Lawn and Order
a tanka form8 total reviews
Comment from Teri7
This is a truly cute tanka poem you have penned. I love the wording you used and the art work was very cute and went well with this poem. Great job. Teri
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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This is a truly cute tanka poem you have penned. I love the wording you used and the art work was very cute and went well with this poem. Great job. Teri
Comment Written 12-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Teri, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
ha ha, I need these guys to pay a visit to my lawn. There is a constant battle with these miscreants for control of my lawn. They want to break up the uniformity of a green lawn. Their desire is to sprinkle dandelions and such throughout my grass and I say no. In fact I have had to shoot some of them down with the new sheriff "Weed killer".
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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ha ha, I need these guys to pay a visit to my lawn. There is a constant battle with these miscreants for control of my lawn. They want to break up the uniformity of a green lawn. Their desire is to sprinkle dandelions and such throughout my grass and I say no. In fact I have had to shoot some of them down with the new sheriff "Weed killer".
Comment Written 10-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Thank you, nomi, for the fun review. Bill
Comment from BermyBye50
Bill,
This is an excellent Tanka poem you have written. It flows well and has great humor. It made me smile as I read it. The art work matches the message perfectly.
Great write
Eugene
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Bill,
This is an excellent Tanka poem you have written. It flows well and has great humor. It made me smile as I read it. The art work matches the message perfectly.
Great write
Eugene
Comment Written 10-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Eugene, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Gloria ....
What a blast this is, Bill. A good take on Law and Order, or I fought the lawn and the lawn won.
Bad seeds and weeds should be afeered of the new florist in town.
This flows off the tongue like a charm.
Well, well done.
Gloria
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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What a blast this is, Bill. A good take on Law and Order, or I fought the lawn and the lawn won.
Bad seeds and weeds should be afeered of the new florist in town.
This flows off the tongue like a charm.
Well, well done.
Gloria
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Gloria, for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from frogbook
Great play on words my friend lol. A short amount of writing long on humor. Another day brightener for your appreciative readers.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Great play on words my friend lol. A short amount of writing long on humor. Another day brightener for your appreciative readers.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Thank you, FB, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from damommy
This is so cute. I love that you made it like a big shoot-out in the Old West. "Frontier garden law" and "new florist in town" - wonderful lines.
The artwork is perfect for this.
Very creative.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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This is so cute. I love that you made it like a big shoot-out in the Old West. "Frontier garden law" and "new florist in town" - wonderful lines.
The artwork is perfect for this.
Very creative.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Thank you, da, for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from mkflood
of all my illustrations and cartoons, the "Funnie Flowers" was the series that sky rocket me to "Traditional Artist of the Year" in 2014. oh i was always in the top 5 before that, but this series made me #1. After about 182 skits I gave it a rest to pursue other adventures but never forgot about my lil flower buddies and fans still ask when am I gonna bring them back. They also have a music video on youtube.com under the account "mkflood" if you get the time to check it out. However, your one of few writers here on fanstory that has selected them to be with your work. the flowers and I thank you for that. cute poem that works well with them. it is an honor to have my work included with yours. great job and thanks again..mkflood
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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of all my illustrations and cartoons, the "Funnie Flowers" was the series that sky rocket me to "Traditional Artist of the Year" in 2014. oh i was always in the top 5 before that, but this series made me #1. After about 182 skits I gave it a rest to pursue other adventures but never forgot about my lil flower buddies and fans still ask when am I gonna bring them back. They also have a music video on youtube.com under the account "mkflood" if you get the time to check it out. However, your one of few writers here on fanstory that has selected them to be with your work. the flowers and I thank you for that. cute poem that works well with them. it is an honor to have my work included with yours. great job and thanks again..mkflood
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Thank you for letting me draw some inspiration from your work.
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you get that writers block look for my work..i make over 600 illustrattions available to you writers and I am a story teller but I suck writer but I can always draw a good story..wink
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you get that writers block look for my work..i make over 600 illustrattions available to you writers and I am a story teller but I suck writer but I can always draw a good story..wink
Comment from Lena Borghi
Excellent use of metaphor in this tanka. Your pivot line gives it a seamless transition and your image is a perfect complement. Clever write!
Best wishes,
Lena
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Excellent use of metaphor in this tanka. Your pivot line gives it a seamless transition and your image is a perfect complement. Clever write!
Best wishes,
Lena
Comment Written 09-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2016
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Thank you, Lena, for the excellent review. Bill
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You're welcome, Bill. Lena
