Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "See/Saw"Dawn of Chaos
27 total reviews
Comment from F Scott Hafner
Love how the language flows and dances - but its meaning leaves me in the dust. If evoked emotion is your goal then well done - A deeper message to the less sophisticated like me is lost. I assume you are accustom to a sophisticated lot.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Love how the language flows and dances - but its meaning leaves me in the dust. If evoked emotion is your goal then well done - A deeper message to the less sophisticated like me is lost. I assume you are accustom to a sophisticated lot.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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No a bum. Maggot food soon. Maybe too much street talk is the problem not an appropriate language. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Seems poet is raving about evil and wrongdoings in the world and how he or she has to contend with bad characters in the world. Red dragons are perfect symbols of the evil that is fighting in the world against the good. NICE. liberty justice
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Seems poet is raving about evil and wrongdoings in the world and how he or she has to contend with bad characters in the world. Red dragons are perfect symbols of the evil that is fighting in the world against the good. NICE. liberty justice
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Justice prevailing watchers that rule over the affairs pertained to righteousness. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought.
Comment from Sherman541
Very in depth and so sadly true. There are many out there who do not believe in God and many that would only follow Satan. The world seems to be a turmoil and spinning faster every day. Sherman541
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Very in depth and so sadly true. There are many out there who do not believe in God and many that would only follow Satan. The world seems to be a turmoil and spinning faster every day. Sherman541
Comment Written 26-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2018
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Lucky for us, we are gods, able to endure the many unknown uncertainties we face. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
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You are so welcome ! Yes, some of us are very lucky, even though we do not always know it. :)
Comment from jdrhye
The flow and rhythm are good. The emotion is laced and intertwined in the winding of your words. A passion of a sense of right and wrong, reality is the proof that the world is changing and not for the better. To learn and believe, have faith. A very ponderous read that takes the reader to places often uncomfortable to visit and contemplate.
Enjoyed the read and the message conveyed.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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The flow and rhythm are good. The emotion is laced and intertwined in the winding of your words. A passion of a sense of right and wrong, reality is the proof that the world is changing and not for the better. To learn and believe, have faith. A very ponderous read that takes the reader to places often uncomfortable to visit and contemplate.
Enjoyed the read and the message conveyed.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Super response, statement touching views I cherished their made points. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
Comment from Katie Solis
I enjoyed how you kept the theme of teetering and tottering throughout your work. I had a difficult time trying to discern the meaning of some of your work, especially the first stanza putting it all together, notably "with pain had woes", and in the second to last stanza "by its cruel had the world" (was it supposed to be hand?) Overall I liked the balance to your work.
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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I enjoyed how you kept the theme of teetering and tottering throughout your work. I had a difficult time trying to discern the meaning of some of your work, especially the first stanza putting it all together, notably "with pain had woes", and in the second to last stanza "by its cruel had the world" (was it supposed to be hand?) Overall I liked the balance to your work.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Pits are my problems, I will consider your projected viewpoint. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
Comment from Ricky1024
"See/Saw" was well written with great theme and imagery.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Dr Ricky 1024.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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"See/Saw" was well written with great theme and imagery.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Dr Ricky 1024.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2018
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Glad some aspects was found pleasing, still seeking pits. Thanking you for your appreciated response.
Comment from Trudi Perkins
This is an awesome write and I really enjoyed this. It is a very interesting poem. Thanks for sharing your craft with us and I look forward to reading more of your writings.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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This is an awesome write and I really enjoyed this. It is a very interesting poem. Thanks for sharing your craft with us and I look forward to reading more of your writings.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Glad aspects of this write was found pleasing, slowly coming out from pits that pledge my writes. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought,
Comment from Kathy Allmon
I like how you state your position but admit you don't know everything. You made me think and I had to read it several times to understand. I will probably read it again just to make sure I get it all. Can't wait to read more of your work.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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I like how you state your position but admit you don't know everything. You made me think and I had to read it several times to understand. I will probably read it again just to make sure I get it all. Can't wait to read more of your work.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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This write gave a slight tingle inside you, your excitement is conveyed clearly. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting thought.
Comment from frierajac
I have to ask, if you really meant the word 'dome' at the end of the second to the last line? If you intend it it creates a problem for the reader who reads it as being irresponsible although the complete former text is a concerning diatrible
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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I have to ask, if you really meant the word 'dome' at the end of the second to the last line? If you intend it it creates a problem for the reader who reads it as being irresponsible although the complete former text is a concerning diatrible
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Wow, all that. My written intent was a covering over us in its given conveyance. I will consider your statement. Thanking you for your generous rate and splendid views.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A short sharp reminder of those who cannot live and let live and they themselves are open to evil which can exists in this world among many believers in other faiths. Unity is the key and allowing everyone to have their own opinions without hatred being levied at them. An interesting write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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A short sharp reminder of those who cannot live and let live and they themselves are open to evil which can exists in this world among many believers in other faiths. Unity is the key and allowing everyone to have their own opinions without hatred being levied at them. An interesting write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2018
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I'm pleased some aspects of this work found interest, pleased no mentioned flaws, hoping to improve by such given replies as yours. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching thoughts.
