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I Birthed Him!

Embarrasing moment #928923 when meeting JFK's nephew.

20 total reviews 
Comment from tollyfaye
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I am intrigued by the ramblings in your head, and understand the struggles of using all the data an memory all of the time taking pictures. You write in a way that makes me feel like a friend. Some people will probably think it is too long. It might be, but I like the way it bops around.

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    I loved your review, Tollyfaye, you made me smile. Thank you so much for haning in for the longer read and your excellent rating. Much appreciated! Have a grand day!
Comment from Nika2016
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Absolutely hilarious....I love it.....My nephew met Maria Shriver at an Angel game and she gave Arnold's seat to him....He told her he was afraid Arnold would show up....
Great Story!

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 21-Sep-2016
    Thank you, Nika, for your wonderful review! Thise Shrivers seem to be everywhere! Someone else commented they ran into Maria and Arnold at a FL hotel. 😊 i appreciate your review of a longer read. Have a wonderful evening!
Comment from Marvin Calloway
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You are the tops with this kind of humorous writing. The parts that weren't funny were hilarious.
Someday your family will not be surprised at anything you say. I've reached that point already.
Marv

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 20-Sep-2016
    Haha, thank you, Marvin, for the great review and I hope that's not a bad thing for the fambam?? HAHA! Thanks for the high compliment and I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed the story. Good to hear from you, always. Take care!
Comment from Spitfire
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You certainly have a distinctive voice, but I am wondering why you didn't separate the shopping incident from the Shriver story and make two posts?

I document almost every event, moment, or "Oh look, a squirrel!"
LOL. the eternal child in you as well as the awkward "I birthed him" followed by a curtsy. The principal almost upstaged you, but you continued the comedy routine.

I see the point about changing the energy! You speak my language.

The audience loved it. Husband and daughter lack a sense of humor. My daughter would have reacted as such. My son would have been laughing all the way.
I just asked him on the phone yesterday (he always has me in stitches) "Why don't you give your sister some of your sense of humor?"
His response:
"I don't like her that much."
He's quick with a punch line. So glad I had that second baby. :-)

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Thank you, Shari, for the RR&R. I appreciate your input. You and your son are from my tribe :) The shopping incident was a way of documenting, if you will, my blurting problem. Things don't always come out right...it was just an example preceding my second blunder that sounded good inside my head, but...

    Another reviewer mentioned I went into too much detail about my son's and she was lost, so I'm going to have a hard look at the story tonight now that you are the second to mention a disconnect.

    I'm glad you had your second baby too...he must be one heck of a bright spot for you. Have a great evening!!
Comment from light
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I thoroughly enjoyed this humorous episode in your life. Your writing is so funny. You have certainly put your touch on this situation. Thanks for sharing.
Elaine

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Thank you, Elaine, for a wonderful review and comments. I appreciate you hanging in for a longer read. Have a great week! ☺
Comment from crybry67
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I think you and Brunhilda are both hilarious. I like your writing style, and I can certainly identify with having things not go over as intended! I'm gonna have to check out that Urban Dictionary!

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Thank you, crybry67, for your RR&R, and lovely comments. I very much appreciate you stopping by! Yes, Google Urban Dictionary...it wont disappoint! 😄
Comment from DR DIP
Exceptional
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I really love your compassion I love your rawness, I love your honesty You are also a great story teller there is laughs, cringeworthiness lol, embarrassment it has it all

thanks for sharing with us all

dip

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Thank you, DR DIP, for your wonderful review. I loved all the reasons you listed which helps me to stay engaged and dedicated to intentional writing. Something I've never done until joining FanStory last February. Thank you for that! I also very much appreciate the fabulous SIX rating. Have an awesome week!
Comment from Kelly2
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Mary, I had a hard time keeping my attention about what was going on, until we get to the part where you are in the room with everyone. Then it became the Mary I know. Maybe it's just sometimes you get stuck where you have to explain a lot of stuff to get the background going. This is always a difficult thing for me.

Here are the funniest parts I thought:

That's the extent of my six degrees of separation. Fast forward forty years and I was one person away from Camelot's RoseKennedy bush; the oval office, Martha's Vineyard, Jackie O, Arnold Schwarzenegger, and Macaroni the White House pony. The guy to my left probably rode Macaroni more than a few times around the White House Rose Garden.

as if trying to visually unsee the medical scene and stirrups I had conjured up with my selfie-intro. (selfie-intro is brilliant!)

My son's principal, a quick thinker, looked at me and said "So you're taking ALL the credit for Michael???" I nodded in the affirmative, and motioned toward my hubs who was standing stoic and staring straight ahead like a dead man. I added perkily, "With an assist by" as I gestured this time toward ole' dead-eyes, minus a curtsy.

causing my inside body temperature to drop forty degrees when the flow of forced air-conditioning wrapped my now menopausal birthing vessel

birth (Urban Dictionary)
1. The beginning of a very long death
2. When you are shot out of beaverville

Great ending!

Kelly

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2016
    Hi Kelly, thank you for your review and input on this one. Much appreciated. I understand what you are saying about the intro part, I just felt I needed to lead with an example of me being a serial 'blurter' and the store experience that happened on Friday was fresh in my mind, so I went with it. Sorry for the confusion. I felt the Camelot quote lent to the JFK presidency, as well as the state of my mind every now and lapsing...Thank you for the continued follow!
reply by Kelly2 on 19-Sep-2016
    I really liked the part about the DMV or whatever you call it there. That was really really funny, having been there in similar situations. The 2 year old screaming at full volume and the response by the clerk...hysterical. But when it comes to the facts about your son's job and the Shriver people, all that, for a couple of paragraphs it kind of lost my attention. I have been reviewing and typing all damn day, so maybe i was just tired. But when you have to explain something complicated, it bogs the writing down and the humor, and that is something I struggle with myself. You can't keep your voice going due to the explanations. Do you know what I mean?

    I hate to be critical, especially to you, who I admire so much. But that is the point of what we're doing here, right?

    You're still my girl. :)
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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LOL! Very entertaining. I think what you said was really funny and those stodgy elites should have laughed. I would have been laughing for sure. :)

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
    Thank you, Phyllis, for your excellent review and continued follow. Thank you for having my back, so to speak, in the conference room and on FanStory! Have a great week!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Exceptional
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Oh Brunhilda I just love her. Please dont lose her, she is so precious.
I loved this story and nothing less than a six.
No problems noted and an excellent piece

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2016


reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016
    Thank you, Barb, for your wonderful review and for the love of Brunhilda! She is a lovable crank, that isn't going anywhere, anytime soon! I loved your six stars as much as you love Bruni!! Have a great week!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2016