was wondering about that sentence. Thank you for helping me with it. I appreciate your kind review.
