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The Inquisitor

Loyalty to the crown

7 total reviews 
Comment from BeasPeas
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Scary stuff, Kace. Thank goodness that Peter the Large showed up to save him. Well written and you've described things that make your reader cringe. Best of luck in the contest. Marilyn

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 24-Sep-2019
    Hello Mrs Birdie! Thanks for reading; not my genre, thought I would give it a try. You could hide under the bird house? Hee, Hee. Love, K.
Comment from JLR
Excellent
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Writer your execution of pulling your character and plot through the ages is very solid. The imagery and the dialogue place the reader into the historical events of the past. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    JLR, Thanks so much for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed. Cheers, K.
Comment from robyn corum
Excellent
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Aussie,

Well, this is one of the more horrific posts I have ever read here on FanStory. Nice work. I definitely think you need to add a flag for violence, please.

The writing was well done and graphic as all get-out. I'm confused why you categorized this as a 'script', though. It should do well in the voting. Well done. Good luck!

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Thanks so much Robyn. I didn't think it was as horrific as they asked us to write! It's not my genre. Blessings, K.
Comment from Sugarray77
Excellent
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This is a very vivid write about torture... ugh. I think your handling of the story was very well done and kept this reader on the edge of the seat. Good luck in this contest!!

Melissa

 Comment Written 23-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
    Hi Melissa, Thanks so much for reading. Not my genre. Still, thought I would have a go. Blessings, K.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Excellent
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully as you deliver a complete and compelling story within the word count restrictions. I thought the topic an interesting choice for Horror, but the content leads the reader cleanly in that direction. Good luck in the judging and thank you vey much for sharing it.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
    Thank you Elaine? Hope that's right? I'm not a horror writer, just the opposite. Thought I would give it a go. Love, Kay.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
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very interesting. I'm glad the giant came to rescue Peter and not to make things worse. Is this the beginning of something longer? Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
    Hi Darlene, No, it's just a script for the contest. Thanks for reading. Horror ain't my thing. Bless you, Kay.
Comment from tfawcus
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

You've certainly managed to bring the horrors of medieval torture out in a most graphic way! I thought poor Thomas was finished for sure! It'll take a good healer to put him back together.
Just one suggestion for the contest, and that's to capitalise The Crow towards the end.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2019


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2019
    Hello Tony, Thank you for reading, you obviously enjoyed. Thanks for the six shiny stars! Blessings, Kay.