The Promise of Life
A walk in the pioneers' cemetery.22 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry. I agree with your notes. That would seem to be a safe place to walk--among those already dead. Cemeteries hold valuable clues and history on the markers. Your words do them justice. I like the use of alliteration, the way your words are descriptive with great imagery, and the beautiful picture. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
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You did a great job with your contest entry. I agree with your notes. That would seem to be a safe place to walk--among those already dead. Cemeteries hold valuable clues and history on the markers. Your words do them justice. I like the use of alliteration, the way your words are descriptive with great imagery, and the beautiful picture. Thanks for sharing and best wishes. Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
Comment from poetwatch
No one thinks about the past a time when life was worth living. Now everyone looks and finds death. This are my favorite lines. "The earth cracks a grave smile,/amused by mere Man's vanity --/his monumental insignificance./When Death itself is dead,/Life will still go on
somewhere." Like the dinosaurs, LisaMay
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No one thinks about the past a time when life was worth living. Now everyone looks and finds death. This are my favorite lines. "The earth cracks a grave smile,/amused by mere Man's vanity --/his monumental insignificance./When Death itself is dead,/Life will still go on
somewhere." Like the dinosaurs, LisaMay
Comment Written 31-Mar-2020
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the photo taken of a grace stone that mark the buried place of someone who once walked this earth. The grave is the one certainty we will all face sooner or later while others go on with their lives.
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A very well-written poem about the photo taken of a grace stone that mark the buried place of someone who once walked this earth. The grave is the one certainty we will all face sooner or later while others go on with their lives.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2020
Comment from lyenochka
Ran through my sixes too early since last night! Beautiful and philosophical poem. Loved the photo, too! My favorite lines were:
"The earth cracks a grave smile,
amused by mere Man's vanity --
his monumental insignificance."
I think this should do well in the contest!
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Ran through my sixes too early since last night! Beautiful and philosophical poem. Loved the photo, too! My favorite lines were:
"The earth cracks a grave smile,
amused by mere Man's vanity --
his monumental insignificance."
I think this should do well in the contest!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2020
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Thanks for your wonderful review and the boost - much appreciated. I wish we had more 6s to bestow. I think folks will be writing more at the moment, and there will be even more excellent poems for us to appreciate.
Comment from N.K. Wagner
LisaMay, you're lucky to have such a beautiful place for your restricted rambles. Your photo is well-supported by your unrhymed poem describing the transience of even the monuments to the dead. Well done. :) Nancy
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LisaMay, you're lucky to have such a beautiful place for your restricted rambles. Your photo is well-supported by your unrhymed poem describing the transience of even the monuments to the dead. Well done. :) Nancy
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a very nicely composed poem, Lisa. It's thoughtful and echoes what may be on the mind of those who've experienced an old graveyard, its reverence and its history. Your ending three lines are equally hopeful and desolate. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
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This is a very nicely composed poem, Lisa. It's thoughtful and echoes what may be on the mind of those who've experienced an old graveyard, its reverence and its history. Your ending three lines are equally hopeful and desolate. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Jam packed with marvelous imagery and alliteration. I love the chipped wings and rusted iron lace...daisied avenues....mottled marble mock... and the witty earth cracks a grave smile...that in itself earns your stars. Cheers. LIZ
Back with congrats on your well-deserved prize!
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Jam packed with marvelous imagery and alliteration. I love the chipped wings and rusted iron lace...daisied avenues....mottled marble mock... and the witty earth cracks a grave smile...that in itself earns your stars. Cheers. LIZ
Back with congrats on your well-deserved prize!
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Lisa!
An exceptionally well-executed poem that resonates with me deeply for I lived my entire childhood across the road a cemetery that was well over 200 years. Many of the tombstones were broken, but I spent countless hours there reading, visiting, writing... I can well appreciate why you would have been drawn there.
Hoping you are well and safe!
diane
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Hello Lisa!
An exceptionally well-executed poem that resonates with me deeply for I lived my entire childhood across the road a cemetery that was well over 200 years. Many of the tombstones were broken, but I spent countless hours there reading, visiting, writing... I can well appreciate why you would have been drawn there.
Hoping you are well and safe!
diane
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
Comment from Louise Michelle
Well, your opportunity to get some fresh air and exercise certainly did you good in more ways than one. This is a terrific poem, very descriptive, very artistic. A very enjoyable read - well done. Hugs, Lou
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Well, your opportunity to get some fresh air and exercise certainly did you good in more ways than one. This is a terrific poem, very descriptive, very artistic. A very enjoyable read - well done. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for allowing us to walk with you in a safe place. I appreciate your sharing the photo and your keen descriptions. I admired your free verse and wordplay in "earth cracks a grave smile". Best wishes in the competition and be well- Joan
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Thank you for allowing us to walk with you in a safe place. I appreciate your sharing the photo and your keen descriptions. I admired your free verse and wordplay in "earth cracks a grave smile". Best wishes in the competition and be well- Joan
Comment Written 29-Mar-2020
