Spoon Shadow
Tea for one57 total reviews
Comment from Wabigoon
Lordinajamjar--
I think I would have sixed the Cat Stevens imitation or take off, but not quite this short poem. It seems to be about grief, or missing someone that was there or you not being there for someone. There's an ache to it which you evoke well, wish I understood it better.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Lordinajamjar--
I think I would have sixed the Cat Stevens imitation or take off, but not quite this short poem. It seems to be about grief, or missing someone that was there or you not being there for someone. There's an ache to it which you evoke well, wish I understood it better.
Best
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Thank you Wabi. This poem is about regret. I can understand how some readers can detect an underlying grief or loss. The regret I was evoking refers to a sense the listener is experiencing. A regret that they caused hurt to the teamaker who would normally pour two cups of tea not one.
I appreciate your words.
Thank you
Comment from I. Lee
Very entertaining and an enjoyable read! Thank you for sharing how a drinking a cup of tea for one can be lonely, considering you have a wife. Hahaha!!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Very entertaining and an enjoyable read! Thank you for sharing how a drinking a cup of tea for one can be lonely, considering you have a wife. Hahaha!!
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you. I am so glad you enjoyed it.
I appreciated your review.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
An excellent example how a "mundane" topic can make attractive poetry. The humour is subtle but that gives this 5-7-5 even more reason to be read.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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An excellent example how a "mundane" topic can make attractive poetry. The humour is subtle but that gives this 5-7-5 even more reason to be read.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you Donka for your great comments.
I really appreciate them.
John
Comment from Hayley Zemontas
A very poignant little 5-7-5 and one I wholeheartedly agree with- that IS one of the loneliest sounds. I am a tea lover and wouldn't be happy if someone was making a cup of tea and hadn't offered me one! Nice little picture to accompany your words as well. X
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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A very poignant little 5-7-5 and one I wholeheartedly agree with- that IS one of the loneliest sounds. I am a tea lover and wouldn't be happy if someone was making a cup of tea and hadn't offered me one! Nice little picture to accompany your words as well. X
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thanks Hayley, fellow tea lover. ;)
I am so appreciative of your comments. I got lucky finding that littke gem of a picture.
Thanks again.
John
Comment from Rickie1
John
After my first read I didn't much of this poem. After the reread I was hit with the sadness of your words. It snuck up on me. It's tough to have impact with so few words. Well done.
Rickie
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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John
After my first read I didn't much of this poem. After the reread I was hit with the sadness of your words. It snuck up on me. It's tough to have impact with so few words. Well done.
Rickie
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Wow thanks Rickie for the six stars. I am so glad you reread it. :)
I really appreciate your review and words of encouragement.
Thank you
John
Comment from rjuselius
haha. this is an interesting piece of poetry dear lordinajamjar! I am not sure if you meant it to be funny but I can understand the serious side.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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haha. this is an interesting piece of poetry dear lordinajamjar! I am not sure if you meant it to be funny but I can understand the serious side.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Why thank you Rebekka. I really do appreciate your kind words and the squeeze was a nice little bonus. LOL
All the best.
John
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I like this very much! Very lovely and lonely all at the same time. Is your wife angry at you? I wonder! It is creative in that it leaves so much to wonder about and I love that in particular about poetry. Your author notes are excellent. Thank you for providing them and the picture is lovely to accompany! Great job!
Wendy
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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I like this very much! Very lovely and lonely all at the same time. Is your wife angry at you? I wonder! It is creative in that it leaves so much to wonder about and I love that in particular about poetry. Your author notes are excellent. Thank you for providing them and the picture is lovely to accompany! Great job!
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thanks so much Wendy. All is well with the wife thanks. LOL. It was my turn to make tea. ;)
I appreciate your wonderful review.
Best
John
Comment from Hareem.S
This is truly a heart breaking poem. I don't understand why a wife wouldn't want to make tea for her husband. It's sad. You have beautifully conveyed sadness and pain here in a nice manner.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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This is truly a heart breaking poem. I don't understand why a wife wouldn't want to make tea for her husband. It's sad. You have beautifully conveyed sadness and pain here in a nice manner.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you so very much for the six stars Hareem. I rely do appreciate your generous award.
I am so happy that you enjoyed this.
All the best
John
Comment from Dean Kuch
Hello, John, and welcome to FanStory.
We're glad to have you here.
Now, about your 5-7-5...
I used to lie in bed when I was a young lad working on my Grandmother's and Grandfather's farm during the wee hours of the morning before chores and listen to Grandma make breakfast.
Although there were 15 people in that farmhouse including me and my two younger brothers, she was always up first preparing breakfast for everyone to help get them through the day. And despite the number of people in the home I always thought the sounds of her doing so seemed so lonely. The clinking of the dishes, her humming her favorite hymnal, in that kitchen day after day, all alone.
So, I get where you're coming from.
Well penned.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Hello, John, and welcome to FanStory.
We're glad to have you here.
Now, about your 5-7-5...
I used to lie in bed when I was a young lad working on my Grandmother's and Grandfather's farm during the wee hours of the morning before chores and listen to Grandma make breakfast.
Although there were 15 people in that farmhouse including me and my two younger brothers, she was always up first preparing breakfast for everyone to help get them through the day. And despite the number of people in the home I always thought the sounds of her doing so seemed so lonely. The clinking of the dishes, her humming her favorite hymnal, in that kitchen day after day, all alone.
So, I get where you're coming from.
Well penned.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you Dean. What a wondeful warm personal memory you shared with me. I am so glad you told me. Just good to know something I write can recall happy memories for the reader. It just encourages me to keep on writing.
All the best
John
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All the best to you as well, John.
~Dean
Comment from GWinterwin
This is a good poem to establish the feeling one might have if being left all alone. Nothing more sad than the sound of one where there was more or many before.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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This is a good poem to establish the feeling one might have if being left all alone. Nothing more sad than the sound of one where there was more or many before.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2019
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Thank you Winter. Yes you really got the sentiment I wanted to convey in this little piece.
Much appreciated.
John