Drowning
Twenty Syllables18 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Love should always be tender but passionate. If this is a relationship they are lucky.
Congratulations on getting an honorable mention in the contest, Melissa.
Keep writing.
Joan
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Love should always be tender but passionate. If this is a relationship they are lucky.
Congratulations on getting an honorable mention in the contest, Melissa.
Keep writing.
Joan
Comment Written 27-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much Joan!! I appreciate your well wishes. :)
Melissa
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My pleasure. Melissa.
Joan
Comment from Therese Caron
Lovely, romantic valentine poem. The picture is stunning and the words are the type that make your heart melt. This a perfect entry for Valentine's Day!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Lovely, romantic valentine poem. The picture is stunning and the words are the type that make your heart melt. This a perfect entry for Valentine's Day!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thank you Terry. I am so glad you enjoyed this romantic poem. :)
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
There are no words to speak when the soul sees the language of love caressing the heart.
Twenty from your twenty, Melissa. :) This is a good Valentine poem. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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There are no words to speak when the soul sees the language of love caressing the heart.
Twenty from your twenty, Melissa. :) This is a good Valentine poem. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much. It is hard to stay restricted to twenty syllables. A real challenge. :)
Melissa
Comment from royowen
What a good use of the twenty syllables Melissa. You've done a great job with this, the artwork you chose fits like a glove, and being a great writer your words fit beautifully, well done, good luck, Blessings Roy,
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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What a good use of the twenty syllables Melissa. You've done a great job with this, the artwork you chose fits like a glove, and being a great writer your words fit beautifully, well done, good luck, Blessings Roy,
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much Roy. I really appreciate your encouragement. It is hard to write with so few syllables, but I wanted to try. :)
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from juliaSjames
I admire your writing this from a man's POV. An excellent description of the overwhelming feeling of falling in love. Such intensity, and usually the prelude to a kiss.
The artwork is a perfect match for this tender Valentine write of new love.
Best wishes for the contest.
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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I admire your writing this from a man's POV. An excellent description of the overwhelming feeling of falling in love. Such intensity, and usually the prelude to a kiss.
The artwork is a perfect match for this tender Valentine write of new love.
Best wishes for the contest.
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hi Julia. Thank you. I really appreciate this encouragement!!
Melissa
Comment from Mistydawn
What a sweet thought. So warm, heartfelt. It'd be a wonderful line in a love story. A nice start to a romantic scene. Your great word choice paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. Your artwork is perfect for the poem.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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What a sweet thought. So warm, heartfelt. It'd be a wonderful line in a love story. A nice start to a romantic scene. Your great word choice paints a vivid picture in the reader's mind. Your artwork is perfect for the poem.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you very much Misty. Its hard to say everything in just 20 syllables, but I gave it a try... ha!! Have lovely day.
Melissa
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hello Melissa, a very tender and truly romantic twenty syllables and a perfect entry for the contest. Lovely picture which reflects the tenderness of your words. Good use of metaphor regarding drowning. Good Luck - regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hello Melissa, a very tender and truly romantic twenty syllables and a perfect entry for the contest. Lovely picture which reflects the tenderness of your words. Good use of metaphor regarding drowning. Good Luck - regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hello Dorothy. I appreciate your words on this 20 syllable verse. Its tough trying to come up with a succinct and valid verse with this constraint. Thank you.
Melissa
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written twenty syllable poem about lovers drowning in the eyes of a lover when they are getting close to see the tender pools of love.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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A very well-written twenty syllable poem about lovers drowning in the eyes of a lover when they are getting close to see the tender pools of love.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hi Sandra... thanks so much my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
My dog looks at me like that. We get on well together too. Drowning in tenderness is an interesting concept. Clearly this guy is a completely lost cause. I often think this snippets of yours should be filedf away for use in longer poems at a later date.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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My dog looks at me like that. We get on well together too. Drowning in tenderness is an interesting concept. Clearly this guy is a completely lost cause. I often think this snippets of yours should be filedf away for use in longer poems at a later date.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thanks so much Jim for your view on this short 20 syllable poem. It is hard to say a lot, but I try anyway. I was toying with the idea of writing a romantic verse and including this concept, or line. I appreciate your insight on this!
Melissa
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I found this extremely tender and caring by the couple in their relationship. Very appropriate for the Valentine's day contest. I hope it will be well received by the judging panel.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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I found this extremely tender and caring by the couple in their relationship. Very appropriate for the Valentine's day contest. I hope it will be well received by the judging panel.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Hello Katherine. I am so delighted you liked this short 20 syllable verse. It is a challenge to stay succinct and conform to these constraints. Thanks so much.
Melissa