I Always Thought
Loop Poetry Contest Submission43 total reviews
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Adonna;
> How friends can be so close and when they are not the emptiness occurs where you need to speak to someone but there are no recipients to could ever understand, but your friend can.
>You made your poem's theme so strong and viable in which I really understood how precious a friend is.
> Congratulations on your placing and content and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alx
PS:About the recording and here's where I stand. Kathy is elected to have hip surgery on November 13th. My in-laws will be down here this Thursday up until November 12th. Cathy, Only convalescing for at least two weeks after she gets home on the 15th. So looks like sometime in the beginning of December, if you can wait that long bets will be like. By then I'll head if you even the sheet music I could round that up and send it to you. Tell me what you need and I'll send it to?
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Cheers, Adonna;
> How friends can be so close and when they are not the emptiness occurs where you need to speak to someone but there are no recipients to could ever understand, but your friend can.
>You made your poem's theme so strong and viable in which I really understood how precious a friend is.
> Congratulations on your placing and content and take care and have a good one my friend.
Alx
PS:About the recording and here's where I stand. Kathy is elected to have hip surgery on November 13th. My in-laws will be down here this Thursday up until November 12th. Cathy, Only convalescing for at least two weeks after she gets home on the 15th. So looks like sometime in the beginning of December, if you can wait that long bets will be like. By then I'll head if you even the sheet music I could round that up and send it to you. Tell me what you need and I'll send it to?
Comment Written 17-Oct-2018
Comment from dragonpoet
Sounds like a deep love but they put things off and then time ran out. If she believes that he is waiting for her, then she can still do the things they dreamed
about and he can watch her and tell her how proud he that she did them all when
they see each other again.
Congrats on placing in the contest
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
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Sounds like a deep love but they put things off and then time ran out. If she believes that he is waiting for her, then she can still do the things they dreamed
about and he can watch her and tell her how proud he that she did them all when
they see each other again.
Congrats on placing in the contest
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 30-Sep-2018
Comment from MissMerri
Congratulations Idamarty, on the second place finish of this lovely sentimental poem. It has a tenderness that tugs at the heartstrings and reminds the reader, make the most of each day, for the days are not limitless. I thought the looping was so creatively done, it was barely noticeable. This is the most difficult part of writing a loop poem, I think. Well done! I very much enjoyed your poem.
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Congratulations Idamarty, on the second place finish of this lovely sentimental poem. It has a tenderness that tugs at the heartstrings and reminds the reader, make the most of each day, for the days are not limitless. I thought the looping was so creatively done, it was barely noticeable. This is the most difficult part of writing a loop poem, I think. Well done! I very much enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2018
Comment from Shanbreen
I feel your pain. I've had many such experiences in my life and your poem does justice to the feelings we have to live with when a loved one passes away. You have observed all the requirements of the cloop poem. Well done.
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I feel your pain. I've had many such experiences in my life and your poem does justice to the feelings we have to live with when a loved one passes away. You have observed all the requirements of the cloop poem. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2018
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi it is heartbreak when we think of it. We were two and one is gone, not an easy position to be in..heartbreaking and lonely. Time and tide wait for no man they say and if is true. Do now what you need to do, the future will after itself. God bless.
Danny Jock
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Hi it is heartbreak when we think of it. We were two and one is gone, not an easy position to be in..heartbreaking and lonely. Time and tide wait for no man they say and if is true. Do now what you need to do, the future will after itself. God bless.
Danny Jock
Comment Written 24-Sep-2018
Comment from Pantygynt
You have an academic background similar to my own - the mature student thing, and the English qualification. It shows in your attention to the metre in this loop poem that fills the requirement as stated in the regulations. I like the way you have identified the occasional iambic lines distinguishing them, in syllable count, from the catalectic trochaic ones that tend to dominate loop poetry.
It is not a requirement of the loop form but I like to have the last line loop back to the opening line. I feel that unless this is done a loop is not created, just a chain. But as I say that is not a requirement of the contest.
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You have an academic background similar to my own - the mature student thing, and the English qualification. It shows in your attention to the metre in this loop poem that fills the requirement as stated in the regulations. I like the way you have identified the occasional iambic lines distinguishing them, in syllable count, from the catalectic trochaic ones that tend to dominate loop poetry.
It is not a requirement of the loop form but I like to have the last line loop back to the opening line. I feel that unless this is done a loop is not created, just a chain. But as I say that is not a requirement of the contest.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2018
Comment from TPAC
I feel the sentiments given in this write, captivating views compounded by desires. Yet why not that and more? Why so closed in being for eternity? Just my opinion about this effort.
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I feel the sentiments given in this write, captivating views compounded by desires. Yet why not that and more? Why so closed in being for eternity? Just my opinion about this effort.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2018
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Idamarty, a heartfelt loop poem. I can feel the yearning within.
Of special note:
Unaware that way back when,
When hope still lived with seeds we'd sown,
Sown with love by me and you,
You went home now I'm alone.
(I, this is so sad. I leave my tear on this page.)
Excellent photo choice. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
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Hello Idamarty, a heartfelt loop poem. I can feel the yearning within.
Of special note:
Unaware that way back when,
When hope still lived with seeds we'd sown,
Sown with love by me and you,
You went home now I'm alone.
(I, this is so sad. I leave my tear on this page.)
Excellent photo choice. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 24-Sep-2018
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"I Always Thought", is an exceptionally well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work is a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
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"I Always Thought", is an exceptionally well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work is a pleasure to both read and review. To me, this is definitely a six. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
Very nicely written loop poem, Ida. Each word works with wonderful cadence to draw in the second though.
A fine entry into the contest and I wish you much luck with the Committee. :)
Gloria
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Very nicely written loop poem, Ida. Each word works with wonderful cadence to draw in the second though.
A fine entry into the contest and I wish you much luck with the Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018