Faith
Faith Contest13 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Steve,
This is a simple and thorugh list of what Jesus is to us. The house with a sturdy roof is a good metaphor. It show the beauty of nature and reminds that all things of life, man and nature were created by Him and He deserves thanks.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and kieep healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Steve,
This is a simple and thorugh list of what Jesus is to us. The house with a sturdy roof is a good metaphor. It show the beauty of nature and reminds that all things of life, man and nature were created by Him and He deserves thanks.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and kieep healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 08-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Joan - glad you enjoyed this and found relevance.
Steve
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No problem, Steve.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your well-deserved prize for this fine poem, rife with original imagery and turns of phrase--good for you not lazily relying on typical words of prayer. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Congrats on your well-deserved prize for this fine poem, rife with original imagery and turns of phrase--good for you not lazily relying on typical words of prayer. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Liz, many thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Paul Borders
kiwisteveh - I just called the police because you were robbed. In my opinion, your entry has "winner" written all over it. I'm envious of people who can phrase things like this. Your wording is wonderful.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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kiwisteveh - I just called the police because you were robbed. In my opinion, your entry has "winner" written all over it. I'm envious of people who can phrase things like this. Your wording is wonderful.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2020
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Thanks, Paul and a belated welcome to FanStory. I have been robbed so many times it feels like normal now!
I appreciate the kind words.
Steve
Comment from Clockwise
This is one of the most appealing poems I've read here in quite awhile. The rhymes are flawless; nothing feels forced. The rhythm is smoot and natural. There are no awkward tangents; the idea driving this work is very well-focused. Also, you don't seem to feel the annoying need to turn poetry into an exercise to show off your skills with a thesaurus. Most importantly, its an entertaining read (a quality too often overlooked by many would-be poets).
I wish I would have written it, and should serve as a model to strive for.
Very well done, the time you put into this shows.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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This is one of the most appealing poems I've read here in quite awhile. The rhymes are flawless; nothing feels forced. The rhythm is smoot and natural. There are no awkward tangents; the idea driving this work is very well-focused. Also, you don't seem to feel the annoying need to turn poetry into an exercise to show off your skills with a thesaurus. Most importantly, its an entertaining read (a quality too often overlooked by many would-be poets).
I wish I would have written it, and should serve as a model to strive for.
Very well done, the time you put into this shows.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2020
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2020
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Thank you very much for the kind words and the shiny sixth star. I am glad you enjoyed the piece.
Yes, indeed, some of the best poetry is simple in nature, but also contains a deep message.
Steve
Comment from tfawcus
A nicely worded set of Puritan values. One can easily imagine the Founding Fathers finding themselves and their lifestyles validated by this list. I liked the way the language harked back to earlier and simpler times.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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A nicely worded set of Puritan values. One can easily imagine the Founding Fathers finding themselves and their lifestyles validated by this list. I liked the way the language harked back to earlier and simpler times.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Tony.
Yes, I tried to keep this simple and reflect the language of earlier times.
Steve
Comment from lyenochka
Well, that is all inclusive! On one hand, I see the faithfulness of the people doing their part. But the other "I am" statements lead me back to the One Who calls Himself the Great I Am. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Well, that is all inclusive! On one hand, I see the faithfulness of the people doing their part. But the other "I am" statements lead me back to the One Who calls Himself the Great I Am. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Sorry for the slow reply.
Steve
Comment from w.j.debi
The good old basic build the happy family and the happy home. A sturdy roof overhead and sacrificing for each other bring all the happiness we can ever need. A beautiful poem about what is really important.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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The good old basic build the happy family and the happy home. A sturdy roof overhead and sacrificing for each other bring all the happiness we can ever need. A beautiful poem about what is really important.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Sorry for the slow reply.
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading your faith poem contest entry. My faith tells me that these are all examples of our God. I understand other faiths may interrupt it differently and that's okay. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I enjoyed reading your faith poem contest entry. My faith tells me that these are all examples of our God. I understand other faiths may interrupt it differently and that's okay. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Sorry for the slow reply.
Steve
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
This is a great piece for the faith poetry contest. It goes with the 'I AM' perfectly. I loved reading this amazing piece. Thank you for the words of hops
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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This is a great piece for the faith poetry contest. It goes with the 'I AM' perfectly. I loved reading this amazing piece. Thank you for the words of hops
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thank you.
Sorry for the slow reply.
Steve
Comment from LisaMay
I love the olde worlde feel of your poem, reinforced by the quaint illustration and the use of Goodwife. Your poem combines an authoritarian tone (stern) with a welcoming one (come share), the imagery is inclusive - from nature to philosophy; the great I AM. Best line, that makes it a poem for all time: "I am the Once, the Then, the Now."
Personally, I'd stick a comma in after 'at the door', and 'in the field'.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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I love the olde worlde feel of your poem, reinforced by the quaint illustration and the use of Goodwife. Your poem combines an authoritarian tone (stern) with a welcoming one (come share), the imagery is inclusive - from nature to philosophy; the great I AM. Best line, that makes it a poem for all time: "I am the Once, the Then, the Now."
Personally, I'd stick a comma in after 'at the door', and 'in the field'.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2020
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Thanks, Lisa.
I took your suggestion of the commas...
Steve