NaPoWriMo 2020
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "The Kit"Annual napowrimo prologue and poetry submission
12 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I think a "jumping-off-point" refers to a starting point and you used it well with your Russian expression. Thank you for letting us know that a young squirrel is called a kit and weaving a story poem around its curiosity. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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I think a "jumping-off-point" refers to a starting point and you used it well with your Russian expression. Thank you for letting us know that a young squirrel is called a kit and weaving a story poem around its curiosity. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Hi! It actually made me think about diving boards and suicide. You're nice. Thank you. Hugs, Alicia :)
Comment from lyenochka
That picture is cute but that's a bunny not a squirrel. But maybe that can be called a "kit" also. I kept imagining a fox kit until I got to your notes.
You made a fun story interacting with nature and sharing some bit of peace.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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That picture is cute but that's a bunny not a squirrel. But maybe that can be called a "kit" also. I kept imagining a fox kit until I got to your notes.
You made a fun story interacting with nature and sharing some bit of peace.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Hi Helen! That is a squirrel. The kit's body is about the size of your hand. It'll grow into it's ears and the tail is double its size. Thank you. Hugs :)
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Ah, thanks for clarifying - it sure looks more like a bunny than a squirrel. I there are really small squirrels running around lately - they're so fast!
Comment from Treischel
I enjoyed this little story of the squirrel and its interactions with traffic as well as your lunch. Some of the rhymes seemed a bit forced, but overall a believable poetic instance. Not sure the phrase really goes with the story either. It feels like you just threw it on at the end. So, to me, I wasn't enthused much. Sorry.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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I enjoyed this little story of the squirrel and its interactions with traffic as well as your lunch. Some of the rhymes seemed a bit forced, but overall a believable poetic instance. Not sure the phrase really goes with the story either. It feels like you just threw it on at the end. So, to me, I wasn't enthused much. Sorry.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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Thank you :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about leaving a problem for a while to recharge your mind us the best thing we can do to solve a problem that we cannot solve when we feel stressed.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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A very well-written poem about leaving a problem for a while to recharge your mind us the best thing we can do to solve a problem that we cannot solve when we feel stressed.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2020
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You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from susand3022
Hi Sunni... so, the whole time, I'm thinking that the kit is a baby fox... because they're kits too... but I learned something new here, it was a squirrel! Now the story makes sense, though the picture at the bottom is a quandary... why the rabbit with the ice cream cone? LOL THanks for teaching me something new! :)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Hi Sunni... so, the whole time, I'm thinking that the kit is a baby fox... because they're kits too... but I learned something new here, it was a squirrel! Now the story makes sense, though the picture at the bottom is a quandary... why the rabbit with the ice cream cone? LOL THanks for teaching me something new! :)
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Hi Susan! And you thought me something new also. I didn't know about the baby fox. That's nice. You're nice. Thank you :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks a nice, funny story about a kit (squirrel) whose comprehension and wish to go for rest after eating is appreciable; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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This speaks a nice, funny story about a kit (squirrel) whose comprehension and wish to go for rest after eating is appreciable; well said, well done; thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Hi! Thank you. Have a great weekend :)
Comment from Mia Twysted
This was a cute little poem and I could see the Kit running around and getting into some mischief. I love the clear descriptions that you provide. The only thing I didn't pick up on was what he was sleeping on.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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This was a cute little poem and I could see the Kit running around and getting into some mischief. I love the clear descriptions that you provide. The only thing I didn't pick up on was what he was sleeping on.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Hi! It was bread like a pillow. Thank you.
Have a great weekend :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I just love the word phrase you choose to share in this beautiful poem -story. And this kit has quite the survival skills embedded in his DNA :"Suddenly, traffic grabbed its attention
The kit looked anxiously left and right.
I was shocked at its comphrension;
This little animal was quite bright."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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I just love the word phrase you choose to share in this beautiful poem -story. And this kit has quite the survival skills embedded in his DNA :"Suddenly, traffic grabbed its attention
The kit looked anxiously left and right.
I was shocked at its comphrension;
This little animal was quite bright."
Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Hi! You're very kind. Thank you.
Have a great weekend :)
Comment from Bill Pinder
Thanks for sharing this story in a poem about a baby squirrel playing near you. Animals can be fun to watch, especially young ones. Keep writing and stay safe. Bill
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thanks for sharing this story in a poem about a baby squirrel playing near you. Animals can be fun to watch, especially young ones. Keep writing and stay safe. Bill
Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Hi! You're nice. Thank you
Have a great weekend :)
Comment from faith bosire
Wow this is a great piece of work
What you wrote about the kit is amazing and it gives such a vivid description . You could also add about its colour . That's just my view
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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Wow this is a great piece of work
What you wrote about the kit is amazing and it gives such a vivid description . You could also add about its colour . That's just my view
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2020
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2020
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Thank you :)
