Not Today, World!
Jesus won the battle.22 total reviews
Comment from Coco Jane
What an uplifting poem!
In stanza 2, "all the worries, Lord, you take them from my mind" seems chewy. Maybe use "You take from my mind" for a smoother line.
In stanza 3, the period after "me" should be removed.
I like the "not today, world" idea a lot!
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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What an uplifting poem!
In stanza 2, "all the worries, Lord, you take them from my mind" seems chewy. Maybe use "You take from my mind" for a smoother line.
In stanza 3, the period after "me" should be removed.
I like the "not today, world" idea a lot!
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Thank you. You may be right. I will take a look at it. Thank you for taking the time to review and give your input. I'm glad you liked it! We need all the help in this world we can get, right?
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is a lovely, exuberant spiritual poem/song that praises the
Lord, conveying the precious truth about who HAS us--Him, not
the world. Well, that's how it should be. Sometimes we do slip and cater to the world.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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This is a lovely, exuberant spiritual poem/song that praises the
Lord, conveying the precious truth about who HAS us--Him, not
the world. Well, that's how it should be. Sometimes we do slip and cater to the world.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Thank you! Truer words were never spoken. The world doesn't have us...unless we let it! Exactly my thoughts in the song! Thanks for your input and opinion!
Comment from misscookie
I love the are work you chose to g with your poem
It is a perfect match
to me it says you are a free soul.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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I love the are work you chose to g with your poem
It is a perfect match
to me it says you are a free soul.
You captured my attention from the first line to the last.
Thank you for sharing
Cookie
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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It's me that should be thanking you, Miss Cookie! Thank you so much for reading and Reid be waiting my poem. I like the term you used Free Soul so much. You or I should use that in a poem. It's a beautiful pair of words!
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We are both bless to be able to express our self freely
Take car
Cookie
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Yes, for sure we are blessed with that right!
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Right on my sister in Christ
Cookie
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You make me smile:) See?
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I had to think what sign meant .... Than I got it
Cookie
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oh, haha!
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Until next time.
Cookie
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Until next time:)
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I had a rough day, again Jesus brought me through.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Tina: thanks for sharing your new song of praise to Jesus.
It's fun when we hear words that make us look up and move
with joy. Keep writing. I pray that you are in health. Enjoy
your precious family. flylikeaneagle ***************
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Tina: thanks for sharing your new song of praise to Jesus.
It's fun when we hear words that make us look up and move
with joy. Keep writing. I pray that you are in health. Enjoy
your precious family. flylikeaneagle ***************
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for this nice review! I appreciate it so much I am in good health. Thank you for the reminder to enjoy my family :-) hope you have a great day!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your song poem, Tina. The picture is a nice pairing with your words. Those words flow smoothly with a great message. Your words create great imagery and empathy . Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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I enjoyed your song poem, Tina. The picture is a nice pairing with your words. Those words flow smoothly with a great message. Your words create great imagery and empathy . Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thank you , friend:) Yes...I was just admitting my weakness in the battle here sometimes. I appreciate the review and thoughts!
Comment from mancub
You have a nicely written heart felt poem, the story you tell is Of deep and spiritual, your descriptive words add good imagery in the readers mind and brings this to life with a strong feel, The Lord is with him as with us all and you share the embracing The Lords Great Love throughout this, your poem is creative and warm, fear sadness, confidence with prayer very uplifting messages you share here. I am sure many will enjoy this, Thank you for sharing, Mancub
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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You have a nicely written heart felt poem, the story you tell is Of deep and spiritual, your descriptive words add good imagery in the readers mind and brings this to life with a strong feel, The Lord is with him as with us all and you share the embracing The Lords Great Love throughout this, your poem is creative and warm, fear sadness, confidence with prayer very uplifting messages you share here. I am sure many will enjoy this, Thank you for sharing, Mancub
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Well thank you for the review and it is so detailed and I really appreciate your input! I seem to write more spiritual poems than anything, but I guess I need to Branch out :-)
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Well thank you for the review and it is so detailed and I really appreciate your input! I seem to write more spiritual poems than anything, but I guess I need to Branch out :-)
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your welcome Tina, there are many forms of spirituality, love, nature, family, let your wonderful and creative mind flow, you do beautiful work, remember, Believe in yourself always, Mancub
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Thank you so much! I
will keep that in mind:)
Comment from Ross E Silke
This is wonderful! Brings tears to my eyes just reading it through. It held my attention and is captivating. Beautiful!! That's right--the world cannot win over the soul no matter what, Jesus is in control. Amen to this, sister! Wonderful song and poem! Very enjoyable and touched me in many ways. I've been a bit depressed today and this really cheered me--God led me to it. It has the power to heal and give much hope! Exceptional!
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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This is wonderful! Brings tears to my eyes just reading it through. It held my attention and is captivating. Beautiful!! That's right--the world cannot win over the soul no matter what, Jesus is in control. Amen to this, sister! Wonderful song and poem! Very enjoyable and touched me in many ways. I've been a bit depressed today and this really cheered me--God led me to it. It has the power to heal and give much hope! Exceptional!
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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I just might have to print this out and put it up on my wall in my office! It is so encouraging, especially the part that God LED you to it. He's so good to us isn't he? I'm so glad it helped you and that you enjoyed it! Thank you for being so open and telling me how you felt about it and not just given the standard review!m
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I just might have to print this out and put it up on my wall in my office! It is so encouraging, especially the part that God LED you to it. He's so good to us isn't he? I'm so glad it helped you and that you enjoyed it! Thank you for being so open and telling me how you felt about it and not just given the standard review!m
Comment from Blue Hendrix
Beautiful piece I thought you did a wonderful job. Imagery and flow were excellent. Word choice and subject were also good.i really enjoyed reading your poem today.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Beautiful piece I thought you did a wonderful job. Imagery and flow were excellent. Word choice and subject were also good.i really enjoyed reading your poem today.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Have a great sunny day!
Comment from Heather Knight
Lovely song, it would make a great church hymn. I like the repeated line: so not today, world.
I'm glad this has a positive message.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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Lovely song, it would make a great church hymn. I like the repeated line: so not today, world.
I'm glad this has a positive message.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2019
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You are welccome, and thanks for the review! I have a tune to it, which I may post sometime:)
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That would be great.
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I appreciate the encouragement!
Comment from Earl Corp
Id be interested to read and here the final version when youre done. If you're able to set lyrics to a tune yourself that is a talent I admire. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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Id be interested to read and here the final version when youre done. If you're able to set lyrics to a tune yourself that is a talent I admire. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2019
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I already have a tune in my head as I sing this around the house, but I've never written it down. I may do that though as several people said they wanted to sing it. Thank you for the nice review and ...you will never hear me sing, lol, but I could get someone else to record the music for me. We will see...
