Deception
A husband's will38 total reviews
Comment from Alchera
Well penned throughout its dialogued narrative storyline and brilliant is the ending surprise of the read will the day after.Great job! I have no six left. Blessings from Italy
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Well penned throughout its dialogued narrative storyline and brilliant is the ending surprise of the read will the day after.Great job! I have no six left. Blessings from Italy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2019
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2019
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Thank you, Alchera, for the excellent review my friend.
God bless From Texas.
Steve
Comment from dragonpoet
Well here acting at the funeral probably wasn't believed if she was what her husband called her in the will for people probably knew what she was . It sounds like she may have married for the money. Foregiveness showed that in a way he still loved her. She didn't deserve the money she married for.
Congrats on tieing for third place.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Well here acting at the funeral probably wasn't believed if she was what her husband called her in the will for people probably knew what she was . It sounds like she may have married for the money. Foregiveness showed that in a way he still loved her. She didn't deserve the money she married for.
Congrats on tieing for third place.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 25-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Joan. I enjoyed the challenge.
God bless
Steve
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My pleasure, Steve. Have a great weekend.
Joaon
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is dramatic and funny and ironic all at the same time! Pete and Abbey's reactions would have been entertaining, if you ever feel like expanding this for another time. Nice job on a short-short that does not bore, not even for a second.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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This is dramatic and funny and ironic all at the same time! Pete and Abbey's reactions would have been entertaining, if you ever feel like expanding this for another time. Nice job on a short-short that does not bore, not even for a second.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Wow! Thank you for the awesome review. Wasn't expecting anymore after the promotion dropped. I may have to dig into this one a little further.
God bless
Steve
Comment from john mallahan
Yah, the world we live in--isn't it? Have watched many true crime docs, as well as numerous court battles. Smacks a the same thing, doesn't it? Greed, corruption, all out. People want what they deserve. But why does that have to come at the cost of the deceased?
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Yah, the world we live in--isn't it? Have watched many true crime docs, as well as numerous court battles. Smacks a the same thing, doesn't it? Greed, corruption, all out. People want what they deserve. But why does that have to come at the cost of the deceased?
Comment Written 24-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2019
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Right! I watched ID channel before but had to stop. Felt like I couldn't trust anyone lol.
Thank you for the great review.
God bless
Steve
Comment from barkingdog
Congratulations, Steve, for winning recognition on this excellent contest entry. I especially loved the reading of the will. I think he was very generous granting her forgiveness. haha
;) ellen
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Congratulations, Steve, for winning recognition on this excellent contest entry. I especially loved the reading of the will. I think he was very generous granting her forgiveness. haha
;) ellen
Comment Written 22-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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LOL! Thank you, Ellen. I enjoyed this one.
Comment from shaffer40
I'm reading this too late for the vote, but I just love it. A delightful husband-wife mystery and surprise ending. The story is well-written, too. I have not given you a six only because I have none left.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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I'm reading this too late for the vote, but I just love it. A delightful husband-wife mystery and surprise ending. The story is well-written, too. I have not given you a six only because I have none left.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2019
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Thank you for this most excellent review, my friend.
God bless
Steve
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You're welcome for sure.
Comment from robyn corum
Steve-
What a perfect ending for a fabulous story. If he'd left her NOTHING, it would have been an average story with an average ending - the kind of story we're used to around here, actually. (shhhh....) --wink--
But with this particular, tidy, small, little adjustment - you moved this story to a whole new level. Amazing. So smart and so well done. I imagine this story should do well with the judges -- so that means, unfortunately, you'll probably end up on the cutting floor. --sigh--
Anything I LOVE... they hate. So, I'm very, very, VERY sorry that I like this, Steve - it probably spells the death of your chances with the CEC. So SORRY.
But I'll wish you luck anyway. Go get 'em!!!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Steve-
What a perfect ending for a fabulous story. If he'd left her NOTHING, it would have been an average story with an average ending - the kind of story we're used to around here, actually. (shhhh....) --wink--
But with this particular, tidy, small, little adjustment - you moved this story to a whole new level. Amazing. So smart and so well done. I imagine this story should do well with the judges -- so that means, unfortunately, you'll probably end up on the cutting floor. --sigh--
Anything I LOVE... they hate. So, I'm very, very, VERY sorry that I like this, Steve - it probably spells the death of your chances with the CEC. So SORRY.
But I'll wish you luck anyway. Go get 'em!!!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2019
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Lol, thank you for this beautiful six-star review, Robyn. I generally don't enter these contests, I stick to the ones that go to vote. If I win it would be validation that I've improved over the years.
I have enjoyed the many sixes this piece has offered up. Also, I have a novel in editing now with a traditional publication press. They've accepted it and want a series of three. This is exciting, but still, have revisions to make. Probably publish after the year ends.
I have learned so much from folks such as yourself and my dear friend Dean Kuch. I will miss that man dearly.
Thank you
God bless
Steve
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HUZZAH! Congrats, Steve. I know you're over the moon. I'm thrilled for you! Wish Dean was here to see it... --sniff--
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Me too!
Comment from Louise Michelle
Oh, wow, this is fantastic! I enjoy reading flash fiction, especially when every word is chosen carefully. The ending surprised me (which I like) and what's more, this story held a wonderful message. Hugs, Lou
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Oh, wow, this is fantastic! I enjoy reading flash fiction, especially when every word is chosen carefully. The ending surprised me (which I like) and what's more, this story held a wonderful message. Hugs, Lou
Comment Written 19-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2019
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Thank you Lou for the awesome review. I had fun with the challenge this one presented.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Lulube
lol, she got what she deserved eh? not what she wanted. great twist for the ending. in 80 words you told the whole story of what has been happening in their lives, and karma has struck.
lulube
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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lol, she got what she deserved eh? not what she wanted. great twist for the ending. in 80 words you told the whole story of what has been happening in their lives, and karma has struck.
lulube
Comment Written 18-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Lulube, for the awesome review, my friend. I enjoyed this little prompt.
God bless
Steve
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welcome
lulube
Comment from Mastery
Great entry Steve. Sorry I am late reading this one., my friend. It appears to have the correct word count an dit is very clever writing. Good luck in the contest. : ) Bob
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Great entry Steve. Sorry I am late reading this one., my friend. It appears to have the correct word count an dit is very clever writing. Good luck in the contest. : ) Bob
Comment Written 16-Sep-2019
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2019
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Thank you, Bob, for the excellent review, my friend. I enjoyed the challenge.
God bless
Steve
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: ) Bob
