Act of Endurance
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Comment from lyenochka
I'm wondering if you put this through a translation program? It seems to be lacking proper verb conjugations. However, I did like this line:
"I still do trust in a pure law blooming rightness, filled pleasures hoped to aid sure life, release where I go its cure laid actions at hate throats." Although I'd probably expect "hate's throats."
My guess is that this poem is about the inadequacy of human justice but God's "pure law" is trustworthy.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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I'm wondering if you put this through a translation program? It seems to be lacking proper verb conjugations. However, I did like this line:
"I still do trust in a pure law blooming rightness, filled pleasures hoped to aid sure life, release where I go its cure laid actions at hate throats." Although I'd probably expect "hate's throats."
My guess is that this poem is about the inadequacy of human justice but God's "pure law" is trustworthy.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2020
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You found the point, obtaining its proper conveyance becomes my task, thanking you for the shout and generous rate despite flaws.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was a creative and interesting poem. I love the emotion that pours from the poem. You can feel the injustice and anger over it very clearly. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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I thought this was a creative and interesting poem. I love the emotion that pours from the poem. You can feel the injustice and anger over it very clearly. Well done.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2020
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Glad certain aspects in this particular write were found appealing to your interests, thanking you for your generous rate and touching views.
Comment from skyer111
I have read your poem and I must say a lot to take in I can see the injustice you seem to speak off and hoping and praying the jury will come to the right decision that's what I take from this poem well done
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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I have read your poem and I must say a lot to take in I can see the injustice you seem to speak off and hoping and praying the jury will come to the right decision that's what I take from this poem well done
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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The emotions felt were indicated in this write pleased certain aspects in this work were appealing to your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments.
Comment from January L'Angelle
I liked your style of writing. I have not read any of the other chapters in your: "The Art of Endurance" I'm sure that things might have been a bit clearer for me if I had. I did enjoy the free flow of the writing. -January L.
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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I liked your style of writing. I have not read any of the other chapters in your: "The Art of Endurance" I'm sure that things might have been a bit clearer for me if I had. I did enjoy the free flow of the writing. -January L.
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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No I' m fighting with proper wording delighting reviewers with ideals projected in my writes. Thanking you for your given statements and generous rate.
Comment from Marjon van Bruggen
I acknowledge the quality of this poem, but I find it so hard to read and understand. I started all over again, and a third time too, out loud this time, but still failed to apprehend fully.
My four stars are for the difficulty. The picture is good, the format is beautiful, and the whole text is without a doubt very much worthwhile, but I just couldn't get it in my head.
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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I acknowledge the quality of this poem, but I find it so hard to read and understand. I started all over again, and a third time too, out loud this time, but still failed to apprehend fully.
My four stars are for the difficulty. The picture is good, the format is beautiful, and the whole text is without a doubt very much worthwhile, but I just couldn't get it in my head.
Comment Written 04-May-2020
reply by the author on 06-May-2020
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I feel you most of my writes are under revisions. I'm slowly learning goal having more pits to disclose about my writes. Why I'm at FS. Thanking you for your generous rate dispute the pits. I loved your honest response.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Ricky1024
"Down on My Knee"
This was well-written and Rich in Theme and Imagery.
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It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
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This reminds me of a letter sent to me by a retiring Minister after I handed him this poem entitled....
"The Word of God"
And, the letter went something like this...
'Before I sleep, I get down on my bedroom floor.'
'And, place my slippers as far back as I can.'
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'This way, in the morning.'
'I have no choice.'
'But to get down on my two knees.'
'And, thank the Lord for all the gifts He has bestowed upon me.'
Denzal Washington.
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Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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"Down on My Knee"
This was well-written and Rich in Theme and Imagery.
...
It read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
...
This reminds me of a letter sent to me by a retiring Minister after I handed him this poem entitled....
"The Word of God"
And, the letter went something like this...
'Before I sleep, I get down on my bedroom floor.'
'And, place my slippers as far back as I can.'
...
'This way, in the morning.'
'I have no choice.'
'But to get down on my two knees.'
'And, thank the Lord for all the gifts He has bestowed upon me.'
Denzal Washington.
....
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Quite a response, trying harder ti improve my written aspects, appreciating warming thought of perhaps in the right direction. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed insights.
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Always a pleasure to see your work!
Doctor Ricky1024
Comment from jaydub99
This reminds me of some of the flow of conscious poems I have read. I get the feeling that it is a mass of emotion and scattered feelings that you put out there. It seems like it is meant to be frenetic and disjointed. I viewed it as a person who is grasping a new language and trying to communicate. Very interesting.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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This reminds me of some of the flow of conscious poems I have read. I get the feeling that it is a mass of emotion and scattered feelings that you put out there. It seems like it is meant to be frenetic and disjointed. I viewed it as a person who is grasping a new language and trying to communicate. Very interesting.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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You hit the nail on the head. I enjoy the stories myself, attempting improvements in revisions. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching statement.
Comment from Gideon300
It has been said that when charged by the law it is not there to help you but to condemn you. Therefore it is easy to become guilty under it's weight.
I like how you capture how justice has become abused by evil men, who do not seek truth, or rightness. And how easy it is for someone with no connections can fall prey. Nice writing.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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It has been said that when charged by the law it is not there to help you but to condemn you. Therefore it is easy to become guilty under it's weight.
I like how you capture how justice has become abused by evil men, who do not seek truth, or rightness. And how easy it is for someone with no connections can fall prey. Nice writing.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2020
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Absolute truth, give this person a cigar. So, I'm not all that incoherent. Once and awhile a strike. Cool. Thanking you for your generous rate and overwhelming viewpoint.
Comment from Mia Twysted
Down On My Knees says to me that we must acknowledge what has been and is wrong before we can clear it from the soul and the mind. It clouds us and if we let it will drag us down.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Down On My Knees says to me that we must acknowledge what has been and is wrong before we can clear it from the soul and the mind. It clouds us and if we let it will drag us down.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2020
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Absolute, defeating an unjust evil is a noble aim, fighting for right lessen fears for future generations. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comment.
Comment from JLR
Very full of emotion,
strong images through words
Very compatible graphic
My favorite verse: I believe in the pure of deeds sown righteous, release all a cure from an evil grasp at throats, add sure where I go to fill my hope pleasures. thanks fro sharing!
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Very full of emotion,
strong images through words
Very compatible graphic
My favorite verse: I believe in the pure of deeds sown righteous, release all a cure from an evil grasp at throats, add sure where I go to fill my hope pleasures. thanks fro sharing!
Comment Written 28-Jan-2020
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2020
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Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed comments about this particular read.