Act of Endurance
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Comment from DonandVicki
That's about the jest of it, each atom is part of a bigger universe, you poetically described the mechanics of the food chain and process. Well composed.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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That's about the jest of it, each atom is part of a bigger universe, you poetically described the mechanics of the food chain and process. Well composed.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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I'm glad certain aspects pertained to this work were found appleasing to your interests. Thanking you for your kind words and generous rate.
Comment from HarryT
The author seems enamored with the process of farting. He physically described the process of the emitting of the rather unpleasant gas. I like the idea the process is one of better physical health. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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The author seems enamored with the process of farting. He physically described the process of the emitting of the rather unpleasant gas. I like the idea the process is one of better physical health. Good job.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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Well for some reason the fart captures people attention. It does have its own voice: so to speak. Whether offensive or humorous this body function exists. Our body does retain gases, which inflates our internal areas: too much accumulation detrimental to our system proper functioning. Thanking you for all you have given. Have a super day: without farting.
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I don't know isn't farting good for your health? Maybe a good way to keep other unpleasant people away. So farting does have benefits.
Comment from Ice Traigh
These writings make me feel that I'm missing some key detail that, once revealed, would make all of this make more sense. Are these observations from an extraterrestrial being? Is it a shattered mind that can only communicate in broken images? Is English not your main language, or are you so fluent in it that you've gone fully avantgarde with it just for fun? I don't know. It's just weird.
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reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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These writings make me feel that I'm missing some key detail that, once revealed, would make all of this make more sense. Are these observations from an extraterrestrial being? Is it a shattered mind that can only communicate in broken images? Is English not your main language, or are you so fluent in it that you've gone fully avantgarde with it just for fun? I don't know. It's just weird.
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Could be a little bit of all these acclaimed, suffering in my presentation obviously. Just, my hard attempted efforts to express thoughts properly. Apparently, I failed again. Thanking you for this generous rate, despite those flaws.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi TPAC
This free verse tell us of how the body works to eat and digest food that we prepare. From mouth, to throat to stomach and beyond. It also reminds us to eat in moderation.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Hi TPAC
This free verse tell us of how the body works to eat and digest food that we prepare. From mouth, to throat to stomach and beyond. It also reminds us to eat in moderation.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2024
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Glad aspects in this particular read were appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your assuring words of encouragement:,plus your generous rate.
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You are most kindly welcome TPAC.
Joan
P S I have just published a book titled "The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry" by Joan Pechter which is available on Amazon.com.
Comment from Wy Jung
This made me laugh as you don't read poetry about the body's inner workings every day. ..but I wish you did!
The usage of words in the beginning comparing food going down the hatch like bodies down a water slide was clever.
I'd like to see it formatted a little differently so that the rhythm of the poem is easier to follow and the words used have the space they need to be fully digested (....pun intended....)
Keep it up!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This made me laugh as you don't read poetry about the body's inner workings every day. ..but I wish you did!
The usage of words in the beginning comparing food going down the hatch like bodies down a water slide was clever.
I'd like to see it formatted a little differently so that the rhythm of the poem is easier to follow and the words used have the space they need to be fully digested (....pun intended....)
Keep it up!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thanks for this shout, considering your statements, welcoming comments assistance.
Comment from Wendyanne
Well you have certainly described the act of eating and digesting food very graphically. It is certainly very different. I'm not really too sure what I think about it to be honest!
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Well you have certainly described the act of eating and digesting food very graphically. It is certainly very different. I'm not really too sure what I think about it to be honest!
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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I feel you. I aimed this intent at better health: by wiser picks we digest.I miss that goal apparently. Thanking you for this generous rate despite faults.
Comment from Daylily
It is said that we are what we eat. It is the responsibility of people to take care of their bodies in order to maximum their engagement in the upside aspects of human living. Good health in a positive world is a noteworthy ideal.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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It is said that we are what we eat. It is the responsibility of people to take care of their bodies in order to maximum their engagement in the upside aspects of human living. Good health in a positive world is a noteworthy ideal.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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I'm glad certain aspects were found appealing to your interests: thanking you for your input and generous rate.
Comment from royowen
I think we tend to treat the human body like a rubbish dump sometimes, the act of poor eating can put a number of stresses on the human but, but I guess we'll pay the price somewhere, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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I think we tend to treat the human body like a rubbish dump sometimes, the act of poor eating can put a number of stresses on the human but, but I guess we'll pay the price somewhere, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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The body, indeed, is the human second greatest challenge, given the daily exchanges throughput our life course: certainly it takes a banging. Thanking you for your generous rate.
Comment from harmony13
I found the author's words deep, educating, thought provoking and
creative. I agree with the author we must learn to control what we are
eating! I also found the read of this poem very interesting. The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork goes will with this poem.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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I found the author's words deep, educating, thought provoking and
creative. I agree with the author we must learn to control what we are
eating! I also found the read of this poem very interesting. The poem
flows and connects well. The artwork goes will with this poem.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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I normally struggle, detailing factors to my reader, finding your notes comforting, feeling at least I'm on the right track. Thanking you for your review, illustrating a connection: and this generous rate.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent non fiction story chapter. I enjoyed reading it. Your entire presentation is good. You use descriptive words that draw in a reader. Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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This is an excellent non fiction story chapter. I enjoyed reading it. Your entire presentation is good. You use descriptive words that draw in a reader. Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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Thanking you for this warm statement, taking it as an approval, prevailing those given statements. Also, for that generous rate.